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RocketLaramie — Strawberry and Caramel Spring
Published: 2012-05-30 01:27:12 +0000 UTC; Views: 802; Favourites: 46; Downloads: 5
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It's my entry for the 's contest (Star Member Spring Event)I haven't time to finish it !! So I have to submit it incomplete T_____T Anyway I could participate, so I am happy for that ^o^ But I hate submiting incomplete deviations ^^U
She is Tamiya, the OC of I chose for the contest in her spring event clothes (school uniform)
She is with the vorpal bunny of her family who is always protecting her. I drew the bunny with Tamiya because the creator told me the bunny goes with her everywhere ^^
It was too dificult for me to choose the background colors ToT It maybe sounds stupid, but I couldn't find colors wich looks right with Tamiya and her bunny O_O I don't know why it was so difficult to choose, maybe I usually choose another kind of shade or something.
I am obsessed with sweets.... did you realize?? There are sweets in most of my drawings XD This time it's a strawberry and caramel cake (with cream) and Tamiya add to the cake cookies and chocolate o(^o^)o
I wanted to draw blossoms anyway, but it's a good way to show it's spring in the pic too ^o^
Well, I am so tired XD so I am going to take a reeeest of this ^^
I HOPE YOU LIKE IIIIT
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Hi!
First of all, I saw you won the third place in the contest, congratulations! I think the colors you picked worked very well together and it seems like you put quite a lot of effort into all those nice details in the background, including perspective - I usually don't risk drawing perspective myself, so I admire this! Also, compared to the last human drawing you posted before this one, your anatomy seems to have improved.
The main problem I see here is that the perspective seems a bit inconsistent. You did a great job on the bed-table (is that how it's called? The thing with drawers, where the cellphone is), but its perspective doesn't meet with the farthest part of the floor - the floor line should be in a little higher position. The same happens to the bed, it looks too narrow and not correctly positioned in comparison to the floor. The muffin box and the big cake also look a bit wrong. Try looking at perspective tutorials and photos to get a more accurate idea of how it works. But I must give you a high-five for trying - it already looks quite good, and trying is the first step at succeeding!
Oh, still on the perspective subject, I think you could have made other objects in perspective, too, like the chocolate bar and the shelves. I think it'd make them fit more in the background.
I can see you went with anime-style hair, and I quite like the way you drew her bangs. But I think the tips of her piggy-tails are a bit too pointy, making her hair look kind of stiff instead of silky and flow-y.
Another tip I could give you, even though I don't see it as a necessarily bad thing or a mistake in your drawing, is about shading. Don't be afraid to shade more! Add a little more contrast and play with color hues, not just with brightness and saturation. It will probably make your coloring more vivid and eye-catching!
One more thing: I envy your composition skills! I never draw backgrounds myself because I have a lot of trouble with composition, but you do it very nicely.
This is my first time writing a critique and English is not my first language, so I hope this was easy to understand, helpful (even if just a bit!) and not offensive - my intention never was offending you! ;-;
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Hiiii ^o^
Thank you so much for your critique! I am so happy, and I think you are right in everything you said
Oh, thanks for your congratulations! o(^o^)o
Don't worry, your critique was so fair and you communicates lot of kidness on it ^o^ And I feel everything you said so coherent and right ^o^
Yes, the perspective isn't consistent in some places and with some objects ^^U I have to improve it much more 
The hair is another thing I have to improve a lot too ^^ you are right, and I'll do my best to draw more silky hairs
About the shading, I actually wanted to color it with much more shading efects. Much more shadows' shades and shines' shades. I like cell shading style too, but just for some drawings. It's the kind of drawings wich looks the best with a complex shading effects, but I didn't have time to do it ToT Because I almost couldn't finish the drawing on time (because of the contest's dead line) so I had to paint it with a simple shading style to can enter the contest. But of course I'll do complex shading in another drawings with more time to do it ^o^
Thank you do much!
And thank you for your nice words too! I am so happy ^o^ and I'll do my best to improve all you said!
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You're very welcome! I'm really glad I could be helpful <3
Deadlines can be evil ;A; Let's hope you aren't under pressure because of them on your next drawing, I bet your coloring will come out super gorgeous!
Good luck with practicing! ^^
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Wah..this is great ! I love the background, never do like this before X'D
ah..that pet so cute, you're great on drawing cute creature e.deviantart.net/emoticons/l/l… " width="26" height="17" alt="
I just can say, your sketches are improved. The hair and fur is getting more detailed, anatomy is more good than before, and you do the perspective pretty well.
I'm wonder if you want to do cell-shade ? I more love your old coloring style... but it's all up to you e.deviantart.net/emoticons/w/w… " width="15" height="15" alt="
I just want to give a tip.
