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I guess many of You expected that one
Page01: fav.me/d7v8zsc
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Page 04: You're here
Page 05 ( Ending of Chapter I): fav.me/d7wgn5o
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Ah come on RD don't be so mean she wanted to acheieve what you had done
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Yeah. Rainbow should be the last one to say "YOU'RE TOO RECKLESS!"
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You could have really hurt yourself, 'Shy. I know Dashie makes it look easy, but knowing how to crash properly makes a big difference, and you've survived every collision in your life by luck and flying very slowly, not by skill. The ground is not afraid to kill you.
You shouldn't worry your friends like that.
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I don't know where everyone is getting the idea that Fluttershy is OOC in the comments.. She has done many things that she didn't want to do and has proven she can be braver than she normally acts.. She stared down a dragon and others, helped Rainbow Dash in hurricane Fluttershy, Put her hoof down when Iron Will wanted his money, WHO was it that Rarity made the danger mission outfit for?.. NOT Rainbow Dash that's for sure!..
She also made the Breezies go home, cheered LOUDLY when Rainbow Dash made a sonic Rainboom,... There are plenty of samples that there's more to Flutters than her shyness.. If anypony is OOC it's Rainbow Dash and only because she wasn't being gun-ho about her trying the sonic rainboom but RD does consider fluttershy her best friend as trade ya episode proved.. or maybe RD just didn't want to share the Sonic rainboom.. In any case I don't think it was that OOC of RD to want to protect her friend.....
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Opinions may defer, and one cannot hope for global acceptance or else one would never dare to leave their home, let alone to think, create, or dream.
And, to me, this work is certainly a dream-come-true ^_^
"What if" are two small worlds that make a life's difference to us humans every day and every hour. The writing of the script was based on a "what if".
Some might go as far as ridiculing this work on basis that much has deviated from the original traits of the characters, but one cannot truly fault them for their point of view, nor would I submit myself to such argument because my point of view, and yours as well ^_^, can also be proven to be correct, as you so rightfully did in your comment. If it does happen and I would no longer trust my own, I'd have to delete the other 5 MLP comic scripts that are still waiting for an artist to come and draw them ;D
This is a "point of view" after all, and when one is peaceful, logical, and emotional at the same time, there never would be a wrong "point of view"... they just defer based on how we would want to perceive the characters of this comic... and this was the author's.
Thank you for your understanding.
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You know you've really done something stupid when Dash calls you reckless.
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Uh oh, I smell a herd of angry fluttershyfans approaching with pitchforks engraved with RD's name on them!
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well here's hoping that won't happen xD
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About writing:
I believe RD and Fluttershy are both supposed to be extremely OOC in this comic?
When I read this comic I only ask myself "Why would she do that in the first place?"
I think it's completely against Fluttershy's general personality to do something like that and RD wouldn't be so mean to her as well...
I know that "being in or out character" is very flexible, but here it just hits me in the face. The premise seems to be very forced.
As for art - it's cool. Keep up the good job.
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Um...not really.. Fluttershy isn't as OOC as you think.. Hurricane fluttershy was all about her overcoming her own self imposed limits to her flight power; Who was it that got the dragon to leave in Dragonshy? Put your hoof down episode was about her learning to be more firm.. Plenty of samples of Fluttershy going beyond those so-called limits.. As for Rainbow Dash.. Yes but only because she wasn't being gun-ho about her trying but RD has relized how important Flutters is to her in the Trade ya episode and would want to protect her friend...
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As you pointed out, Fluttershy did those feats always in order to 'help' someone or 'save' someone, not for her own pride as in this comic, that's why Fluttershy here is extremely OOC.
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True enough but she went though Iron Will's training out of own desire and maybe pride to overcome her shyness and there was no helping or saving others there...So she is capable of fighting her own little battles.. She just has a hard time getting there.. Very hard... So while I admit she would have a hard time getting herself to try.. She did overcome a little of her fear of flying in Hurricane Fluttershy and can bring herself to aim higher... Though I do want to know what made the change in her as I've seen enough of her own attempts to not be so shy and timid to wonder what would cause it to come out......
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Eh, overcoming your weakness is one thing, but someone who never runs shouldn't attempt a marathon run, because it's just plain stupid
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True but often the boring stuff is skipped in comics..
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This is work may appear irregular like a mere accident, but that was never the case nor is it the mere desire to 'being in or out character' or so was expressed... After all, isn't the very term "fanfiction" a reference to work of art that is not a vital part of the original show?
Fanfictions, though usually a work of literature, may either conform or deviate from the original terms upon which this show was based, hence the description on the very first page, with it's last line being the key point when approaching this comic.
