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Published: 2011-02-21 22:30:03 +0000 UTC; Views: 191; Favourites: 8; Downloads: 0
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Description There are many ways
To hurt someone.

I'll take your hand
I'll take your heart
I'll reach inside
And take your soul

These are some of the ways
I would protect you.
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RandomRed - Sketches from memory
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RiddlesAndRhymes [2011-02-21 23:12:05 +0000 UTC]

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RandomRed In reply to RiddlesAndRhymes [2011-02-21 23:15:57 +0000 UTC]

Don't be sad. I mean every word of it. :]

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RiddlesAndRhymes In reply to RandomRed [2011-02-21 23:18:04 +0000 UTC]

It's sad ;(

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RandomRed In reply to RiddlesAndRhymes [2011-02-21 23:20:37 +0000 UTC]

I prefer to think of it as hopeful :]

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RiddlesAndRhymes In reply to RandomRed [2011-02-21 23:22:02 +0000 UTC]

..And sad :3

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Calin-4 [2011-02-21 23:06:00 +0000 UTC]

This is wonderfully written. I love the simplicity to it, but it still has a sense of power as well. Nice.

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RandomRed In reply to Calin-4 [2011-02-21 23:09:09 +0000 UTC]

Thankyou so much :] That's what was in my mind when I wrote it, to be simple and short and yet not quite straight to the point. It seemed to have more of an effect that way :]

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Calin-4 In reply to RandomRed [2011-02-21 23:14:19 +0000 UTC]

You are very welcome.
It really does. I mean, peotry is best written when raw and true.

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RandomRed In reply to Calin-4 [2011-02-21 23:17:23 +0000 UTC]

Agreed. I always try to spend as little time as possible writing each piece and then try to get them uploaded straight away. That way I don't feel like it was premeditated. It was just what I was thinking at the time, and it feels more honest to me when done that way.

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Calin-4 In reply to RandomRed [2011-02-22 00:34:00 +0000 UTC]

So long as you do not overthink when you are writing...I find an obsticle there. However, not bothering to read over and edit may hurt you too. Just grammer and spelling really needs to be looked back at, not here though.
It is just that sometimes when people start to write something really raw, they stumble over their words and the work is just confusing.

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RandomRed In reply to Calin-4 [2011-02-22 00:36:35 +0000 UTC]

I'm generally good with words and stuff and I think fast so for this particular piece I thought about what I wanted it to be for about 15 seconds then spent about 30 seconds writing it. I always check them for spelling errors and stuff and read them to make sure I am actually happy with them :]

I'll always edit anything i'm not happy with, I just don't like to spend too long on any one bit or it feels too tailored.

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Calin-4 In reply to RandomRed [2011-02-23 00:39:27 +0000 UTC]

Whatever works for you. Every writter has there own style...who am I to impose?
Tailored work is never nice to read, it seems too stressed. So write what feels right. But sometimes a litle editting goes a long way.

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