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When you no longer feelthe desire to rise
on mornings when the bed
is the only comfort
a man can have,
I will rise for you.
I will carry your body,
your heavy heart
and all worries that burden your mind
to the edge,
where a friend may idle in uncertainty
and I will not let you fall.
As the months of Winter
clench cold fingers around your throat
bringing loneliness
and the shortening of days,
I will feed you
spoonfuls of fire and compassion
enough medicine to warm and get you through.
I will not let you sink
beneath the quicksand
of time
of age
of hopelessness.
I will be the vine you grasp
when hands are not strong enough
to pull you from the evils
that you yourself
create.
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Comments: 25
Archaia [2009-05-14 14:59:39 +0000 UTC]
Beautifully said and candid. Your Friend is fortunate to have a friend like you.
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PulseofExistence In reply to Archaia [2009-06-29 19:36:37 +0000 UTC]
Thank you very much.
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ChristofLehmann [2009-05-07 18:37:24 +0000 UTC]
Very, very beautiful, passionate, and compassionate work.
I particularly like the following:
As the months of Winter
clench cold fingers around your throat
bringing loneliness
and the shortening of days,
I will feed you
spoonfuls of fire and compassion
enough medicine to warm and get you through.
Wonderful.
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PulseofExistence In reply to ChristofLehmann [2009-05-10 18:44:43 +0000 UTC]
Thank you very much. I put a lot of emotion into this one, when you're writing for another...it seems you must put all that you can into the piece.
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ChristofLehmann In reply to PulseofExistence [2009-05-10 19:03:05 +0000 UTC]
Thats of course one way of operating. I usually put a lot of efford into everything I publish - some of my work takes several months before itΒ΄s completed and before IΒ΄m satisfied with it. But then, I am also selling some of it and people expect to get something for their money.
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DarkRiderDLMC [2009-03-02 03:20:56 +0000 UTC]
I am not sure anyone is that deserving, but I am sure this is magnificent.
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PulseofExistence In reply to DarkRiderDLMC [2009-03-10 02:37:18 +0000 UTC]
Thank you very much.
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StreamofConci0usness [2009-03-01 22:52:25 +0000 UTC]
I have no words that can portray how i feel after reading this. Jay, you are truly a friends that can never be replaced. Please, don't ever stop writing, and never let gravity weigh you down.
Thank you for this Beautiful poem. The smile it gives me is eternal.
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PulseofExistence In reply to StreamofConci0usness [2009-03-02 00:37:46 +0000 UTC]
I know it doesn't mean as much anymore, but thank you none the less.
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PulseofExistence In reply to Progress-Regress [2009-01-05 02:53:12 +0000 UTC]
Haha, I'm not amazing...I just love writing. Thanks, though.
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midnightINK [2008-12-19 11:57:43 +0000 UTC]
i think this is a fantastic piece. utterly amazing. while i'm an odd ball that enjoys winter over summer any day, this piece and the way it's written is gorgeous. very much inspiring.
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PulseofExistence In reply to midnightINK [2008-12-19 19:00:32 +0000 UTC]
Thank you, I'm so happy you enjoyed it.
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FinalPunishment [2008-12-19 10:47:07 +0000 UTC]
My fear is drowning... drowning in so many ways... this poem gives me hope that some will be there to save me
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PulseofExistence In reply to FinalPunishment [2008-12-19 19:03:40 +0000 UTC]
I'm glad. If I can reach out to even just one person, it's worth it. Thank you for having hope and for reading my work, keep on truckin' and life will work itself out.
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Feed-The-Dark [2008-12-17 20:52:14 +0000 UTC]
Two lonely souls in a sandstorm of loneliness. Great work. As usual there is nothing more I can say because I'm to busy re-reading your poem and marveling at your skill with the pen.
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PulseofExistence In reply to Feed-The-Dark [2008-12-19 19:05:46 +0000 UTC]
Thanks man, it means a lot coming from you. I value your opinion quite bit.
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DragonsChest [2008-12-08 22:05:46 +0000 UTC]
Whether long lines or short, free verse, or structured, the very best poetry comes from the heart. That is what makes this and all of your poetry such a pleasure to read. Well done...
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PulseofExistence In reply to DragonsChest [2008-12-12 21:24:02 +0000 UTC]
Awh, thank you. You've no idea how much your kind praise means to me.
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the-poetic-bum [2008-12-08 01:51:41 +0000 UTC]
I like it! Shorter lines, can convey strong meaning.
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PulseofExistence In reply to the-poetic-bum [2008-12-08 03:03:29 +0000 UTC]
--laughs-- Thanks, I'm beginning to see that. A beautiful Spanish poet helped me to see.
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PulseofExistence In reply to kiwi-damnation [2008-12-08 03:03:38 +0000 UTC]
Thank you.
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