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Snow crunching loudly beneath her hooves, Twilight Sparkle ran. Harder than she'd ever run before. Already her legs were aching, her breath coming in ragged gasps. But she couldn't stop. Not here, not when the air was still almost painfully cold. She wanted to look over her shoulder to see if there was anything behind her, but the fear gripping her had paralyzed everything but her legs. They carried on galloping on their own, taking her as far away from whatever was behind her as possible.Why hadn't she listened to Zecora?
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"What's wrong Zecora? You've been quiet for the whole evening. Why are you glancing out of the windows constantly?" Twilight Sparkle asked the zebra, who was even now staring out into the dark. She took hold of her teacup with her magic, taking a sip of the warm tea. She had taken a real liking to Zecora's herbal teas.
The zebra was quiet for a while, before sighing and turning back to her: "Frankly, Twilight Sparkle, I am worried. There is something strange in the Everfree, and back to Ponyville you should already have hurried. Perhaps you should stay for the night, I'm sure Spike will be quite all right."
Twilight couldn't help but laugh a bit. "Something strange in the Everfree forest? Everfree practically defines "strange" you know."
Zecora simply shook her head. "This is different, Twilight Sparkle, and not something you should pass with a simple chuckle. The forest has been eerily quiet for a few days, absent are even the night wolves' bays. The air has gotten colder, sometimes without warning, enough so as to crack a boulder."
Twilight laughed again, as she started to prepare for leaving. Sometimes she felt Zecora's rhymes needed a bit more work yet. "Come on Zecora, this is the Everfree we're talking about. Who knows what kind of strange weather phenomena there are here during the winter. I'm sure there's a logical explanation for those 'cold air zones'." She paused to fasten her saddlebags with her magic, and continued: "Though I agree, I probably should've gone back already. Spike must be worried. I'll make sure to notify the royal herbalists tomorrow about the new plant you found. They're going to be so excited!"
The grim looking zebra did not share her enthusiasm. "Please be careful. If you suddenly feel intense cold, do not be bold. Leave as quickly as you can."
The unicorn turned to regard Zecora as she stepped out of the door. "Don't worry, I'll be okay. Though I doubt there really is anything out there, I'll be careful. See you again soon, and good night!"
As she made her way through the moonlit forest, she kept on thinking about Zecora's words, theorizing about the strange phenomena. How could air just suddenly get colder like that? So engrossed was she in her thinking that she failed to notice that the night air around her was starting to get colder at a rapid pace. When her teeth started to chatter she finally broke out of her reverie. "W-wow, Zecora w-wasn't kidding. The temperature must've dropped by at least a dozen degrees, and so suddenly too..."
As the cold intensified, she got a sudden feeling of dread. She couldn't explain it, but her every instinct told her to move, to get away from the cold. Zecora was right, there was something unnatural about this, even by Everfree's standards. No. No need to panic, she told herself. It could be just a zone of cold air moved by the wind. There's nothing out there. She tried her best to stay calm, and started to trot onwards at a brisk pace. Wait. What was that? Had she heard something? She froze on the spot, swiveling her ears around. Long seconds dragged on as she stood there, trying to hear the sound again. Yet it never came. With a shuddering sigh, she started to move again, slightly faster this time. Suddenly she heard the sound behind her, this time there could be no mistaking it. A constant crunching, as if something heavy was dragged along in snow. Panic seizing her, she broke into full gallop.
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Finally, her protesting muscles overrode her terror, forcing her to stop. The air was still bitingly cold. For a while, she just stood there, head down, chest heaving as she tried to catch her breath. This was stupid. She hadn't heard anything after she had started running, and hadn't seen anything either. She wasn't even sure there was something after her. She could have misheard the sound, it could have been just snow falling from a tree. And even if there was, she was sure she could handle herself. She had defeated an Ursa Minor, hadn't she? She chuckled to herself. She'd let Zecora's creepy stories get to her. She really needed to stop being such a scaredy cat. Lifting her head, she looked behind her. She...
She saw it. Behind her was something, unmoving like a statue, a dark shape barely illuminated by the faint moonlight. Twilight's blood ran cold, all thoughts of defeated Ursa Minors forgotten. It's eyes, two gleaming white holes in the darkness were staring at nothing, almost unseeing, but she knew she was the focus of it's attention. She could feel the intense cold radiating from the thing, a layer of frost forming on the trees near it. Forcing her numb muscles to move with a monumental effort of will, she turned and ran. Again the only sound heard in the night was the crunching of snow beneath her hooves, and her panicked gasps. She ran on for what felt like an eternity, afraid she'd got lost, stuck in the forest at night with... That.
