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Published: 2004-10-20 18:53:27 +0000 UTC; Views: 2305; Favourites: 40; Downloads: 54
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Luffy : He's back !! He's back !!!!Shanks : Hey mates ! Look what we're going to eat today !!!
Luffy : Harg ! Shanks ! Put me down !!
Shanks : Hey ! it's alive !
Luffy : Stop it ! I'm sick !!! I'll..burp...
Shanks : Are you glad to see me !?
Luffy : Nooooooooooooo !!!!!!!!!! Put me DOWN !! Damn...
Shanks : Okay... hey, are you ok ? You seem ill !
Luffy : You're not funny, Shanks!
Shanks : Ho sorry....
Luffy : Shanks,
Shanks : Yea ?
Luffy : I'm.... glad you're back...
Shanks : ... I'm happy to see you too...
Sorry for my bad English but was really inspired by this picture !!! Tell me if I've made some mistakes in my dialog, please !!!
Shanks Luffy and the background are Β© One Piece
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Comments: 46
Shanks is the best and so is Zolo ^-^ Mmmmmm.....
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Yep! that couple is full of mystery.
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Nothing is better than cookies.
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Yea we don't know who is really Shanks... we must wait to know more about him... blah. I hate to wait.
Thanks for comenting ^^
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XD Awwww What a cute Luffy!! Shanks looks great too
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Yea i like Luffy too, but Shanks's face is not really good on this picture...
It's was my first pict of him. Thanks for the coment !
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Pa de problem ^^ tu fera Shanks bourrΓ© avec Zocco Γ§a sera drΓ΄le
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Ouais je sΓ© je sΓ©, Ben je sais pas si tu pourra me montrer Γ§a demain vu ke j'irai pas au dada yon g encore un problem de bill 
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rigol pa,g deja fe nami,le prochain c shanks et zoko ki se batt pour mavoir...a moin ke je fass zoko sou la douch,lΓ© coincidence a la con:ce matin sur le pc de la kafet,le fon decran ct le slip a zorro,jte lai ramnΓ© c une conri pitoyabl,pi apre sur yahoo info il parle des marines a fallujyah!!!!c tro mortel!ilΓ© bo mon new avatar hein???le tien il dechir!
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One Piece!Yayyyyy!I love One Piece especially Luffy!
I like Luffy pose and Shanks smile!Good job!
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Thank you !!! Yay luffy is cute 
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Aww ^o^ this is cute!!
Luffy love shanks so much! and I love those too very much 
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Weeee !!!! A other One piece fan !!! or Zorro
Thank you for the coment
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Hey it's mine too !
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lol XD but luffy is my fav ~
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shanks ile terribl hehe!luffy et wedge ore tils d points communs?!
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Boff Shanks je trouve qu'il a pas assez dde cheveux la prochaine fois je lui fait une belle tignasse rouquine !!!
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ouais une belle tignass,pis un ours bandar tan ke tuyes!!!!!!ma sava pa mieu!va voir t mail jte envoye plein de truc
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Weeeeeweeee !!!
Thanks my frwend !
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Yea Shanks like to annoy him
Thank ya Captain !!!
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Thank you for your advice !!!
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Thank you !
Are you a Kuro fan ?
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You're welcome ^_^
Well I'm more a Usopp fan but Kuro Is great!! 
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Heh, as far as the dialog, everything seems good. But instead of saying "Look what's we're going to eat today", it should be just "what". And saying "are you fine" is correct, but it's awkward, and really wouldn't be used in normal speech. So it's probably best to say "ok" instead of "fine".
Love the pic, it's cute!
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Thanks you !
Now my dialog is better
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