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Twenty first page.The Usual: Part 3
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What will be the focus of your endeavors now? Part 4 or part 2.5? We all eagerly await on baited breath for what the future may hold.Β
I'm just sayin
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The possibilities are, like, endless.
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I noticed that your username is named after the pyruvate molecules that form once a glucose molecule is broken down in the cytoplasm as it approaches the mitochondria.
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AM I the first to notice Lyra?
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Best pone is always noticed.
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Seems like someone like torture a bit too much? lol
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Are we going to get to see AJ and Flutters all scared up?Β Β Previous beatings shouldn't just be tossed off as "that didn't happen".Β Where are the marks?Β Where are the ponies looking at Flutters and AJ in the market place muttering "what happened to her"?Β Please consider this if you're going to continue this series.
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as far as I had seen... there wasn't actually any striking involved... just lots of forced orgasming.
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Ok, maybe not a LOT of striking, but what there was left a mark.Β
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You're asking an awful lot from a pr0n story.
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Maybe you're right, but is it wrong to want a pr0n story to have a consistent internal logic?Β
Maybe it is.
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THAT left a mark, and if you're into humiliation, that mark is an OPPORTUNITY.Β It makes me wonder if Flutters walks around the market place as ponies are staring at her scars.Β Does that get her off, do you think?Β Β Would AJ think the same way?
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This is a Β pr0n story involving candy-colored ponies....Do you honestly think that "logic" would be on anybody's mind right now?
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A pr0n story is still a story, and any story that is worth a lick should be made with a bit of craftsmanship... no matter if it is meant to be wank material or not.Β Is it wrong to want a wank story to have consistent internal logic (not to be confused with logic that normal people would use, but just logic that the characters would use)?Β If you think it's too much to ask for, then ok.Β But remeber, there are stories that rise to that occasion.Β
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Of course it's not wrong, but ask yourself. Would the majority care?Β
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Sorry about that.Β I was pretty drunk last night, and when that happens I tend to ramble incoherently about story quality and grammar.Β It got so bad that people stopped inviting me to parties.Β
Anyway, yeah, you're right.Β Most wouldn't care if the story was about a disco dance-off on mars, just as long as there was sexy time thrown in.Β
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LOL MARS I SEE WHAT YOU DID THERE XD
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It could, but I don't want to make it too freaky.
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the end!
or is really the end?
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Ah dude, are you telling me that AJ may act as a slave in the future, since she really liked this guilty pleasure, or she is too strong for that?
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Sick. Nothing contradicts this headcanon that AJ has her private times with her mistress Rarity.
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Best pone will have to wait.
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I can't wait either! Yay! I love your style! Good job, dear.
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Only two slides? You now to keep people waiting.
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and now we wait for the usual 2.5, and the usual 4.
i know you will do a great job
oh, and nice detail in the flanks
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Hehee, this gonna be interesting!
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LYRA IS BEST PONE.
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I Agree that She is Amazing.
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I cant wait for the next chapter!
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