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I wanted to put a fight sequence in a chapter that's mostly dramatic foreshadowing and dialogue.@~[AOD]
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darknessesbane [2011-10-22 05:51:14 +0000 UTC]
Chop to throat is potentially lethal, but hey, that's in character.
My problem is with panel 2, where she's leaning in. That punch would have no power, plus every single time I've made that mistake in Karate sparring, it's resulted in a sore nose and damaged glasses (IE getting socked in the face).
In this fight, Coral is doing a much better job then her opponent, not over extending, but instead working her way inside her opponent's guard.
Note: to throat chop from that angle while in front of the person, you'd have to lift your elbow fairly high up, exposing your lower torso and side.
Note no2: That head protection would be more appropriate if kicking to the head was involved - otherwise in my experience it's disorienting and restrictive.
To parallel this fight to karate sparring, I'd sum it up as a frustrated, strength dependant learner, encumbered by protective material fighting against an arrogant person of higher skill (Coral, in this case) who is in no mood whatsoever to be instructive and is perhaps even toying with them.
But hey, that's just my interpretation.
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kilian777 [2011-10-22 05:15:01 +0000 UTC]
No offence, but your fight sequences are a little confusing.
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Qt75Rx1 In reply to kilian777 [2011-10-22 05:29:02 +0000 UTC]
Hmm... what is confusing about it?
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kilian777 In reply to Qt75Rx1 [2011-10-23 04:39:33 +0000 UTC]
Well, I would think it would be best to show their positions preceding, during, or proceeding an attack. You do them all at once and I am kind of unsure which way the movements actually go.
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Qt75Rx1 In reply to kilian777 [2011-10-23 05:19:16 +0000 UTC]
Ahhh I see. I'll try to change that in the future. A lot of the time this is due to my wanting to fit too many movements into too few panels.
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kilian777 In reply to Qt75Rx1 [2011-10-23 21:04:12 +0000 UTC]
hurray! I made an effective critique!
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