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Snow crunching loudly beneath her hooves, Twilight Sparkle ran. Harder than she'd ever run before. Already her legs were aching, her breath coming in ragged gasps. But she couldn't stop. Not here, not when the air was still almost painfully cold. She wanted to look over her shoulder to see if there was anything behind her, but the fear gripping her had paralyzed everything but her legs. They carried on galloping on their own, taking her as far away from whatever was behind her as possible.Why hadn't she listened to Zecora?
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"What's wrong Zecora? You've been quiet for the whole evening. Why are you glancing out of the windows constantly?" Twilight Sparkle asked the zebra, who was even now staring out into the dark. She took hold of her teacup with her magic, taking a sip of the warm tea. She had taken a real liking to Zecora's herbal teas.
The zebra was quiet for a while, before sighing and turning back to her: "Frankly, Twilight Sparkle, I am worried. There is something strange in the Everfree, and back to Ponyville you should already have hurried. Perhaps you should stay for the night, I'm sure Spike will be quite all right."
Twilight couldn't help but laugh a bit. "Something strange in the Everfree forest? Everfree practically defines "strange" you know."
Zecora simply shook her head. "This is different, Twilight Sparkle, and not something you should pass with a simple chuckle. The forest has been eerily quiet for a few days, absent are even the night wolves' bays. The air has gotten colder, sometimes without warning, enough so as to crack a boulder."
Twilight laughed again, as she started to prepare for leaving. Sometimes she felt Zecora's rhymes needed a bit more work yet. "Come on Zecora, this is the Everfree we're talking about. Who knows what kind of strange weather phenomena there are here during the winter. I'm sure there's a logical explanation for those 'cold air zones'." She paused to fasten her saddlebags with her magic, and continued: "Though I agree, I probably should've gone back already. Spike must be worried. I'll make sure to notify the royal herbalists tomorrow about the new plant you found. They're going to be so excited!"
The grim looking zebra did not share her enthusiasm. "Please be careful. If you suddenly feel intense cold, do not be bold. Leave as quickly as you can."
The unicorn turned to regard Zecora as she stepped out of the door. "Don't worry, I'll be okay. Though I doubt there really is anything out there, I'll be careful. See you again soon, and good night!"
As she made her way through the moonlit forest, she kept on thinking about Zecora's words, theorizing about the strange phenomena. How could air just suddenly get colder like that? So engrossed was she in her thinking that she failed to notice that the night air around her was starting to get colder at a rapid pace. When her teeth started to chatter she finally broke out of her reverie. "W-wow, Zecora w-wasn't kidding. The temperature must've dropped by at least a dozen degrees, and so suddenly too..."
As the cold intensified, she got a sudden feeling of dread. She couldn't explain it, but her every instinct told her to move, to get away from the cold. Zecora was right, there was something unnatural about this, even by Everfree's standards. No. No need to panic, she told herself. It could be just a zone of cold air moved by the wind. There's nothing out there. She tried her best to stay calm, and started to trot onwards at a brisk pace. Wait. What was that? Had she heard something? She froze on the spot, swiveling her ears around. Long seconds dragged on as she stood there, trying to hear the sound again. Yet it never came. With a shuddering sigh, she started to move again, slightly faster this time. Suddenly she heard the sound behind her, this time there could be no mistaking it. A constant crunching, as if something heavy was dragged along in snow. Panic seizing her, she broke into full gallop.
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Finally, her protesting muscles overrode her terror, forcing her to stop. The air was still bitingly cold. For a while, she just stood there, head down, chest heaving as she tried to catch her breath. This was stupid. She hadn't heard anything after she had started running, and hadn't seen anything either. She wasn't even sure there was something after her. She could have misheard the sound, it could have been just snow falling from a tree. And even if there was, she was sure she could handle herself. She had defeated an Ursa Minor, hadn't she? She chuckled to herself. She'd let Zecora's creepy stories get to her. She really needed to stop being such a scaredy cat. Lifting her head, she looked behind her. She...
She saw it. Behind her was something, unmoving like a statue, a dark shape barely illuminated by the faint moonlight. Twilight's blood ran cold, all thoughts of defeated Ursa Minors forgotten. It's eyes, two gleaming white holes in the darkness were staring at nothing, almost unseeing, but she knew she was the focus of it's attention. She could feel the intense cold radiating from the thing, a layer of frost forming on the trees near it. Forcing her numb muscles to move with a monumental effort of will, she turned and ran. Again the only sound heard in the night was the crunching of snow beneath her hooves, and her panicked gasps. She ran on for what felt like an eternity, afraid she'd got lost, stuck in the forest at night with... That.
