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page 4And so Willis's interest is piqued with a great discovery... and also breakfast was ruined XP
Parfey: Oh no... T-T
3rd page: [link]
Willis and Parfey belong to
OCT belongs to
EDIT: added logo and the line "This may prove interesting..." on last panel.
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it has a good parts
its a bit rushed,
I do like the dailogue, its simple, and yet very easy to read
YOU DID GOOD
just next time dont rush the story so much
GOOD LUCK MY LOVE
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I got that feeling too about fluidity too 
I'm not sure how to fix it though...
Thanks for your input ^^
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like...make it more spaced out
like show him getting eaten by the worm and little details work too
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Well... I didn't make it in though... If only there were 4 more entries
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ah welll./...
theres always more
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Indeed 
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MAYBE I CAN ENTER ONE WIFF YEW lol
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Well, here are the 3 OCTs I'm looking into:
, , and
I've already got some of the work done for NetworkJail down with this new character, and I'm planning to have a new duo-team for HH ^^
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haha SWEET
maybe ill enter HH wiff you or somethin XD
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HUZZAHS
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it's geting more interesting,please continued please
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Well, if I get in, it sure will ^^
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i waiting then,good luck for the SoA entry
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Thank you very much.
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i really liked this story! i what to see how it will continue!
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That's why I hope to get in... Ever since my first OCT, I've never had any luck after it closed during the second round... I'm cursed or something, or I just suck more than the competition XP
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oooh i wanted to fight with you so baadly! 
this is totally unfair...
you don't suck!
...would you mind if i use the same type of giant worm you used here in my story?
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Well, I know I would have made it in if they had stuck it being 64 
And I don't mind at all ^^ I should really make a ref sheet of my lil Wyrm Worm creature and see if others in the contest would like 'em too XD
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aww... i wanted to fight against you
cool!
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Again I like the three pannels! I wish I could pull myself together to make backgrounds like you, and I think it's a good idea to have at least some sort of background in every page... Mmmm... Ahaha, I only now realized that they have a simular hairstyle - this is not a bad thing, but for stupid readers (/there are a lot of them/) this can sometimes be a bit confusing. So it's good that they have very different clothing
Mmm... should I comment on the pages or the drawing style? Mm... we should perhaps take a lesson in drawing hands together - hands are really hard to draw, but when you suceed they add really much to your drawing and to the characters' expression! I force myself to draw them as much as possible, because they are so important :/
Else I think you're doing a really good job on these!Parfeys face in the second pannel looks a bit flat though - When drawing a person in profile it's nice to look at other people - you'd notice that the eyes is places a bit deeper in the face : )
I LOVE her expression in the first pannel xD It's so nice and fresh and her pose works so well with her words! And I love her side-comment: "Also, my name is Parfey" xD
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Backgrounds ARE important, but sometimes you can get away with not adding one in some instances... And I was thinking about their hair, but I made sure Parfey's frontal hair didn't fall like Willis's. He's supposed to look more sinister or more innocent with those large bangs, depending on his personality. As for her's it's supposed to be more focused on the back and looks more cared for.
I LIKE my hands... but I do feel up for change XP Too simple for action scenes... As for the profile... I know, I failed Was in a rush.
But besides being Willis's main source of information on the island, Parfey is also ditsy and a good source of humor in these intermission comics I'm making XD They don't serve an actual purpose, but may explain some things while making you laugh. Think of them as deleted scenes I didn't have time to work into my entry to make it flow as much.
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Nice!
Oh my, I didn't mean that I didn't like your hands! It may simply be my wierd taste that came into the conversation :,D I'm so sorry if it offended you or made you sad D:
Ahaha, I love Parfey <3
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Indeed.
It's not that, I just agreed that I do need to change how I draw hands. I'm used to drawing them like this, but I know something more close to real hands will work better for this XP Action + chibi hands = not as serious... I wasn't mad or sad at all ^^'
You'll be glad then, since I'm thinking of adding her to Willis's story in future points, even after the tourney XD
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I'm glad~ :3
I see! Thank you~
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Of course ^^
And I was sort of planning on it anyways. He has this thing about... interesting people
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