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HELLO! PEOPLE OF ALL KINDS! Here's Chapter 1 of my new paper Mario game idea: Paper Mario: The Metora Kingdom! So... let's get on with it! Also, I decided to just do full paragraphs rather than shortening them just because, it's a little more structured that way
So, Starting chapter 1 in the Stardust Woods as you enter you see that the trees all have bright yellow-ish, with slight sparkle to them . Anyway, you make your may through the woods fighting some Eskoopots (They're koopa's with snail shells) and Leaflies, Spuckies and Octoombas. After this you will reach an area with a colourfully dressed Buzzy Beetle Eskoopot looking at a collapsed tree. The Buzzy Beetle then notices Mario and Mario notices the tree and asks what happened. The Buzzy Beetle explains that he is a traveller and came here to explore. However once he got to the woods he found the collapsed tree which was obstructing the path to Hubble Hamlet, which he says is his home town. However he does not know how the tree collapsed.
Mario and Octoombravo then ask if he knows about any Crown Jewels. The buzzy beetle hesitates but then says he’s never heard of them. He then introduces himself: his name is Trobuzza. He says that he thinks he might know another way into the village: by going around the woods and entering the village through someone’s back garden. Norahl gives the idea that someone in the hamlet may know about the Jewels. So Mario and Goombravo decide to follow Trobuzza to the village. So now you just have to go up north of the forest. Trobuzza will show you the way but you have to protect him from the enemies because if one attacks him then he'll run back to the previous area and you'll have to go back and get him.
Once you get so far Trobuzza will stop and tell you that the way into the hamlet is nearby. Just search a bush to the right and it will reveal a path for you to move on. Once you go through you come out on a bit of farm land, however most of the crops appear to be destroyed. Trobuzza sees the back of a house which leads him to think that they are now in Hubble Hamlet. They then enter the rest of the village through the back of the house, however, once they get out of the house they see that the entire village is being attacked by a species of Piranha Plants called Staranha Plants.
You now have to play a minigame where you hit the Staranha Plants with your hammer to get rid of them as they continuously move around the screen. After getting rid of most of them, a Spiky Staranha will appear who is quite angry and with this a battle infuses. Once the battle is over, The Spiky Staranha will disappear as well as all the Staranha Plants. The mayor and the other villagers will then thank you and ask how they can repay you. Mario then asks if they know anything of a Crown Jewel. (Trobuzza pulls a troubled face) The Mayor says that the closest thing he can think of about a Jewel is Koorupe's Ring. He explains that Koorupe is a Koopa who lives in the village who wears a golden rose shaped ring. Suddenly Norahl instantly knows that is one of the Royal Jewels simply known as the Golden Rose Ring, (Trobuzza then slowly walks away from the conversation without anyone noticing), Norahl asks where Koorupe is. The Mayor says that he is probably in his house to the far right of the Hamlet but he warns you that Koorupe is usually quite grumpy.
Now is a good time to actually explore the village, but to progress the plot just head to Koorupes house. When you enter the house no one appears to be in. However Norahl says that he can feel the presence of the ring close by so just keep searching. What you actually have to do is push a crate out the way to reveal a door on the ground. Once you open the door there is a staircase leading downwards into the basement. Go into the basement and you'll see a miserably koopa who is shocked to see that someone had found his basement. However he is also extremely angry to see that someone had just let them self into his house without permission.
Norahl notices that the koopa is wearing the Gold Rose Ring on his finger so he knows that he is Koorupe. Norahl explains that they need the ring but Koorupe then goes furious. Mario tries to calm him down. Norahl still tries to reason with Koorupe, but he isn’t having any of it. Octoombravo asks what he needs it for. Koorupe just says that it means a lot to him. Mario asks why, though at this point Koorupe is tired of being asked questions he decides to calm down and explain.
He begins to tell a story about his past: "Many years ago when I first moved to this hamlet, I fell in love with a koopa named Kupure. After knowing her for awhile, I wanted to propose to her but I had no ring. However one day I was out about in the woods when I saw a shiny gold ring on the floor. Though I didn’t know where it came from or whose it was, I decided to take it. With the ring I proposed to Kupure like I wanted to, and she accepted it. But one day, me and Kupure were out in the woods taking a walk when all of a sudden we were ambushed by a bunch of Staranha Plants. But worst of all, there was one huge one, Horrifying it was! I managed to escape but kupure... she was taken to their fortress, and now I have never seen her since. Not only that though... we had a son... but he abandoned me soon after the incident, and I’ve never seen him since either" Mario and co. now understand why he wants the ring but they still need the ring. Octoombravo then says "well, what if she's still alive?" Koorupe foolishly then says "THATS IT! I've had enough with this! How about we do this: I'll give you the ring if you can bring my fiancé! NOW SHOE! GET OUT!" Mario and co. are then kicked out the house.
