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Description This misery echoes in me
Apart from consciousness declined
I'm half awake inside a dream
and spreading out along this crime

Apart from consciousness declined
There must be something to be feared
and spreading out along this crime
A miracle has disappeared

There must be something to be feared
to keep us peons satisfied
A miracle has disappeared
Amongst us all so terrified

To keep us peons satisfied
We must have hope which hides in dreams
Amongst us all so terrified
This misery echoes in me
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Comments: 10

BulletProofPrincess [2006-05-01 01:29:23 +0000 UTC]

I really envy people who can write
fixed poetry and all the other stuff.
I have tried to ,but I suck at it.
I love to write open.
I'm lame. Lol.
I hope I learn someday though.
Overall this is a great poem.
<3

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Pyroclasticataclysm In reply to BulletProofPrincess [2006-05-01 03:55:06 +0000 UTC]

Thank you for the compliment on the poem.
I wasn't certain I was any good at this fixed business...
The only fixed poetry I'd ever written before this past week was a haiku about spam.

Canned meat byproduct
Jelly; fried delicousness
Don't you want some now?

Now THAT's lame!

It's good to know your strengths and flaws, but if you want to be good at something else, just work on it.
I know I've got plenty more work to do.
And thanks again.

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BulletProofPrincess In reply to Pyroclasticataclysm [2006-05-01 04:07:22 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome.
It's not lame..it's practice.
Lol.

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Pyroclasticataclysm In reply to BulletProofPrincess [2006-05-01 11:00:07 +0000 UTC]

Ha ha!

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dying-in-your-arms [2006-04-29 14:41:17 +0000 UTC]

really good

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Pyroclasticataclysm [2006-04-29 12:40:40 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, apart from mentioning "echoes" I really couldn't think of how to get the repetition to work for me. It's not my favorite style but it was fun to use and I'll play with it again I'm sure.
Thanks for your imput.

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drillvoice [2006-04-29 12:31:17 +0000 UTC]

Wow. Way to have some crazy poetic style and make it work really well. The repitition is not as powerful as it could be, but I still really like this.

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Pyroclasticataclysm In reply to drillvoice [2006-04-29 12:50:04 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, apart from mentioning "echoes" I really couldn't think of how to get the repetition to work for me. It's not my favorite style but it was fun to use and I'll play with it again I'm sure.
Thanks for your imput.

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drillvoice In reply to Pyroclasticataclysm [2006-04-29 12:58:05 +0000 UTC]

I have just done a Pantun as well! Make sure to submit it on the actual forum.

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Pyroclasticataclysm In reply to drillvoice [2006-04-29 13:49:37 +0000 UTC]

Didn't I ?
Shite.

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