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There is no need forsilences lacking comfort,
protected by your cinched gaze
I can let my
exterior fall where
it may please
and become part of
your human inferno.
Wandering your
corridor of bones
I listen for the echoes
of imperfection,
yet all that graces
my ears is the
pounding of your
infallible disposition.
Though I try to
hide all that I am
you coax me from my
subterranean shelter
with the ease of one
who barely has to try-
your flame licks along
my jaw line,
a reminder that it's okay
to feel alive.
Let this dream carry me
to all that is foreign
and unbearably
immaculate-
I haven't the will
to wake up.
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Comments: 10
PulseofExistence In reply to SweetBlackRose13 [2010-03-07 17:08:52 +0000 UTC]
Ohoho, I'm enjoying you enjoying me enjoying the man. It's a good life.
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DragonsChest [2010-02-17 07:08:08 +0000 UTC]
'Your flame licks along my jawline.' Goodness Jay, if that aint poetry, I don't know what is...
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PulseofExistence In reply to DragonsChest [2010-02-21 22:51:50 +0000 UTC]
--grins-- Thank you, I'm glad you think so.
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Feed-The-Dark [2010-02-16 12:33:26 +0000 UTC]
Great poem, I like the progression throughout it. At first scared suspicious, searching for flaws, then coaxed out of your doubt of finding love, and finally, happiness. Very interesting. I'm glad you've found someone worthy of you.
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PulseofExistence In reply to Feed-The-Dark [2010-02-21 22:52:33 +0000 UTC]
Thank you so much. I actually like this poem a lot, and I'm glad too.
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Leurindal [2010-02-15 21:41:36 +0000 UTC]
I love the primeval feeling that phrases like 'corridor of bones' and 'pounding' convey, culminating in the beautiful metaphor 'subterranean shelter'.
A wonderful poem, Jay
(Sorry for my absence - been away for some time. It's lovely to be back and read your poetry )
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PulseofExistence In reply to Leurindal [2010-02-21 22:53:17 +0000 UTC]
Thank you very much, Monsieur. And no worries in regards to your absence, I'm just happy to have ya back.
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