Outside the house is Trobuzza who curiously asks about what happened? Mario and co. explain that his fiancé was taken by Staranha Plants and he'll only give the ring to them if he can see Kupure once again. Trobuzza understands and says that you should go talk to the mayor about it for more info. So, they head to the mayors house to talk to him.
Once in the house the mayor asks how it went... "Not well". The group explain what happened. The mayor understands but says "if you really want the ring and are positive that Kupure is still alive then you could try infiltrating the Thorn Fortress... Confused, Mario and co. wonder what he's talking about. He explains that the Thorn Fortress is a big castle north of the woods and that it used to be a checkpoint belonging to the Metora Kingdom, but with the kingdom gone it is now the home of the Staranha Plants and their master: Staramama. If Kurupe would be anywhere it would be there. However he warns you that it is surrounded with thorny vines all around it and that the place is swarming with Staranha Plants. But of course that's not enough to scare Mario and with that they set of to the Thorn Fortress. But before you can fully leave the village you are stopped by Trobuzza...
He looks rather sad. He slowly begins to talk: "Errmmm ergh... em... well you see... it's just... GRRRRAAAAGH! Forget it! I'm not a kid anymore!" He seems to be talking to himself. "Mario! I wish to come with you!" Mario and co. are surprised and ask why but the only answer they get is "I'll... tell you later, it’s just.... I'm an explorer and I love exploring, SO PLAESE! Take me with you" Mario accepts and with that Trobuzza joins your party as the 2nd party member (His ability is just like Koop’s and Kooper's abilities from the previous Paper Mario games). So putting Trobuzza's ability to use, you can progress to the north of the woods. Just like the mayor explained, the fortress is surrounded by Thorns. However using Trobuzza's ability you can hit switches over the gaps to create bridges to cross over the thorns. Once at the castle entrance you'll be greeted with a fight with another Spiky Staranha. After that you can enter the fortress and thus begins the first dungeon: the Thorn Fortress.
As you can imagine you'll be fighting a lot of Staranha plants in this dungeon. You'll be mostly collecting keys to open doors one of which leads to the basement where there are vines everywhere. However you then find a female koopa who is asleep rapped and tied up in vines. Norahl begins to wonder if that is Kupure. Suddenly some Staranha Plants enter the room and you have to fight them. The noise of the fight wakes up the Koopa and she asks who you are. Everyone introduces their selves except for Trobuzza who hides from her sight. Mario asks if her name is Kupure and she says yes but wonders how they know her name. Mario explains that they have come to rescue her. Kupure is grateful but says that she cannot escape from the vines. So you look around the fortress a little more looking for the sources of those vines so that you can whack them with your hammer to get rid of them.
(Every time you walk past Kupure with Trobuzza, he will automatically switch with Goombravo to hide)
Once you have got rid of the vines Kupure is freed. She thanks you when suddenly, the ground begins to shake and spiky tentacle like vines begin to come up through the ground. One of them grabs Kupure and takes her to the upper floor. You then have to chase it while avoiding all the vines. In the end, you chase it to the top of the castle but before you can go through the door, Trobuzza stops as he does not look to confident. He then reveals something he had been keeping from them the whole time: he is actually the son of Koorupe and Kupure.
He explains “Back when Kupure was taken by them, I always dreamt of infiltrating this fortress to save her, but it was too great of a task to do alone, but I just couldn’t stay in the hamlet; my dad... he was always mad, taking out his anger on me, which is why I didn’t want to see him in the village... and my mother... well, I just, it’s been so long... I didn’t want to meet her this way... anyway, after my dad became obsessed with that ring of his, I moved away and began exploring the wider world... I always hoped that one day; it would improve my strength enough for me to take on what lies behind this door...” Mario and Co. understand and try to cheer him up and persuade him that he can overcome his fear and with that you can enter the door leading to the boss...
At first it appears to be a large, dark, empty room. However Mario notices a small Staranha Plant head hanging down from the ceiling on a long vine. Whack it with your hammer and it begins to shake. it says "Owwiee! That hurt, who was that? You? WHAT DO YOU THINK YOU'RE DOING IN HERE?! This place is for Staranha Plants only! INTRUDER ALERT!" then some other Staranha plant heads similar to that one begin to come down and ask what's going on. When they see Mario they begin to say "MUMMY! WAKE UP!" And all of a sudden, a huge purple Staranha Plant with hundreds of spiky vines, falls down from the ceiling. It begins to talk and then pulls out Kupure in one of its vines. It talks some more and with that begins the Boss of Chapter one: Staramama.