1. When the following was written:
When I read this comic I only ask myself "Why would she do that in the first place?"
I think it's completely against Fluttershy's general personality to do something like that..."
Even though that it was proven/Fluttershy had proven, on several occasions, that the genteel mare, despite her lacking physical abilities, had held within her a heart even much braver than that of the toughest of mares... after all, and most certainly in real life, is it not the heart and how big it is that decides the limits for what we hope to do, in what life we are meant to have?
2. When the following was written:
and RD wouldn't be so mean to her as well...
Is that entirely correct? After all, Rainbow Dash went as far as scolding THE Wonder Bolt Academy Officer, Spitfire, for her approval of a certain cadets' reckless ways... and that made the author wonder how much more harder and difficult Rainbow Dash would be if the reckless one was, in this instant, a childhood friend. With this on mind, would it be considered as being 'mean' when one is so fearful for the welfare of a friend they love that they would go to any lengths to prevent them from harming themselves?
But, in the end of this rather long explanation, I offer my apologies to any insolence I may have caused. I do realize that I do not posses the one trait that would, perhaps, classify me as a rather good MLP writer... a trait that I sorrowfully lack while you have it, that would make me take my hat off for you when it comes to the proper way MLP and, indeed, Fluttershy, is seen ^_^
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Scolding a Wonderbolt officer is one thing. Scolding a friend who easily cries and is generally shy, insecure etc. is another thing... I think she would be rather worried, confused or scared? But being so angry?
Fluttershy 'proved' those things when it was really necessary. Here it was just "oh, I will do a sonic rainboom for my own pride".
You could have just make Fluttershy be forced to do so by others in any way: e.g. a reckless bet, being urged by someone etc. Here she is clearly doing it for 'herself'. Not impossible, but... not convincing.
You can bend characters' personalities in any way you want if you go for jokes or randomness, esp. one-shots, but when you try to write a 'serious' story using characters from pretty much any show (and the premise shows it's "serious"_, then you need to have a pretty good reason or background for a situation. If not, the dissonance might hit people like a truck.
But whatever, it's your story, your fun. :Shrug:
And don't criticise yourself that much. Maybe the rest of the story is okay.
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Thanks for the feedback ^_^
And while yours is a way to see things, mine is another so there is not, perhaps, a right or wrong here. That is why I have not reached a level where I would criticize myself, yet, and, as you so rightfully wrote, the rest of the story might prove Fluttershy-esqe enough to satisfy your taste ;D
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Ah, I'm pretty sure Whisperer of Winds has much better grasp on the story than I do, but well, after all this is a fanfic which has the right to differ from
official stuff considered as canon 
Aside from that? I don't really have more to add, thanks for the comment
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I guess it wouldn't be easy to have Rainbow Dash as a teacher. But great she saved her
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indeed on both accounts
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I knew it was Rainbow who caught her. Though she sounds like she's being mean, but she cares about Fluttershy's safety. Remember, RD can take a lot of pain, her fellow pegasus can't
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Yeah true, RD is worried about Shy however sometimes she lacks the right approach to convey her thoughts
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Yeah. That's our Rainbow Dash. Way too blunt.
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Rainbow can afford to be reckless, she's indestructible. Fluttershy...she's fragile, and if she got hurt a major Fanstorm would engulf Hasbro.
Don't take it too hard Fluttershy, Rainbow Dash is just looking out for you and all of Equestria.
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Reckless, maybe, its always very possible. Or simply that she's worried about her own merits if others can break it. For all dash's good sides, she can embody some pretty direct jealousies too.
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Well I guess next page will clear things out
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i feel like RD will say something along the lines of "And it was awesome!" or something.
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Rainbow...calling Flutters reckless...very different.
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Come on Dashie don't be mean like that to Flutters XD
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Well, the next page might make you want to kick my butt once you see it
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Oh, and I am much obliged ^_^
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it was in heat of the moment
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Rainbow Dash being the voice of reason? Is the world ending?
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haha I know right? xD
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I understand why she's yelling at her. What she did was incredibly dangerous, not just the act itself but not having someone there and to have a contingency plan in case something was to happen.
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Rainbow calling Fluttershy reckless? Times really do change, i guess
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i knew it, that RD would help her. but the yelling was kinda harsh but on the other hoof understandable hmmm
toooo the next chapter ^^ will she train with flutters? hmmm
and nice drawings as usual ^^
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thanks, well I like to think that actually Rainbow has the right intentions, but perhaps not the right approach to convey the general message
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its just rainbow dash ^^ i didnt expect anything else from her ^^
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