Finally, when her tortured muscles were about to give in, she saw familiar landmarks, marking the place as the edge of the Everfree forest. Almost laughing with relief, she burst out of the oppressing shade of the forest. When she got further away from the forest, the biting cold started to recede. She'd made it out! She was safe in Ponyville! As she neared the edge of the village, she heard a terrifying throaty growl, forlorn and edged with the bitter cold of a thousand lonely winters. The sound stabbed into her, causing her to shiver so violently she almost stumbled. For years to come, that sound would haunt her in the cold of the night. Twilight didn't stop running until she was inside her library, door and windows locked. She spent the rest of the night shaking in front of the fireplace, trying to warm away the chill that had seeped into her very core.
We don't go to Everfree no more...
To all of you who don't recognize that thing, it's the Groke from Moomins. The single most terrifying thing to ever grace a children's cartoon. Here's a multilanguage clip of it's appearance, since they took the actual episode down... www.youtube.com/watch?v=qo8tBU…
I forgot the fact that I'm a terrible writer and felt the need to write that little thing to go with this picture. Lucky for you I don't write that often <3.
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Comments: 493
Rautakoura In reply to ??? [2012-04-19 14:26:50 +0000 UTC]
Mörön raiskaamaksi joutumisella on kyllä aika jäätävät seuraukset.
AHHAHHAHFFSGDGJFHDFDDGGRNNNGRHHFFDDSHAHEHAEHE
*Köh*
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Rautakoura In reply to CHCHcartoons [2012-04-02 18:16:02 +0000 UTC]
I get the feeling I'll never stop hearing this... D:
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LukoKraze In reply to ??? [2012-03-25 19:30:45 +0000 UTC]
Hey Rautakoura, I saw your picture and was inspired to make it into a video, here's the link:
[link]
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Rautakoura In reply to LukoKraze [2012-04-02 18:15:26 +0000 UTC]
Aye, not bad! Glowy-eyes Twilight looks actually pretty creepy herself... Where'd you get the music from btw?
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LukoKraze In reply to Rautakoura [2012-04-02 18:43:33 +0000 UTC]
Surprisingly, from the UK version of Moomin. It's called Doom Approaches.
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LukoKraze In reply to ??? [2012-03-21 17:56:31 +0000 UTC]
Man, when I see the Groke, I keep thinking of Totoro, expect more creepier
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Rautakoura In reply to LukoKraze [2012-04-02 18:14:10 +0000 UTC]
Aye, they both have that creepy-ass grin. Totoro has nothing on the Groke though... :F
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MrFH In reply to ??? [2012-03-18 19:46:45 +0000 UTC]
No it's The Groke from the finnish book and TV-series moomin
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Rautakoura In reply to KitChanSan [2012-03-20 02:03:07 +0000 UTC]
Oh come on! I know they look similar but... Geez! :S
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Soldier-Ell In reply to ??? [2012-03-02 22:14:54 +0000 UTC]
Groke!^^ An ultimate weapon for everybody who could understand her! ^^
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Soldier-Ell In reply to Rautakoura [2012-03-05 15:30:53 +0000 UTC]
Simple. When you find way to understand Groke and to be near her without turning yourself in the ice - you could easily scare for death/freeze your enemy XD
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Rautakoura In reply to Soldier-Ell [2012-03-07 01:05:55 +0000 UTC]
Aye, if you could convince her to do stuff like that. I wouldn't have the guts for that though...
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Lomablen In reply to ??? [2012-03-02 15:33:27 +0000 UTC]
Groke: ...
Twilight sparkle: . ....
Groke ...Yo..
Twilight sparkle: KYAAH!! *Superfast running away.*
Groke: ...;~; ..
Lol, for some reason thats how I imagined it.
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Rautakoura In reply to Lomablen [2012-03-04 23:26:26 +0000 UTC]
Aye, that's probably how it really would go . Poor Groke...
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Rautakoura In reply to Lomablen [2012-03-07 01:04:59 +0000 UTC]
That would probably end pretty badly...
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Lomablen In reply to Rautakoura [2012-03-07 12:25:47 +0000 UTC]
True, I might ''cool down'' a bit.