After the battle it drops Kupure and begins to wither. Suddenly Koorupe enters the room and sees Kupure on the floor and runs up to her. Then Trobuzza slowly walks up to Koorupe. Koorupe sees him and says "Son? Is that you?" "...Yes... it is me" replies Trobuzza. Kupure wakes up and sees Trobuzza and Koorupe. She hugs them both and says that she has never felt happier. Koorupe explains that he was told by one of the villagers that he saw Trobuzza and that he was heading to the Thorn Fortress, and so Kurupe rushed to the castle as quickly as possible.
Trobuzza then walks up to Staramama and asks why she kidnapped Kupure. She explains "The ring was originally ours... Several years ago, it fell from the sky. We passed on the ring to the next Staranha Plant leader, as the ring allowed us to provide food and energy with its powers but one day it got lost and it was Koorupe who found it. We came to him one day and asked him politely to have it back but he declined it in fear of our appearance and ran off. We tried again, but he was always too scared to talk to us formally... We figured that the only way to get it back was to do it by force, and thus we stole his fiancé, but he still wouldn't give in, since he never talked to us to find out we did what we did. So, to provide enough food we begin eating and stealing the crops of Hubble Hamlet that the villagers made... and yet he still never understood why this was happening to him... we had no choice you see?"
Koorupe apologies and describes a strange feeling that came from the ring; that he couldn't give the ring back, as if it was so powerful that he couldn't let go off it. He then walks up to Mario and apologises for yelling at him earlier. However suddenly the ring on his finger begins to glow and talk. Koorupe takes it off and listens to it. A women’s voice speaks and says "Hey chill out both of you! I don't belong to either of you; I belong to the Metora Kingdom and nothing else!" Staramama then gets angry because she needs it to provide food. But Koorupe comes up with a solution and makes a deal with Staramama saying that they will share the crops that they make in exchange for them not attacking the Hamlet, and them helping out. Staramama agrees and with that Koorupe gives Mario the Gold Rose Ring thus triggering the END OF CHAPTER sequence and that concludes chapter one. YOU GOT A CROWN JEWEL!
Interludes
The game then goes to the Peach and Bowser interludes: In the Peach interlude you find out that Peach is locked up in a jail cell in some sort of high tech base in the Starflake Pinnicles. In the cell opposite to Peach, is a women who looks similar to Darameana. She introduces herself: her name is Medreana. She tells Peach that she was locked up by Darameana and Delumer. She also explains that Darameana is her brother. A strange Doopla Ghost wearing a wizard hat then enters the room and says hello to Medreana but asks who Peach is. Medreana tells Peach that "This is Dooplund" and explains that secretly lets Medreana her out of her cell to find out Darameana's plans but Darameana doesn't know this. Dooplund says that he'll let them both out to find out some information about Darameana and Delumer. She also explains that "Darameana made a deal with the army of the nearby Yeast Kingdom to help him achieve his goals; they built this base over the Star Shrine and used it as their stronghold. Me and Dooplund were here far before now and when they attacked they made Dooplund into their servant".
With that, Dooplund lets you out your cells with his magic so you can to explore parts of the base using Dooplund’s ability to transform you into the guards so that they won't notice you. You come across Darameana and Delumer talking and you stop to listen. You hear them talking about Mario and the Crown Jewels and how he is apparently collecting them. But Darameana while he appears to know what they are, he doesn't see why Mario would possibly need them. Dooplund tells Peach and Medreana that they should head back to their cells now. One the way back Medreana tells Peach that she knows about the Crown Jewels and says that she remembers hearing about a Necklace being found in a desert called the Sparkling Sands but that's all she knows and thus concludes the Peach interlude
For the Bowser Interlude Bowser is in his castle and Kammy Koopa tells him that Peach was kidnapped by someone else in Metora. With that Bowser gets in his Koopa Clown Cart and travels to Metora as he's mad that someone else kidnapped Peach but that's all for the Bowser Interlude.
Meanwhile back in Stardust Woods with Mario, Koorupe and Kupure decide to get re-married soon and Trobuzza says that he wants to continue travelling with Mario so he can live a life of adventure but he will of course be there for the wedding when it takes place. The spirit of the Gold Rose Ring also introduces herself properly, she tells you to call her Florina; she explains that she thinks all of the Crown Jewels have spirits trapped inside but can't remember how they got there. But with that, Mario and Co. set off to find the next Crown Jewel...
YEAH! That was Chapter 1 folks! What did ya think? Please comment for some appreciated feedback! Alright, ta-tah!
