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saturn52 — Beltbuster Video: An Interactive Story - Chapter 1
#eating #fat #feedee #feeder #weightgain #bellystuffing #feederism
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Seems I’m in the minority but 3,1, just because both float my fat fic boat. Great set-up, looking forward to seeing where this goes!
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Oooh, this is a neat concept! I'm game! 
My vote: a1-b3
So, while I'm interested to see where Kimberly is going (wondering why her dad cut her off, why she was brought up so sheltered in the first place, why her dad is giving a cut on rent...), and Tammy is interesting in that I wonder about her backstory as well (you mention her throwing herself into her job) the thing is....I have a dang weakness for grunge ladies who could break me in half. I'm not sure if I see her as a romantic pairing for our POV character, but I'd just like to hang out with her more. Maybe we need to plot how to handle Kimberly, to make sure that we all don't kill each other or worse, lose our jobs XD
(I do like that you added a self-stuffing option there though!
I'm for pizza hut because a) I haven't had pizza in a while and miss that fluffy dumb crust they have, b) if there's going to be any stuffing, I feel pizza is nice and warm, c) there's something about figuring out battle plans while over pizza that I love. I feel like there might be a way to balance Kimberly and Angela, even they might not ever be able to be friends - and the power of carbs to be fun to bite out irritations on could help our POV get Angela to feel calmer and think through ideas.
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A-1
It's between Angela and Kimberly for me and Angela wins by a small margin. Kimberly seems like she would be too easy. Angela's story seems more interesting to me because there would be more "resistance". And I think if Angela starts gaining weight it's highly likely Kimberly would too.
B-2
The bakery got more description so it seems like you are pushing us in this direction. I'm on board and ready to go wherever you take us.
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A-2
I think it would be weird to ask the boss after she suggested she wanted time in front of house anyway. My first inclination would have been to ask Angela because I already know her, but she doesn't seem to be in a chatty mood. She wouldn't even answer how her weekend was, after all. Perhaps she would be up for talking about this whole new Kimberly situation, but we don't really have many facts to discuss yet. The best way to get those facts would be to take Kimberly out to lunch.
Plus, she's wearing a midriff-bearing top that showcases a recent weight gain. No harm in getting to see a little more of that.
B-1
I'm hoping that this is a Dairy Queen that serves both food and dessert. Two courses (or more?) will provide a good opportunity to judge how open Kimberley has been to overindulging lately. Plus, I'm kind of in the mood for icecream right now.
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No problem. I'm excited to see how it turns out!
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Choice A1, because I like the bad/goth girl type, Choice B2, because you need dough if you want to make a girl doughy
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Before anything, I wanna say how much I love this. I love the period vibe (does 90s count as period yet? I think it does now) and it's nods to crappy 90s cinema (no offense Dumb and Dumber) and music (if I ever have a pet snail, I'm gonna call it Biggie Snails). And I love the second person approach and how you ended it like it was a computer game scene where you have to pick a dialogue option. I hope for each subsequent decision to influence our Wasteland Karma! And it's great to see it so popularly received. You deserve it and hopefully it will be a springboard for some to check out your earlier stuff too, cos it rocks.
Finally, A3 - though I love the other two characters, already shown as having opportunity to subvert and add depth, Tammy would be the most interesting and unusual dynamic for me. And B-2 because I like bread.
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Choice A-1. I think there is a certain delight in contrast, best offered by Angela as the skinniest both in contrast to herself, and to her compatriots who would start heavier then her. Furthermore she seems to have the least going for her in life, so potentially atleast having a budding friendship and an interest in food kink or not gives her a bright spot in life where she might not have a business or family connections/ a reputation.
Choice B-1. Ice Cream is a great little treat to go out and enjoy as opposed to pizza that is just the common lunch of all basic wage workers everwhere, it also gives you a great opportunity to see if someone has a bit of a sweet tooth, information that could come in handy later, 
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First, referred by polaris, so I’m completely new to your work. Second, I’m expecting much from a teacher; bad grammar, too many typos, and rushed pacing can be hard to read, so I’m not expecting that here, and so far so good.
1996, wow, was old enough to remember what it was like, but as a preteen, and still to this day, not a music fan. Of course, I don’t hate music, I just don’t follow what’s popular. Only off putting thing of setting a story in the past, characters would be old now or dead, if it took place far enough back. Still, human relationships should be about the same.
Going with A-3; B-2. Sounds like the protagonist is the youngest character, though Kimberly could be his age, Angela being closest in age up to that point. Going for the boss might be a bit inappropriate professionally, but she seems to be the nicest and I can’t ignore how she’s dressed versus how she’s described in personality. Already a bit plump, it doesn’t sound like she’d quickly notice or care of ill-fitting clothes as she gains. Further, seeing the other two get into some sort of trouble upon returning has potential for comedy.
I like B-2 for variety of ways to get any of the girls eating more frequently. You’d have to have a very specific taste to want ice cream all the time. Full course meals from Pizza Hut would lend to good stuffing scenes; however, one should be cautious of eating there so often. The bakery, on the other hand, is a sneaky trap where you can get a little or a lot, can eat there at any time, and they have a truck. Not sure what you’d use it for, but it’s an extra plot device potential.
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Giving a good analyst as feedback is something I’ve always liked to do since my junior year in high school, but I’ve been remiss to do since then. Several of my English teachers at my school had students keep writing journals to write about anything we wanted. At the end of each quarter we had to read and comment on our classmates’ work. Being an introvert, it gave me the chance to communicate just a bit with my peers which I avoided. Wanted at least a few people to know they had some talent and their thoughts and experiences were appreciated. Like it so much that my senior year, my previous English teacher let me continue the practice. Never spoke to her, but I remember getting one thank you note from a junior.
Anyways, what you and Polaris are doing is something I will look forward to seeing develop. Usually I shy away from reading in general, especially longer works even though they’re likely better written. Despite being able to treasure good writing, I have a nasty habit of skipping ahead to find out what happens, which makes me less interested in reading the whole thing. These interactive stories will keep me from doing that, so thanks.
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Choice A-1. Angela is certainly the type I'd like to see fall into the habits of weight gain. She clearly does not seem to like the idea of WG from her observations of Kimberly which is a plus, her gaining weight and growing past Kimberly or even Tammy would be a nice reversal of the current arrangement of things, which I am also a fan of. And she's got the added quirk of being a smoker which if she drops the habit she could gain even more weight. I just see a lot of fun interactions with her character that I'd like to see focused on in the future, so she's got my vote all the way! Although, if I am being honest, I think you've set up very interesting characters all around. So whatever ends up getting picked will be good for me!
I do have one question, is the 4th option kind of a fallback option that will introduce a new character or set of characters for WG? I guess I'm not sure where that path would lead, but the others seem more obvious.
Choice B-3. I like the proximity of the setting and pizza is just the perfect lunch food for prospective WG. Very excited to see where this story goes! You've taken a slightly different approach than I have, and I think the choice of making the reader a 'character' is brilliant. Great job!
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I think you're right.
Ohh! Okay, I totally misinterpreted that. But it makes sense. That's an interesting option! I doubt it will win, but it would certainly be interesting if it did!
I'm excited about this too! Good luck!
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