It's more better to add more details. Don't worry, just play around with it. I bet you can do it !
Keep up your artwork, I'm waiting for it e.deviantart.net/emoticons/l/l… " width="19" height="19" alt="
As usuals, don't think about my rating. I don't really get it though XD
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HIIII DEAAAAR! ^o^
I am sorry I took a time to reply you!! (I had hard days)
I was so happy to see a new critique from you again!! o(^o^)o THANK YOU SO MUCH!!
I love your critique so much!! o(^o^)o What you said makes me so happy!! And your opinions always help me a lot to improve!
About the shading ToT I like de cel shading style too, so I'll sometimes paint some of my drawings in cell shading but... I really didn't want to apply this style in that pic ToT I wanted to paint in a detailed shading style, with lot of shadow and shiny shades ^^ It would be the better shading style for this drawing, but I hadn't time to paint in that style, so finally I had to do a simple almost cell shading style ToT Too bad. So I totally agree with you ^^
Oh
Thank you deaaaaaaaar!! o(^o^)o I am doing my best to improve more and more!! And you are helping me so much with that!!
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Thankyou too for accepting my opinion
Uhm..I mean, all of that. Yes everything.. Sketches and shading, I believe you can do it
Sorry for confused you, I haven't that much grammar so..well... x__x"
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Congratulations on winning first place! 
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THANK YOOOOU SO MUUUUCH!! o(^o^)o
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Haha! Don't worry, dear ^^ I knew it was the 3rd place before reading your comment, so there's no problem at all, haha ^o^ THANK YOOOU
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This is really cute!!! You put so much cute detail into! Good luck in the contest! ^_^
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I love to put details and lot of cute stuff in my pics ^o^
Thank you so much, dear!! o(^o^)o
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Oh my! This is so adorable and incredibly good with BG on it. Also you draw my Vorpal Bunny with it ^^ I love it! I hope you win! You gain yourself a fave and watch!
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Thank you so much dear!! *o* And you are the creator of these two cute characters, so I am specially happy because you like it!! o(^o^)o
Oh, and thank you SOOO MUCH for the fav and watch, dear!! It's a great honour for me!!
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Thanks for the drawing as well. It's really rare for my OC to get fanarts
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REALLY?? O_O I chose her because I LOVE her design. She is super cute, adorable... it's the kind of character I though lot of people could draw her O_O
And I enjoyed a lot drawing her ^o^ Both, Tamiya and also her Vorpal Bunny who is cool and cute at the same time ^^ Super cool and super cute. I hope much more people will want to draw your OC, it would be GREAT ^^
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Thank you so much, dear!! o(^o^)o It makes me so happy!!!
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¡MUCHÍSIMAS GRACIAS! *o* MUAAAAAAAAAAKS
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THAAANK YOU DEAAAAR! o(^o^)o
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you're welcome^^ You have to note the donators what you want as a prize
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Ok dear ^o^ THAAAAANKS
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me encanta el perrooo es mazo majoooo!!! genial!!
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¡Jaja! ¡Gracias! ^o^ Aunque es un conejito
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jaja ups!! nada, nada .. pues es un conejo ( pero parece un perrooo) da igual me sigue gustando!!
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Tus dibujos son tremendamente limpios a la hora de aplicar color
Me gustan los detalles que le pusiste a la tarta =* -*=
Sigue practica más la anatomia humana y en especial la expresividad, las caras aun te quedan un poco acartonadas.
Y mucha suerte para el concurso =^ _^=º
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Muchíiiiiisimas gracias ^^
Quería haber hecho el color muchísimo más detallado, con más sombras y brillos. Pero no me dio tiempo ToT
Quedé tercera. Muchísimas gracias ^o^
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se ve adorable :3
no leí nada de la descripción, pq mi cerebro no lee ingles d noche... no muy bien q digamos :v
pero t quedo muy bien x3
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¡¡Jajajaja!! ^o^ ¡Muchísimas gracias!
No leerás inglés de noche, pero has comentado, y eso me hace muy happy o(^o^)o ¡Muchísimas gracias! MUAAAAAKS
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Son las cositas mas lindas!
Digo, ella y su pokemon.
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GRACIAAAAAAAAAASSS *o*
Aunque no es un pokémon. Es el conejo protector de su familia ^^
Este dibujo no tiene nada que ver con pokémon. Son dos OCs de una chica ^^
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Ooop! Me confundi!
Nunca lei el texto bajo la imagen.
Vi la forma de la creatura y crei que ella era una entrenadora.
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This, sorry ^^U
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Maybe a little, haha ^^ But it's a common look in a bunny, don't you think?
The original Bunny (the bunny made by his creator) is this
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