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Comments: 12
BomBot2 [2016-02-22 20:10:10 +0000 UTC]
nice start, though how exactly can koopas have a buzzy beetle as a son? (did i miss something)
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ProtoTypedKnife In reply to BomBot2 [2016-02-23 16:33:09 +0000 UTC]
I... erm... just don't ask XD
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TenshiHarmonia [2014-05-09 12:02:02 +0000 UTC]
You didn't revise chapter 1's plot... If I remember well the one from Fantendo.
I like the location of this very part : I love this idea of star-themed flora. Though having said this, I expected a more holy-like forest area.
Even so, a detail intrigue me : why isn't it a "always night" area ?
The boss remind me that freaky Mom Piranha (Mario & Luigi: Superstar Saga, I love this game). About her, I wonder : as each flower bud have its own design, have they proper powers (fire for the rufous, poison for the skeleton...) ?
About characters, I like Kupure design (mainly her springly hat, really nice).
Do you think revise chapter 2's plot ? Or want you keep things like they are ?
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ProtoTypedKnife In reply to TenshiHarmonia [2014-05-09 14:56:33 +0000 UTC]
For the most part the plot is the same, but I did add some extra details in there such as why Trobuzza left the hamlet, as well as a few other plot holes I felt needed filling.
Thanks, but what exactly do you mean by "Holy-Like Forest"?
Well, actually, every area can be both night and day; there's a time system in the game so areas can be played during the day or night, although there are some points in the game where night and day will change automatically. Even so though, I don't reallt think the very 1st chapter should take place at night.
Yeah, I original called it "Octo-Piranha" as a sort of 3D Mario boss, but then made it into "Piranhmama", and finally "Staramama". And yes, each head does have different attacks: The grey one shoots spikes, the putrid one can poison you, the regular one just bites you and the red one can burn you with fireballs.
And thanks! I don't plan to change Chapter 2 much, apart from a few small details such as why the Strealoids want to take over or should I say, take back their kingdom... as I say though, the only chapters that will change a lot are Chapters 3, 4 and 5
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TenshiHarmonia In reply to ProtoTypedKnife [2014-05-09 16:09:37 +0000 UTC]
I was just thinking that star themed places in fact almost always act as some sanctums in Super Mario game : Star Haven, Star Shrine...
I know there is some exceptions even so, like the Stardust Fields.
And I also had Somnom Woods in mind : forest places can engender a very solemn ambiance.
An I really like serene or solemn places : it's more hilarous to down it mayhem (and yes, I understood ho to make smiley !).
I have myself though of a time ring (dawn, day, dusk, night) : I prefered remove it, it wasn't good...
Some part will happen at different time period, but not as part of the very gameplay.
If I remember well, there wasn't plot line about this, I mean the "take back their kingdom" thing, in the Fantendo version.
I cannot wait to read this, as for chapters 3/4/5.
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ProtoTypedKnife In reply to TenshiHarmonia [2014-05-09 16:45:33 +0000 UTC]
I see what you mean but in this game, literally EVERY area is star themed! The whole kingdom is based on the stars, so this is only one star themed area in a kingdom full of them, keeping in mind there are areas such as the "Star Shrine" (I just realise there's already an area called that ) on Moonflake Peak which has that "holy" aura around it.
Well, as I say, first chapter; should be pretty basic for Paper Mario standards, so it doesn't really need that mysterious feel, although it does still have a calm feel to it
...Wait, what are you talking about? I don't get it... context pls? XD
Yeah, the Strealoids original owned what they called "Strealot", and the shamans lived in the desert, but when Metora came together, the Strealoids didn't really have their own kingdom because they weren't as hostile anymore, so no one really owned the city. But when the Metora Kingdom fell, the Shamans settled in the Strealoids old home and called it "Merlot", since the Strealoids had lost track of their home.
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TenshiHarmonia In reply to ProtoTypedKnife [2014-05-09 19:26:50 +0000 UTC]
Oh it's true, I forgot about it. Anyway it just was some needless personal reflections.
Don't care about and just forget them. Forget also the things about the time ring, I was just thinking about my paper mario.
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ProtoTypedKnife In reply to TenshiHarmonia [2014-05-09 19:33:23 +0000 UTC]
Oh I see, okay then thanks for the feedback
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Fedecomics [2014-05-08 22:03:48 +0000 UTC]
violet color of this piranha plant
reminds me of my carnivorous flower drawing
fav.me/d6yrgji
ezequielsosa.deviantart.com/ar… ^w^
sorry
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ProtoTypedKnife In reply to Fedecomics [2014-05-09 06:14:31 +0000 UTC]
It's okay! Thanks, nice picture there ^^
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Fedecomics In reply to ProtoTypedKnife [2014-05-09 15:42:06 +0000 UTC]
you're welcome friend!!! XD thanks ^w^
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