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Published: 2010-04-27 00:42:57 +0000 UTC; Views: 137; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 1
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Description Dripping ecstasy upon my face,
Slowly dancing down my skin,
Caressing every curve, every crevice,
Bathing my soul in warmth, so cold,
Everything heavy with every drop upon me,
Passionate music sings within every vessel,
Oh how I love the rain.
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Comments: 7

SurrealIndecisions [2010-04-27 00:46:15 +0000 UTC]

In line 4 "warm" should be warmth. Just thought I'd point out that error.

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Raychilwls In reply to SurrealIndecisions [2010-04-27 00:56:41 +0000 UTC]

I wrote it as warm...

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SurrealIndecisions In reply to Raychilwls [2010-04-27 01:04:49 +0000 UTC]

But to say you're bathing your soul in warm doesn't make gramatical sense. Warm functions solely as either a verb or an adjective and to put it after a preposition you would either have to have a noun following warm which warm is modifying or change warm to warmth so as to make it a noun.

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Raychilwls In reply to SurrealIndecisions [2010-04-27 15:28:18 +0000 UTC]

Poetry does not have to make grammatical sense, it is coming from within, I can make warm a unicorn, it doesn't matter, this is not English class or grammar school, this is art, there is no wrong or no in art.

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SurrealIndecisions In reply to Raychilwls [2010-04-27 20:29:12 +0000 UTC]

Fine then.

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Raychilwls In reply to SurrealIndecisions [2010-04-27 21:52:48 +0000 UTC]

You should really see things in a different view before you post judgment.

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Archaizir In reply to SurrealIndecisions [2010-04-27 07:01:41 +0000 UTC]

I think poetic license would allow it.

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