Finally, when her tortured muscles were about to give in, she saw familiar landmarks, marking the place as the edge of the Everfree forest. Almost laughing with relief, she burst out of the oppressing shade of the forest. When she got further away from the forest, the biting cold started to recede. She'd made it out! She was safe in Ponyville! As she neared the edge of the village, she heard a terrifying throaty growl, forlorn and edged with the bitter cold of a thousand lonely winters. The sound stabbed into her, causing her to shiver so violently she almost stumbled. For years to come, that sound would haunt her in the cold of the night. Twilight didn't stop running until she was inside her library, door and windows locked. She spent the rest of the night shaking in front of the fireplace, trying to warm away the chill that had seeped into her very core.
We don't go to Everfree no more...
To all of you who don't recognize that thing, it's the Groke from Moomins. The single most terrifying thing to ever grace a children's cartoon. Here's a multilanguage clip of it's appearance, since they took the actual episode down... www.youtube.com/watch?v=qo8tBU…
I forgot the fact that I'm a terrible writer and felt the need to write that little thing to go with this picture. Lucky for you I don't write that often <3.
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Comments: 493
Rautakoura In reply to ??? [2012-01-16 02:30:19 +0000 UTC]
Ach, you gotta compromise if you want something published. Aye, there's a high chance for the publisher pushing for changes, but getting the book to a publisher's pretty much the only way you can get your book published without having to invest absurd amounts of money yourself. But aye, I see your point, having someone try to change your work like that would suck. Still, isn't it possible to send it to some publisher to check out, to see if it has some potential at least? Should be a good sign if the pre-readers liked it.
Just keep at it though! Never give up on something you have worked hard for like that!
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LoganStoppable In reply to Rautakoura [2012-01-16 09:58:53 +0000 UTC]
It is possible, but here it´s not in "main-stream", beaucse it´s mixed genre and it´s hard to say if people would like it.
Another worse part is, there are segments that have connection to other part of story. Once I had to cut-out one segment and had to search and modify another 10 pages! Terrible.
For me it´s fun and hobby. If I catch the Muse, I can write 10 pages in one day Somebody can draw 8 hours, I can write for 8 hours
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Rautakoura In reply to LoganStoppable [2012-01-17 03:00:48 +0000 UTC]
Mmh, kinda difficult if the genre isn't popular where you live, aye. Still, isn't it possible to show it to a publisher if only to see what they think of it, does it have potential and all that?
Aye, I know the feeling, on some days you just feel like drawing nonstop for hours. That kinda sucks when you add that to the fact that I often draw only after dark...
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LoganStoppable In reply to Rautakoura [2012-01-23 19:04:49 +0000 UTC]
Here are not many quality publishers. They are not objective and everyone has it´s own favourite genere. And if you choose the wrong one, they are very harsh - and very subjective, so they don´t say what you should improve, but they will only throw thrash on it.
Only after dark? Wow, many of artist are doing it in this time, finishing after 3 a.m
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Rautakoura In reply to LoganStoppable [2012-01-25 01:44:45 +0000 UTC]
Ach, kinda difficult if the publishers are like that, aye :F.
Don't understand it myself either, that's just how it goes. During the day I'm like "should I draw something? Nahhhhh", then when it get's dark I'm like "HERE, MY TRUSTY TABLET! WE HAVE WORK TO DO!".
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xX2WolfFeather1Xx In reply to ??? [2012-01-02 04:36:08 +0000 UTC]
O.O....you have amazing writing skils. And immediately recoginized that creature from the books. I love those Moomin books. And I mean as for the Groke, I sort of feel sorry for it. I mean yes the terror and cold it brings is terrifing without a doubt, but in the end, all it wants is something warm to to take away the cold it carries with it. So it wanders aimlessy in search of warmth.
...heheheh sorry for the lengthy comment. The story written and picture are both well put together.
Awesome job!
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Rautakoura In reply to xX2WolfFeather1Xx [2012-01-02 19:39:10 +0000 UTC]
Ehh, probably could've made it a lot scarier if I could really write, I'm just pretty confident in my genre savviness and knowing what's scary. Can't say the same about my writing skills .
Aye, I know how she really is just lonely. From what I heard, they even managed to cure her in some later book. It doesn't make her any less scary though, especially the first time she appeared in the cartoon. A shame they pulled the video of that down, or have you seen it elsewhere?
Don't apologize, comments warm my cold, rusted heart! Glad you liked them both! ^^
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Apollo76 In reply to ??? [2011-12-30 04:33:58 +0000 UTC]
I don't care who you are. If you were alone in the woods and that thing appeared behind you. You would stain your boxers for sure.
