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Rexeath — Fade
Published: 2010-09-21 05:24:58 +0000 UTC; Views: 302; Favourites: 5; Downloads: 0
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The way I stand there,Trying to get your attention,
Wanting to get your attention.
Trying to yell,
Trying to shout,
Trying to make words come out.
I stare at my hands,
Translucent as a diamond,
I look in the mirror,
I'm barely there.
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Comments: 26
This poem has nice feeling, yet the end is too dead, it's like talking to someone then just stopping in the middle of the sentence, but it's great, you've got potential!
just work harder!!
well done.
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Yeah, I think so too. I couldn't think of anything to put at the end so I just placed the last thing that popped into my head.
Thanks for the feed back. Very helpful. c:
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my pleasure!
poetry's like, life, you gotta work so hard just to get noticed, I have been fighting for years to get noticed...
I have not been noticed yet, but, At least I can help other people
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We all have been working to get noticed. Everyone one us. Well except for the jerks who steal other people's work.
I hope you get noticed soon. Your really good at poetry.
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thank you so much!
means alot!
likewise
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duuude this poem is awesome....
i love it !!! but i dont get the last part
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Thanks!
Really?
Oh um the last part is connected to the title. As in "I'm barely there." is I'm faded or I'm a ghost. Like transparent. c:
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ohhh ok i get it !!! <3 ha ha
thanx i was very confused but now im not ..YAY ! lol
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XDDDDDD 
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im female ^_^ yay !!! lol
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^_^ well it was nice talkin 2 u but i hav to go now since i havent done my science homework ^_^; heh heh, laterz !!
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Ok. Bye! I'm just gonna find my homework now. XD;;
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