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RubyDoobyDoo β€” Dear Hero
Published: 2011-03-01 04:39:36 +0000 UTC; Views: 479; Favourites: 10; Downloads: 5
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Description Dear Heroβ„’

I am the paper, you are the pen. But you already knew that, didn't you?
You stain me. You poke holes in me.
Write or walk, your traces are everywhere.
I try to use white-out to cover my feelings and your words.
But you keep coming back, writing in my face.
"Go away," I want to say. "Stain someone else."
But I can't, I want you to write on me.
Tell me you love me and need me.
For without me, there is no you. And without you, there is no me.
Right?
Pencils try to tell me otherwise, but they never mean what they say.
And markers have such a colourful and sour language.
But you mean what you say, and I can't ignore the words.
Words sloppily thrown on me.
Then you leave.
Tossed. Gone. No intent to return and apologize.
But that's okay, you see? There's more pens in the desk drawer.
It doesn't matter that I admired you.
Maybe I'll find a pen who doesn't write in blood.
It doesn't matter that I looked up to you, no.
Maybe that new pen won't stab holes in me.
It doesn't even matter that I loved you.
Maybe the new pen will write in soft cursive instead of all harsh capitals.
No one could take your place, no matter how much I try and search.
The only thing that can take your words from me are tears.
I never knew paper could cry so much.
Yours,
FiveStarβ„’
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Comments: 9

Vanessanon [2011-03-13 02:48:55 +0000 UTC]

I really like the way you carried the metaphor through! The imagery and feelings are clear and felt.

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RubyDoobyDoo In reply to Vanessanon [2011-03-13 04:08:10 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much, I'm glad you enjoyed reading

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lolatheloner [2011-03-10 23:59:18 +0000 UTC]

Incredible.... You definitely have my vote. ^^

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RubyDoobyDoo In reply to lolatheloner [2011-03-11 20:46:00 +0000 UTC]

I'm glad you liked it, and thank you!

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fighterxaos [2011-03-09 23:28:21 +0000 UTC]

That's a nice metaphor there, you did really well with the comparison.

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hiramiInuzuka [2011-03-07 05:56:57 +0000 UTC]

Oh honey... You wrote it wonderfully... You and your dad have a harsh relationship, and, I'm going to shut up now. Wonderfully written hun. Love ya!

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RubyDoobyDoo In reply to hiramiInuzuka [2011-03-11 20:49:47 +0000 UTC]

Thanks, and don't worry about, everything's gonna be 'kay, kay? ^^

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04belgarion2k7 [2011-03-01 17:01:07 +0000 UTC]

Good extended metaphor, here. Absolutely fantastic - love the way you've compared a relationship to pen and paper...one needs to other and yet they can be used separately. Nice one.

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RubyDoobyDoo In reply to 04belgarion2k7 [2011-03-03 01:02:58 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much!

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