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Rautakoura In reply to Apollo76 [2012-01-01 01:36:35 +0000 UTC]
If that thing appeared behind me in the woods, it wouldn't even have to do anything. I'd be dead from a heart attack before I'd have hit the ground.
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Rautakoura In reply to RMikkE [2011-12-25 14:25:56 +0000 UTC]
Äagh, ei sydän ja mörkö kuulu samaan lauseeseen D:
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RMikkE In reply to Rautakoura [2011-12-25 16:39:42 +0000 UTC]
Ehkä mulla on vaan tavallista kieroutuneempi elämänkatsomus
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Rautakoura In reply to RMikkE [2011-12-27 06:34:18 +0000 UTC]
Kyllä minäkin tavallaan siitä pidän, siis siinä mielessä että se iskee minulle pahemmin paskat housuun kuin mikään muu olento maan päällä. Saavutus se on sekin että mitkään modernit kauhuleffojen hirviöt ei sille pärjää.
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gizmo01 In reply to ??? [2011-12-19 21:53:16 +0000 UTC]
Ah yes, Groke used to freak me out then I watch the cartoon. Thanks for bring up some childhood memmories my friend XD
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Rautakoura In reply to gizmo01 [2011-12-21 03:06:38 +0000 UTC]
My deepest apologies good sir. Some things should have been left in the past...
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gizmo01 In reply to Rautakoura [2011-12-21 09:13:10 +0000 UTC]
Sometimes we like to be sceard ^_^
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Rautakoura In reply to gizmo01 [2011-12-21 16:34:29 +0000 UTC]
Quite correct. The Groke is kinda over the top though :F.
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Radoxeald In reply to ??? [2011-12-16 11:46:27 +0000 UTC]
Aivan absoluuttisen parhautta, niin kuva kuin oheinen tarinakin.
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Rautakoura In reply to Radoxeald [2011-12-16 23:34:14 +0000 UTC]
Har, hyvä kun kelpaa . En turhaan kusi sukassa piirtänyt ja kirjoittanut ^^.
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Rautakoura In reply to JohisLohis14 [2011-12-11 00:33:14 +0000 UTC]
You can't make something not-creepy if you have the Groke in it... ;n;
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RetarDude In reply to ??? [2011-12-06 17:24:31 +0000 UTC]
Oh my god... Litterally got the shivers from this picture. Damnit Groke, you're still so fucking scary.
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Rautakoura In reply to RetarDude [2011-12-06 21:22:55 +0000 UTC]
[link] [link] <-- Proper background music for the picture and the story. I listened to those while drawing this. Alone. At night. In the dark.
Scarred for life ಥ_ಥ
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RetarDude In reply to Rautakoura [2011-12-06 22:17:18 +0000 UTC]
I think this one's the worst, though [link]
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Rautakoura In reply to RetarDude [2011-12-07 00:36:57 +0000 UTC]
Aye, though that is really scary too, for some reason those two just make me piss my pants :F
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RetarDude In reply to Rautakoura [2011-12-06 22:08:33 +0000 UTC]
Well I wasn't planning on sleeping tonight anyways. And neither did you that night, I assume.
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Rautakoura In reply to RetarDude [2011-12-07 00:36:17 +0000 UTC]
Make that a week and you're correct.
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RahkshiPinkerton In reply to ??? [2011-12-02 20:56:19 +0000 UTC]
I used to have a little negative feeling about this picture long time ago, but I just realized in the description that Twilight survived the terror, and I just decided to fave this.
I'm really glad you're alive and well, Twi. -_0
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Rautakoura In reply to RahkshiPinkerton [2011-12-02 22:58:17 +0000 UTC]
Ach, I'm a sucker for happy endings. I don't have the heart to kill off any ponies . A few close encounters make living all the sweeter!
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InvisibleMang In reply to ??? [2011-11-27 21:23:34 +0000 UTC]
i really have to ask this now...i saw the first comment about this "groke" creature, and i really have to ask
how the hell is thing thing SCARY!? it's a giant blob/sheet/thing!
please explain this thing that apparently gave a lot of people insomnia as kids...
