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Published: 2008-04-24 02:33:00 +0000 UTC; Views: 656; Favourites: 17; Downloads: 11
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We poets are emotional,fragile creatures, fashioned into
bodies fleshly to you, foreign
to us, awkward in our skin,
we feel awkward in our stance.
We want to be
like you, we want to be
cool like you, drinking
Skyy Vodka, dressing beyond stylistically
fly, but we're stuck on the
runway, words jumbled in
our minds; the control tower's
out to lunch and there's
a million things we want to say.
Forgive our sensitivity -
dear lovers, forgive our
transgressions, making ourselves
sick, bowing to the Porcelain God,
wasting our insides out.
Pretty words with pretty
handwriting, we think that's
compensation enough.
We hope that's compensation
enough.
Never lauded, it's all we
have to offer.
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Comments: 38
your poems are all so amazing
this one reminds me of this part in A Brave New World that I'm obessed with, that deals with choosing between truth and happiness and beauty (as in art or literature, etc). i tend to be more than willing to let things hit me harder if it'll make for something artistic
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Hey, thank you so much. That really made my day when I saw this message the other morning.
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Love it, mate! That's all I can say, speechless at the moment, but I don't think I could have done anything like it or even close!
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Thank you so much!
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Interesting poem.
What is meant by Porcelain God? The only thing I could think of for this was paper, but I don't think it's that.
As a poet, I disagree with what you are saying. I do not feel that way. I feel that many people do though, so it's nice
I find the wording in several parts to be awkward. "fleshly to you, foreign to us" is one of those parts. It is certainly understandable, but I feel there could be a more lucid or attractive way to express it.
I think the organization of the stanzas was very suitable.
I dislike the whole runway comparison, but that is more of my personal view on the subject matter (using the analogy, I would say poets soar on the wings of poesy, versus getting stuck on the runway).
It certainly brings out what I think is a less written about subject, which is very nice.
Thank you for giving me something enjoyable to read. Also, if you're ever in the mood, I'd much appreciate your comments on my work. Thank you.
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Ahh, yes, I know where you're coming from, about poets and being very much so empowered with the words they use. I understand that, too. But that was always the view I've seen poets present which felt weird to me in a sense because myself as well as plenty of other poets I know don't actually feel that way, even if when they don't feel that way, ARE in fact, empowered. I was just doing a Through-The-Looking-Glass thing there for a moment. 
And Porcelain God = toilet. lol I was hoping people would somewhat get it when I mentioned the stomach turning and they basically spilling their guts.
That intro that bothered you bothered me in one read, but was fine in another. It was a nagging moment, actually. Didn't know whether to keep it or toss it. But yeah, I'm glad you enjoyed this piece, nonetheless, even if you didn't wholly agree with the ideas and I'll be sure to give your stuff a look. It might be some time (my inbox is a bit overwhelming me now) but I'll get to it.
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Thanks for the reply.
Porcelain god...wow, how did I not get that?
I look forward to your helpful critiques
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I'll be doing that this weekend, I promise.
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I'm once again 'as they say' speechless.
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I really enjoy your work. You've been so successful with Napo, it's really quite admirable.
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Really? YOU do? Wow, thanks, that means a lot coming from you cuz your stuff is so amazing. I simply adore the things you write and weave. You have a great sense of style and focus. Thanks!
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Aww, that's very sweet of you!
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this poem really speaks to me, it's delicate but also has a dark streak... it's like a blend of biblical rhetoric and a teenager's existential monologue. Please keep writing!
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Oh, I certainly will and thank you so much!
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you are very welcome, i thought it was great...
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Um...this....wow! Maybe its partially because I didn't get much sleep last night and its kinda late, but this poem had such an effect on me. It is so well written and the feelings are too true.... I nearly cried when I read this - its like being slammed into a wall while really watching it from above.
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Thank you so much. This poem means a lot to me and I think a lot of people feel this way but repress it. And I hope the lack of sleep didn't make this really good to you alone! lol!!! 
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Hahahha, you can be numero uno in my book!
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Thank you, thank you.
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You're welcome! :]
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:hearts: Thank you so much.
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I have never identified more clearly with a poem.
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Aww, thanks so much! Glad you enjoyed it!
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ya know, I like this a lot.
Actually, I was thinking today about how I'd love to live the life of someone else.
It can't be that easy to be so graceful and clever--and above all things, happy.
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Yes, yes. It's a constant problem/plague for me, to just not be so insecure.
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