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Published: 2018-08-14 22:16:36 +0000 UTC; Views: 829; Favourites: 13; Downloads: 8
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Okay first attempt at a possible ongoing storyline. Not doing speech bubbles or dialogue boxes(for now).Virago one my size changing heroines is having a discussion before leaving her two kids
Virago: Okay kids be good mommy has a mission in alternate dimension. So I'll probably be home late(assuming I make it). Daddy's asleep so try not to make a lot of noise. If I'm not back by 4 wake him up and he can order takeout.
Outburst: Sure thing mommy!
Benji: Can we go outside and play?
Virago: Only if your dad says ok but don't wake him too early. Also no super-heroics you two are still in training.
Benji: But what if say theoretically something happens and we have to save to day!?
Virago: "(In a more motherly tone) If you don't do as I say there will more than a theoretical punisment little boy"
Just then Outburst pinches her brother.
Benji: "Ouch!"
Outburst: "Don't worry mom we'll be good I'll make sure of it." she says with innocent smile.
Meanwhile outside Saya, Princess and Green Gene wait impatiently for Virago to leave.
Saya: "Did she leave yet?!"
Princess: "No not yet" she whispered. "But keep it down she doesn't have super hearing but she's not deaf".
Green Gene: "Give me sec I'll use my telepathy to link us up to Benji & Outburst." "Better hide our presence from any passers by as well."
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Comments: 8
Hello, I'm from ProjectComment .
Well this is rather interesting. I like how you have things rendered here, it looks great. There is soft lighting and it’s easy on the eyes. The interior lighting and the exterior lighting in both panels looks great- I like how they’re different and we can tell they’re two different scenes. I’m assuming you made the 3d models yourself, and if that’s the case they look very good. Very detailed as well.
The first problem I see is that the characters seem to be floating a bit. You have shadows and what not on the walls and objects, but none beneath the characters, especially in the top panel. Try to add some in to go with your scene, it’ll help it out a bit better and make everything look solid.
The next suggestion would be to have a bigger gap between panels. And maybe a different color, as the white strip of the gutter blends too easily with the window pane, making it look as if they’re one. The last suggestion would be to make who’s speaking a bit more obvious, especially with the bottom panel. This is a must for newcomers who pop up and don’t know the characters yet.
Overall you did a great job on this. The 3d models look great, the scenery looks amazing, and I like the ambient lighting. Despite there not being shadows casted by the people, it overall looks really well done. They look great. And the rigging itself looks great as well as there seems to be no clipping as far as I can see.
Keep up the good work.
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Thanks for the critique I almost forgot I submitted this to the group. I see a lot of the points you made. I appreciate the feedback and I'll keep it mind for future work.
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Glad to be of help.
Welcome.
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Thanks first off the comment and fave. However I forgot to include the dialogue when I posted it could look it over when you get a chance tell me what you think?
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Just did it, it is even better with the dialogue ^^
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Thanks I can't believe I forgot to post it here. I was hoping it help tell the story.
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My pleasure.
It helps for sure.
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