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Rautakoura In reply to Lomablen [2012-03-11 19:43:06 +0000 UTC]
Turn into an icicle more like. :F
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SakatzuCat In reply to ??? [2012-02-26 17:50:57 +0000 UTC]
Aloin jo kirjottaa enkuks mut huomasinki suomalaisen tilinimes. xDD
Mut EEeiih Mörkö. Tuo mieleen ilkeät muistot lapsuudesta ;___; Twaikku-parka.
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Rautakoura In reply to SakatzuCat [2012-02-27 15:58:48 +0000 UTC]
Se etu tässä nimessä kyllä on, monesti olen itse alkanut kirjoitella ihmisille enkuks ihan vaan jotta ne vois vastata takaisin suomeks.
Aye, tiedän tunteen tunteen ;n;.
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Laamafani In reply to ??? [2012-02-11 23:32:30 +0000 UTC]
I had to shut my blinds after reading this because I got a paranoid feeling that someone was watching me...
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Rautakoura In reply to Laamafani [2012-02-14 16:15:16 +0000 UTC]
Open the blinds and try to look out in the middle of the night with this playing in the background [link]
I can't do it D:
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Laamafani In reply to Rautakoura [2012-02-14 16:51:15 +0000 UTC]
I actually was listening that theme while searching for groke art. But I didn't really have to sleep that night... When will I ever learn?
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Rautakoura In reply to Laamafani [2012-02-15 19:37:03 +0000 UTC]
Searching for Groke art at night? Are you crazy?! O_o
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shadow116778 In reply to ??? [2012-02-07 02:59:51 +0000 UTC]
the big fat thing back thar reminds me of my dad
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Rautakoura In reply to shadow116778 [2012-02-08 08:42:38 +0000 UTC]
... I'm not sure if I'd want to ever see your dad. ( °-°)
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samuraijack180 [2012-02-07 01:18:10 +0000 UTC]
And the moral of the story is always listen to Zecora.
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Rautakoura In reply to samuraijack180 [2012-02-08 08:41:32 +0000 UTC]
Quite so. If someone talks to you in rhymes, you better listen.
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LoganStoppable In reply to ??? [2012-01-09 20:30:20 +0000 UTC]
I was affraid to watch Moomins after this point. Japanese are weird nation with how cartoon should look like.
I dimly know, how Twi must felt after this.
Not that you are great artist, you are great writer too!
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Rautakoura In reply to LoganStoppable [2012-01-10 01:33:25 +0000 UTC]
Indeed, if the target audience for the show was small children, how come they made the Groke's first episode to be straight out of some horror movie? :F.
So do I: pure, undiluted horror. And an unwillingness to ever set foot in Everfree again :S.
Mnah, glad you liked the text too! Don't doubt any decent fanfic writer could do loads better with this, but I do pride myself in knowing what's scary and what's not .
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LoganStoppable In reply to Rautakoura [2012-01-10 05:40:22 +0000 UTC]
Sure! Or there was other series "Adventurers from Space" ( I don´t know it´s original title) where after laser hit there was large splash of blood! It was japanese cartoon for kids, too.
Everfree forest was scary after fan-base made it to hell on Earth (well, Equestria). Remember "Story of the blanks"?
I wouln´t write it better (mainly beacuse I´m not english) and sometimes easier form is more menacing than rich-written text. So believe me, it was really, really great!
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Rautakoura In reply to LoganStoppable [2012-01-11 15:46:28 +0000 UTC]
Don't really see stuff like that made anymore... Kinda sad in a way.
Aye, I played the game. Creepy as crap. Now that I think about it, Everfree wasn't really that bad in the show itself. Damn you fanon, invading my view of Equestria!
Aye, it's not my native language either, which makes writing in english a real chore :F. But good that it served it's purpose well enough to entertain!
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LoganStoppable In reply to Rautakoura [2012-01-11 17:47:28 +0000 UTC]
Yes, it really is - oh, I remembered of the name of that cartoon. "Spaceship Sagittarius".
I even thought about abandoning MLP. I really loved the original intent ( very similar like 80´s series - like He-Man, She-Ra and so on). But fandom is ruining it and creating whole new Equestria with blood, gore, sexual themes, war...this is HUMAN thing, not pony :/
You should continue with writing and illustrating
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Rautakoura In reply to LoganStoppable [2012-01-11 23:25:30 +0000 UTC]
Hm, haven't seen that one before. I bizarre one, to be sure.
Eh, don't take them too seriously is my advice. I do find some of the more serious fics amusing in their own way, but I pass on the more serious grimdarks/ships. Fallout Equestria is probably the grimmest I've read, but also without a doubt the best.
Aye, will continue to draw at least, can't promise anything about the writing though .