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Rautakoura In reply to InvisibleMang [2011-11-28 03:17:47 +0000 UTC]
I take it you didn't watch Moomins as a child? You really have to have seen that shit as a kid. Of course it's not that scary if you see it as an adult for the first time. And even the damn video I put in the description was taken down, had subtitles and all... This is probably the next best version, though no subtitles with arabic (or whatever that is) is a bit eh :F.--> [link]
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InvisibleMang In reply to Rautakoura [2011-11-28 06:14:02 +0000 UTC]
...so...thats the groke in all it's glory...really?
it...ok, i guess it would make sense for it not to scare me since i am 14 going on 15, but i'm a freaking coward, and i think that it looks...dare i say, cute. and it does nothing to be scary, it just...stands there...i really don't know how this could scare a little kid, but i guess everyone has their reasons for being afraid of a blob...i dunno...it just doesn't scare me is all i am saying...oh well
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Rautakoura In reply to InvisibleMang [2011-11-29 02:57:33 +0000 UTC]
Aye, I figured. But imagine stepping into the shoes of a 3-year old and watching that. Plus that video missed loads of the menacing foreshadowing they gave it. Also, the voice acting sucks monkeyballs, Groke sounding like the girl from Grudge just doesn't cut it . Found a slightly better version here [link] since it's supposed to be, you know, growling, instead of sounding like an old door opening. The finnish version is better yet (imho), but since the copyright zealots were a bunch buttmunches and took it down, what can ya do.
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InvisibleMang In reply to Rautakoura [2011-11-29 03:21:53 +0000 UTC]
ok...that a bit more scary, definitely not something i'd want to hear in the middle of the night, and i as i said, i guess some people have their reasons for being terrified of this thing, i'm just not one of them...and i still think it looks cute.
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Rautakoura In reply to InvisibleMang [2011-11-29 04:07:21 +0000 UTC]
Childhood trauma would be the reason for most people . And how can you possibly find that cute :F? Those dead, unmoving and unblinking eyes staring at you... *shudder*
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InvisibleMang In reply to Rautakoura [2011-11-29 05:43:25 +0000 UTC]
when you have read cupcakes and lived, that is the only thing that scares you from that day and forever...
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Rautakoura In reply to InvisibleMang [2011-11-29 05:54:32 +0000 UTC]
I've read that. I didn't scare me as much as it made me lose my appetite.
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InvisibleMang In reply to Rautakoura [2011-11-29 06:18:46 +0000 UTC]
oh well, scared the balls out of me...but...one..."certain" fanfic that i will NOT NAME is, to steal a quote from over 9001 people: "10 times worse then cupcakes" i could never fully finish...it's just...sick...warped...and...guh...im getting a horrible taste in my mouth just thinking about it...
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Rautakoura In reply to InvisibleMang [2011-11-29 07:48:48 +0000 UTC]
Hmm, worse than cupcakes?
You're not talking about Half-Life: Full Life Consequences are you? Or that Spiderses fic? ಠ_ಠ
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InvisibleMang In reply to Rautakoura [2011-11-29 15:44:26 +0000 UTC]
no...much...f*cking...worse...it's mindlessly sick...and it actually made me throw up a little...and the spiderses fanfic is just funny cause off how horrible it is, which was the entire point...but...lets just say, it has to do with big macintosh, and the cmc...*shudder*
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Rautakoura In reply to InvisibleMang [2011-12-01 02:11:34 +0000 UTC]
Well, that certainly sounds... Interesting. :>
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InvisibleMang In reply to Rautakoura [2011-12-01 06:26:54 +0000 UTC]
no it is not! don't ever think and trying to find it...it's...awful! just...stay sane...stay sane...stay sane
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Rautakoura In reply to InvisibleMang [2011-12-01 07:58:43 +0000 UTC]
Okay, you're really cranking up my curiosity levels...
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InvisibleMang In reply to Rautakoura [2011-12-01 15:31:09 +0000 UTC]
ok...you really want to see it? i'm not gonna set you up the link...but...a certain of friend of mine will, she's into the grimdark area of mlp fim... here is her link...i'm not gonna go looking for it...just...talk to her about...ask her to send you a link to the fanfiction that is 10x worse then cupcakes...she might know what your talking about...
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Rautakoura In reply to InvisibleMang [2011-12-01 16:00:59 +0000 UTC]
Managed to find it with a bit of googling. Sure was an interesting read. Don't think it beats cupcakes though. That was just pretty much a over the top gorefest orchestrated by a very out of character Big Mac. Cupcakes is way more psychological, with Pinkie actually being in character (kinda), and written better too. Doesn't change the fact that I can't help but wonder what made the authors write something like that. Don't think I would ever want to meet them on a dark alley at night :S.
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valdetiosi In reply to ??? [2011-11-20 17:40:21 +0000 UTC]
As a Finnish man, i appreciate this.
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Rautakoura In reply to valdetiosi [2011-11-20 23:52:28 +0000 UTC]
Indeed. Kaikki suomalaiset tietää mörön kauhun.
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valdetiosi In reply to Rautakoura [2011-11-21 14:37:11 +0000 UTC]
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