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RhayningAcidity — Unfortunate Finality
Published: 2005-08-13 02:08:39 +0000 UTC; Views: 87; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 1
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Description "There's a kind of grace in chaos,"
She said softly as she walked away.
"But it's pushed far into the dark,
Held tight there, meant to stay."

She turned around one last time
As a tear ran down her cheek.
Inside it hurt me so,
But a solemn face I had to keep.

I tried to choose my goodbye wisely,
But it only hurt her more.
My heart began to swell with tears
As she finally reached the door.

"Should you ever need me as a friend,
Don't be afraid to call.
Even though the 'us' is over
We shouldn't end it all.

Her final words came as a whisper
From the doorway of my loss.
'I lost my only love today...
That's how much pride costs.'
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Comments: 10

TheOneYouLove-ToHate [2005-08-29 22:44:10 +0000 UTC]

hey amber, its really pretty * 2 thumbs up*

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RhayningAcidity In reply to TheOneYouLove-ToHate [2005-08-31 19:34:09 +0000 UTC]

Thanks you much babe!

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TheOneYouLove-ToHate [2005-08-29 22:44:02 +0000 UTC]

hey amber, its really pretty * 2 thumbs up*

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TheOneYouLove-ToHate [2005-08-29 22:43:56 +0000 UTC]

hey amber, its really pretty * 2 thumbs up*

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lizard168 [2005-08-14 13:26:28 +0000 UTC]

very well written. most guys i know are like how u written in the poem, excellent work!

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twiztedthought831 [2005-08-13 14:06:35 +0000 UTC]

i enjoy it... it does reflect a lot of male things... i.e. keeping emotions inside just so u dont feel like a wimp and ur pride is not hurt.

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RhayningAcidity In reply to twiztedthought831 [2005-08-13 19:18:27 +0000 UTC]

Thanks. My creativity took me into wanting to write outside of my comfort zone; this piece was kind of hard for me. I'm glad that you got this for what it was

Dark Prodigy

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twiztedthought831 In reply to RhayningAcidity [2005-08-14 02:44:30 +0000 UTC]

im glad that u could capture the male mind like that it makes me smile :smile: idk.. w/e lol

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allsensesfail90 [2005-08-13 03:37:14 +0000 UTC]

i think thats beautiful...

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RhayningAcidity In reply to allsensesfail90 [2005-08-13 13:32:11 +0000 UTC]

Thanks. I worked on it with all the frustration still housed from my bout of writer's block. That's the best I've written in the longest time. Most of my talent has been in photography lately. But, anyway, I'm glad that it was okay. Thanks for commenting

Dark Prodigy

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