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Published: 2007-10-02 06:27:37 +0000 UTC; Views: 7331; Favourites: 107; Downloads: 19
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Description Vampirism (or a better name, i can never name poems)
Luke Coley

The storm calls her to the balcony
Laced up in the night sky
Her spine like the curtains
It snakes up her back
Her hair shines black
Her face dark as white
Nails tap the railing
As she waits for her hero
Her dress wavers in the wind
Consuming moonlight
Quenching her thirst
Her eyes pierce the sky
They burn through the stars
Her lips pursed in anger
Her cheeks flushed with fire
She waits for her saviour
The door bursts open
And in comes her knight
His palms strong as steel
His body an iron effigy
He walks to her like a titan
She spins in her silhouette
Her hands grip his shoulders
His clamp her waist
He moves in for the kiss
She moves in for the kill
Beneath the lips of beauty
Lie fangs of the night
She has waited her meal
Her teeth pierce bare flesh
Blood drains from his neck
The thick automaton
Becomes a helpless fawn
His body collapses on the railing
And with a simple push it topples over
The corpse falls a thousand feet
Before meeting the ground
The crack echoes for miles
Music for our lady’s ears
She licks her lips for the final taste
And returns to the dark of her room
Where her lover waits patiently
In the darkness that surrounds the room
He emerges from the shadows
His teeth gleam as he smiles
They embrace each other in silk
Their teeth sink in neck
Blood cascades down her breast
As she feeds him his share
Love so bitter
It must hide from the sun
Who needs the day?
When you have the whole of night
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Comments: 46

AngeliaKBridget [2017-08-28 16:54:50 +0000 UTC]

I like the story the poem tells~ Plus, stereotypical knight in shining armor is so overrated anyway. . . Who needs day when you have night??

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StoryOfAGirlGoneBi [2014-02-06 23:47:46 +0000 UTC]

i really think this is great and i love the concept of it all.Β 

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Lady-Ceridwen [2013-04-29 19:48:40 +0000 UTC]

Awesome! I agree, i like the lady being the dominant, it gets old hearing about men saving the women (though I'm kinda partial to it) but still, it get's old, great story! I recommend more sensory details, but other than that, great work!

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smartguy776 In reply to Lady-Ceridwen [2013-10-29 01:22:29 +0000 UTC]

I agree,it really does get tiring hearing about the damsel in distress getting rescued.

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Lady-Ceridwen In reply to smartguy776 [2013-10-29 01:41:01 +0000 UTC]

yes, but than again I'm partial to it, to a certain degree, like the best guy friend and best girl friend and when the heroine is in a tight spot the best guy friend rescues her, other wise it gets a little annoying

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aniri02 [2011-09-11 06:24:26 +0000 UTC]

This made me laugh I've had enough of the damesel-in-distress brainwashing and 'twas nice to read something like this...

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Angie103 [2011-08-06 01:35:25 +0000 UTC]

AMAZING!!!

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XxXVampireLove [2011-06-17 22:48:06 +0000 UTC]

Brilliant, its like im there

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sonnydey [2011-01-22 05:32:22 +0000 UTC]

Good and creative poem. I would enjoy more sensory detail so that i could feel her bite while reading. overall nice. oh yeah. Someone on this site should draw the vampire repunsel lady because that would be sick.

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Nights21 [2010-07-14 04:10:59 +0000 UTC]

I like the flow of this piece

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lalalalexiii90 [2010-07-06 12:50:32 +0000 UTC]

oh hai. i think youre poem is kindof RAD MANNNNNNNNNNNNN.
DUDE WTF DIS IS A CRAP POEM IT DUSN EVEN RIME.
i lol'd.
chu are so weird.
word.

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Seraph18 In reply to lalalalexiii90 [2010-07-06 12:56:28 +0000 UTC]

@_@

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lalalalexiii90 In reply to Seraph18 [2010-07-06 15:41:12 +0000 UTC]

;_;

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Ravenssecret [2009-10-27 22:25:41 +0000 UTC]

I really like this poem you told. ever since i was little i hated the fact that all the ones in need of help were the women...it bugs me so much. so yes this was a good read.

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kagura-chan1234 [2009-10-22 16:31:39 +0000 UTC]

i love it! great poem!

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paulquirao [2009-08-17 14:11:43 +0000 UTC]

nice one..

