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Published: 2007-02-03 05:18:31 +0000 UTC; Views: 372; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 5
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Even through a simple moment's glance,Your smile stays, trailing smoke screens in my head.
And while your frozen image seems to dance,
I can't recall a single word I said.
Why is it every time you're standing by
I have no single thought that I can share?
And every time, no matter how I try,
My wits depart, and leave me helpless there.
You open up my heart with but a touch.
The keys are yours to do with what you may.
And though this blind devotion may seem much,
I only wait to hear what you will say.
But though you must see wonder in my eyes,
I fear you may be deaf to lovesick sighs.
Comments: 14
QuicksilverScion [2007-12-01 06:15:50 +0000 UTC]
Nice work, love. Oh yeah, and I've now got DA account. Surprise!
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blackeyedbirdy [2007-02-07 04:08:29 +0000 UTC]
Fucking beautiful. Like seriously, the first part is great, and it seems to a new, almost eaperimental feel about it. I actually love this so much.
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qahthrrynne In reply to blackeyedbirdy [2007-02-07 22:06:16 +0000 UTC]
Awww, thanks hon! I don't actually like the feel of this one as much as some of my other pieces. It feels too modern and informal, which just doesn't work for me, with the sonnet format.
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kagami-gakure In reply to qahthrrynne [2007-02-05 02:25:44 +0000 UTC]
It's so jaw-dropping I can't manage a coherent response?
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qahthrrynne In reply to kagami-gakure [2007-02-05 18:46:22 +0000 UTC]
Really? I didn't like it much...
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canaryinthemineshaft [2007-02-04 16:28:26 +0000 UTC]
I agree with the above comments. ^^ Your words really DO come from your soul, and...wow I'm taking to long to figure out how to say how much I love your writing. XP But honestly, I was smiling as I read this, and I'm still smiling when I think about it. 'u' Beautiful!
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qahthrrynne In reply to canaryinthemineshaft [2007-02-04 18:48:20 +0000 UTC]
Thank you! I'm glad you like it so much!
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Snurflets [2007-02-03 17:43:24 +0000 UTC]
I agree with Meg. That first verse... Genius. You don't do enough writing.
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qahthrrynne In reply to Snurflets [2007-02-03 21:20:47 +0000 UTC]
Thank you. You don't do enough art.
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padfootmoony-grl [2007-02-03 13:43:55 +0000 UTC]
Then you need a hug It's beautiful. Everything to write is beautiful... *sighs* I wish I had your talant! I love how your words seem to come right from your soul... ~love.
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