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This is my first time colouring a comic like this...
Honestly, I was opting for either A or D [link]
But then I tried this yesterday and it doesn't take too long to do...

This is my practice comic and I'm learning more and more as I go. That said, any help you can give me would be very much appreciated! So tell me what you think.
Personally, I have a few issues with the layout and pacing and I'm working to get better with those things..

I'll replace this with an English version of the page later D:
Oh! et merci ~GrandK pour l'aide :B

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EDIT// English version. I added a gradient type thing and changed some of the wording a bit for the English adaptation..

also: is anyone else's message centre majorly freaking out? Mine's telling me I don't have messages that I DO have and telling me I do have messages I DON'T have! D: wtf??

I'll probably upload the French version and the rest of the new pages I've done to my sketchblog later..

Description
This is my first time colouring a comic like this...
Honestly, I was opting for either A or D [link]
But then I tried this yesterday and it doesn't take too long to do...

This is my practice comic and I'm learning more and more as I go. That said, any help you can give me would be very much appreciated! So tell me what you think.
Personally, I have a few issues with the layout and pacing and I'm working to get better with those things..

I'll replace this with an English version of the page later D:
Oh! et merci ~GrandK pour l'aide :B

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EDIT// English version. I added a gradient type thing and changed some of the wording a bit for the English adaptation..

also: is anyone else's message centre majorly freaking out? Mine's telling me I don't have messages that I DO have and telling me I do have messages I DON'T have! D: wtf??

I'll probably upload the French version and the rest of the new pages I've done to my sketchblog later..