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Published: 2009-03-09 00:49:25 +0000 UTC; Views: 170; Favourites: 5; Downloads: 2
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Description a kid named Jesse once collected
ringtones and listened to the 30 sec
blips instead of the lp's, heck, even
the single. too much extraness, he called
it. said more artistic expression
was contained in those fleeting moments
than an overblown song production.

he made beats with touch tones
and his touchstone was his self-published
album of twenty-second songs, twenty-two
strong. no one seemed to understand it and
questioned the point of it all, the why.

his answer was a jump off the side of
a building and the news reporters called
him a tragic hero misunderstood
and TV specials and songs and books
were created in little Jesse's memory

while the lot of them didn’t get all the fuss.
the ones that did might have been
pretending, but they became
cooler as the stead-fasters stayed the
uncool whackness, regulated and rendered
hopeless; the way they wagged their
heads towards them, oh! the shame! oh!
tragedies upon tragedies! you would have felt
sorry for these ones, you would have.
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Comments: 18

etto-etto [2009-03-23 01:28:18 +0000 UTC]

Then you should send a note to all dictionary makers and tell them of your new word!

he made beats with touch tones
and his touchstone
I liked the word choice in those particular lines ;]

The only thing that has me confused is your use of "whackness," since this indicated being whacked over the head like on Lost (if you watch that show xD). But even the slang uses for this word doesn't make sense with your context.

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ScribbledNotes In reply to etto-etto [2009-03-24 21:54:42 +0000 UTC]

Yeah it does make sense! It said something about they were regulated back to being the uncool whackness, right? Being whack means that young not cool or hip or "with it"
which is what I was saying all of them, the ppl that dent get what he was doing or what he was trying to present, was, still left as being whack or corney. You gotta be hip to the slang, now! You're too young not to get it! And whacked over the head?! Really now?!! That's just silly.

But thank you!

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etto-etto In reply to ScribbledNotes [2009-03-24 22:54:54 +0000 UTC]


Hey, now! I know that slang term D: I have an excuse, though. I'm blonde.

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ScribbledNotes In reply to etto-etto [2009-03-26 21:48:18 +0000 UTC]

nah, that don't fly with me cuz you know literature like that! lol

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etto-etto In reply to ScribbledNotes [2009-03-26 21:54:57 +0000 UTC]

>__>
...
<__<

I just pretend to know!

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YouInventedMe [2009-03-18 08:33:15 +0000 UTC]

love the sneaky rhymes of the second stanza, and the closing stanza.


xo!

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ScribbledNotes In reply to YouInventedMe [2009-03-18 11:34:31 +0000 UTC]

thanks!

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missmocha [2009-03-12 22:51:18 +0000 UTC]

Poor Jesse Interesting guy.

Extraness is a cool word. Nice work

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ScribbledNotes In reply to missmocha [2009-03-14 21:02:10 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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hauntingmewithsmiles [2009-03-11 03:01:48 +0000 UTC]

...italicize extraness? It'd make sense, perhaps.

twenty-second songs, twenty-two
strong.

that sounds so awesome. Good rhythm there!

!

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ScribbledNotes In reply to hauntingmewithsmiles [2009-03-14 21:08:32 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! I've started trying to do different sonic techniques that'll make it more pleasing to the ear, ya know?

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katepowellshine [2009-03-11 02:16:22 +0000 UTC]

I *like* the word extraness. Please do not remove!

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ScribbledNotes In reply to katepowellshine [2009-03-14 21:09:03 +0000 UTC]

Oh, I wasn't thinking of doing it!

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Temeraki [2009-03-09 11:40:15 +0000 UTC]

That was interesting I like!

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ScribbledNotes In reply to Temeraki [2009-03-14 21:12:53 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!

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AwkwardSylence [2009-03-09 04:24:35 +0000 UTC]

Aw, I was hoping Jesse could've gotten youtube-popularity with a hundred anonymous subscribers instead of being in the obituary.

Loved this poem, regardless of Jesse's fate. Great work.

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ScribbledNotes In reply to AwkwardSylence [2009-03-14 21:13:05 +0000 UTC]

Thanks.

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AwkwardSylence In reply to ScribbledNotes [2009-03-14 21:40:38 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome!

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