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Redlich — Prologue by-nc-sa
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The beast stretched out its ten foot frame and surveys the carnage he had delivered to the ill prepared dig team, still how could they known they would face such creature.  Truly Marg was a monster in the purest sense, his four arms where all powerfully muscled, yet his upper two arms held the real power.   With strength that rivaled the mightiest of giant-kind, even titans, he could crush boulders to dust, tear armored warriors to shreds and lay waist to hundreds and that was just his physical might.  In his position he held many enchanted items that further his powers.  Bracers that rendered his arm indestructible, a leather vest which shields him lesser spells, his eyes, replaced with red steel glass, saw through illusions and protected him from mental attacks, and a ring of regeneration, but his favored was the large choker upon his neck, aside from a small amount protection it bestows upon its warier endless stamina, allowing him to fight on continually without end, and that’s what all dreagloths live for.  
Marg took a deep berth and began to like his claws clean from the gore that still lay on them.  On the ground next to him was last of the would be adventurers he killed, a monk humbly dressed save fore a pair of mythrill gauntlets, was the only worthy foe of the group and still died with little effort. It was quit disappointing for Marg, as much he love the slaughter, he longed to feast on the heart of  a true opponent  “waste not want not” mused Marg and he lean downed and tore out the dead monks heart.  He looked at it for a moment, snickered and swallowed it whole.
“Marg” came a faint whisper and he raised his lower left arm up to peer into a clear gem bracelet on his wrist.   “Did you find it?” the voices asked. He looked up before answering.  “I think” he began then took a few strides foreword to the back of the cavern.  In shallowly dug hole lay the top half of a sphere a groove on top with a pearl set inside with another, black pearl, set in the center of it.  Studying the relic he saw it was mostly stone, a strange blue tented stone. It was about the size of a large fruit, about fifteen to twenty inches in diameter, if it was complete.  “Well?” the voice began, with an impatient tone.  “Its here” Marg said, “half of it.”    
“Half!”  The voice said growing form a whisper to a defining shout. Marg winched expecting to be fully berated.  “No matter.” The voice sighed calming down “I had suspicions of this, stay there and search for the other half, until I summon you.”  
Marg sighed, which came out more like a growl.  “Is there a problem?”  Ask the voice.
“No master.” He answered remembering his role.  “Good.  Chances are I’ll have to retrieve it myself.  Besides I grow bored of watching you massacre lesser races.  Have patients my dear Marg soon all will come to fruition.”   And then the voice was gone.
Looking at his new, Marg could not help but be displeased.  Excavation was not his purpose in life, blood was.  That was what his master promise, blood and death beyond any thing know for millenniums on the prime materiel plane.  As vague as the description was his master has the power and mind to make it happen.  So Marg will have patients, he will be content for now. As he began to sift through the dirt he noticed one of the diggers, a dwarf, had a false arm ending in various tools.  Marg grind reached reached over tore the arm off.  A quick look over the tools end and he fold out a brush and went back to work.  No reason he couldn’t try and have some fun with this.
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Comments: 12

Artheeria [2009-03-26 19:17:19 +0000 UTC]

~Flambo13 makes a good point. There is nothing wrong with the idea, but you do need to go through this with a fine tooth comb. Reread it aloud to yourself. That helps me a lot when I need to proof something.

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Redlich In reply to Artheeria [2009-03-26 19:32:50 +0000 UTC]

yeah, that a the fact that haven't been in the mood to wright has been keeping me from getting this down. Fortunately this has been a labor of love and not gain. Especially since people would sue me for doing that.

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Artheeria In reply to Redlich [2009-03-26 19:38:57 +0000 UTC]

>_> Why would people sue you...?

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Redlich In reply to Artheeria [2009-03-26 19:51:12 +0000 UTC]

Oh right, you only read the prologue. It's a drizzt fan fic plus One of the artist here is letting me use a character composite (am I saying that right). I don't think wizard, R.A Salvatore or Cyzra (the artist) would be happy is I try to turn a profit on it.

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Artheeria In reply to Redlich [2009-03-26 20:02:51 +0000 UTC]

Fair enough. So why not do something completely original?

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Redlich In reply to Artheeria [2009-03-26 22:49:53 +0000 UTC]

I do have a few ideas but they will wait for a bit tell i get more drive in me to put them down. I have trouble putting things on paper or screen in this case. Guess it comes from my whole add problems.

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Artheeria In reply to Redlich [2009-03-28 14:53:42 +0000 UTC]

The thing with writing is you gotta do it even when you don't feel like doing it. *chuckles*

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Redlich In reply to Artheeria [2009-03-28 21:59:49 +0000 UTC]

I'll give it a try

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Flambo13 [2008-07-23 03:34:31 +0000 UTC]

very good so far, i got a good mental picture of the scene. just a few minor problems... nothing wrong with the story, u just need to work on grammar. try to double check things like sentence structure, subject verb agreement (past and present tense), and spelling. im not an english teacher, mind you, but i did notice a few of those previously mentioned mistakes that kinda made some parts harder to understand. im not tryin to put u down, i like the story, just tryin to give u some tips

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Redlich In reply to Flambo13 [2008-07-23 19:50:43 +0000 UTC]

Thanks, I know my grammar sucks those checks only do so much. I did have a friend looking it over but she's way busy. if anything stand out don't hesitate ti say

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Flambo13 In reply to Redlich [2008-07-31 18:27:05 +0000 UTC]

sorry i have been busy myself, but i will look over some of it tonight. i will see what i can find.

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Redlich In reply to Flambo13 [2008-08-01 02:45:43 +0000 UTC]

Thanks again no rush.

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