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LoganStoppable In reply to Rautakoura [2012-01-12 05:26:10 +0000 UTC]
Japanese cartoons are obscurity itself
Are you suprised? Fallout is one of the best RPGs I´ve ever played and no matter if main acters are ponies or humans - it´s the same. Only the story determines that whether it´s bad or the best. Well, only humans are replaced by ponies. But that´s probably only matter of opinion
Glad to hear that! Writing is great idea when you have idea. When not, well, the result is then a bit...uhm...wonky. A lot of my stories was left unfinished, beacuse I hadn´t ideas how to continue and then abandoned
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Rautakoura In reply to LoganStoppable [2012-01-12 16:12:52 +0000 UTC]
Indeed .
Actually, I don't think it would be even half as good without the pony aspect. Ponies bring the magic aspect in that story into the Fallout world, which makes it even more captivating (arcanotech-babble has always intriqued me), plus reading about how such a peaceful world could have turned into a crapsack hell is interesting. Can't really disregard the writer's abilities though, the story wouldn't have been anything without characters, and the ones in FoE are some of the most fleshed out and beliveable I've ever seen.
Aye, I know what you mean. If I'm going to write anything, it'll be these really short stories to go with the pictures, don't think I could handle a fullblown fanfic :>.
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LoganStoppable In reply to Rautakoura [2012-01-12 18:30:49 +0000 UTC]
It´s absolutelly all right Everyone has his own PoW and post-apocalyptical everything is very popular.
It´s also known as "MagiTek", used in Final Fantasy series. Or Steam Punk ( you certainly know Arcanum: Of Steamworks and Magick Obscura). And I´m writing something very similiar, but magic is in that case energy flux on or under surface of artificial planet and it made influence on life and another. So this theme is nothing new to me
I´ve seen few fan-based art...well, I see Fallout ( finished Wasteland/F1/F2/F:Tac/F3 with datadisc and F:New Vegas with datadisc). Simply said, I have way too much experiences so something could make me "Wow!". But if you like it - great for you
You don´t have to write looong stories. What about short ones? I have opposite problem - when I want to write short one, I end up with long one xD
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Rautakoura In reply to LoganStoppable [2012-01-13 03:15:23 +0000 UTC]
Aye, it's not really a new theme, but definitely most excelently executed (harhar) in the fic. Oh, is it a fanfic, or an original story?
But yah, if you were find yourself utterly bored with nothing interesting to do, give FoE a try! Nothing to lose.
Haha, I can see how it could end up like that, the idea going on it's own ways without asking the writer ^^.
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LoganStoppable In reply to Rautakoura [2012-01-13 06:04:20 +0000 UTC]
I woulnd´t say "original", this cross-theme is very old - but the idea for story came from me. I would like to translate it to english one day. There are other races, code-named from classical fantasy. But in reality they are humans, only evolved on different colonies on other planets ( Dwarf - human evolved on planets with heavy gravitation, so their grow was drastically limited. Vampire - humans with lust for blood who evolved in other planets with parasiting on different species gave them some characteristic) and at last unicorn, but this was genetical project with DNA base of a horse. So unicorn could have anoter thousands appereances, based on preference of the base.
It gave me a lot of space to work with. Now I have 200 A4 pages
Yup, it´s easier to draw a pic based on someone else story That´s true
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Rautakoura In reply to LoganStoppable [2012-01-13 15:30:46 +0000 UTC]
Holy crap, that's a book on it's own right already O_o. Throw it at a publisher or something!
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LoganStoppable In reply to Rautakoura [2012-01-13 15:51:31 +0000 UTC]
You know - I won´t. Publishing here is FAR too expensive and this genre isn´t so popular. I doubt many ppl would buy it. Even though here are some competitions when winner can in the end publish his book. Sadly, the publisher is working with that and I´m affraid a lot of content would be scrapped and changed. It´s the same problem like in the game. The initial idea would made the game superb - but then leading decides that something would fail at censorship/dropped idea due time/content and so on.
I gave it to read to scale from 14 - 55 years ( 6 people) and all of them liked it. Some of them weren´t my friends, but "strangers" so no relationship ifnluenced their view of it.
There are 200 pages, as I said...but I will extend it. I created my own playground - creation from past to future or point of view of other person/being, history or something what happened paraller on main story.
I would glady share with everyone who has interest to read it. And maybe later, if I improve in drawing, I may illustrate it. And if I will be even better, then translate into english and publish somwhere outside my country.
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