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loveorlife721 [2009-07-02 20:26:32 +0000 UTC]

holy shit thats kewl

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valpula [2008-07-19 09:39:32 +0000 UTC]

D: I LOVE IT.

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Seraph18 In reply to valpula [2008-07-22 10:44:16 +0000 UTC]

ty ty ty

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valpula In reply to Seraph18 [2008-07-30 12:41:44 +0000 UTC]

welcomewelcomewelcome,nab.

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Polly3158 [2008-07-07 22:24:04 +0000 UTC]

I love this!!!! Its amazing how well you put it together.

And I'm just wondering, would you mind if I drew a picture of 'Our Lady', the maiden in distress thats truly a hungry vampire?
I'd be thrilled if I could!

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Seraph18 In reply to Polly3158 [2008-07-10 09:16:39 +0000 UTC]

Really? Wow absolutely! Please feel free ^^

I'd love to see it when its done :3 let me know

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Polly3158 In reply to Seraph18 [2008-07-10 18:44:45 +0000 UTC]

YAY!

I'll try to finish it as quick as I can, but I'll make sure it comes out good for you =3

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mcboogyloogy [2008-05-27 23:26:45 +0000 UTC]

i like the take on the victim becoming the villain for lack of a better word. it was rich and full of vivid imagery. brilliant

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Seraph18 In reply to mcboogyloogy [2008-06-01 11:05:01 +0000 UTC]

Thankyou ^^
Much appreciated

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cherryblossomrain [2008-05-08 04:13:06 +0000 UTC]

woo! i love the twisted fairytale thing. and heros bother me. this just rocks!
(mmmm... dinner. hehehe.)

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Seraph18 In reply to cherryblossomrain [2008-05-08 22:05:52 +0000 UTC]

xD thankyou, i thought it was quite good myself ^^ I've always been proud of this

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AmoraYingRosaKisaLov [2008-04-30 21:23:59 +0000 UTC]

Love love love love love love love love love....... would you please make one for me?

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Seraph18 In reply to AmoraYingRosaKisaLov [2008-05-05 06:46:49 +0000 UTC]

O.oll thankyou, and possibly, its something that requires inspiration though

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AmoraYingRosaKisaLov In reply to Seraph18 [2008-05-09 22:11:08 +0000 UTC]

O.K! Just let me know when your done!

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Seraph18 In reply to AmoraYingRosaKisaLov [2008-05-11 10:00:52 +0000 UTC]

x.x i need to learn more about someone to do that and i only write for people that challenge my mind so i'm afraid its not that simple.

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AmoraYingRosaKisaLov In reply to Seraph18 [2008-05-22 22:52:09 +0000 UTC]

Well, I'm in love with fantasy, I have a bit of a salt and pepper mentality, I wouldn't be surprised if a vamp followed me, it just the reason of why me?
I'm also a romantic, but if someone is just after me and not my heart, I'll knock the daylights out of them. I'm also mostly seen with books. Lots of books.

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Seraph18 In reply to AmoraYingRosaKisaLov [2008-06-01 11:04:31 +0000 UTC]

Sounds interesting O.o

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AmoraYingRosaKisaLov In reply to Seraph18 [2008-06-01 15:03:09 +0000 UTC]

Also if one came to my house I would do all sorts of test on it. Then when I was sure it was the real thing I would squeal and ask him to tell his life story, confusing the poor vamp.

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Seraph18 In reply to AmoraYingRosaKisaLov [2008-06-02 09:10:34 +0000 UTC]

Awwww ._. 's mean

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AmoraYingRosaKisaLov In reply to Seraph18 [2008-06-03 15:36:43 +0000 UTC]

Yeah but, I would want to know! Wouldn't you?

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Seraph18 In reply to AmoraYingRosaKisaLov [2008-06-06 10:59:23 +0000 UTC]

myea

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AmoraYingRosaKisaLov In reply to Seraph18 [2008-06-09 21:20:32 +0000 UTC]

Well its better than to make it my pet.

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Seraph18 In reply to AmoraYingRosaKisaLov [2008-07-10 09:15:25 +0000 UTC]

this is true

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LamiaFemina [2008-02-07 18:07:06 +0000 UTC]

Exellent

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Seraph18 In reply to LamiaFemina [2008-02-09 05:53:03 +0000 UTC]

Thankyou, ill be sure to check your work as well ^^
And thankyou for the favorite too

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TheRealmOfNothing [2008-01-29 16:13:34 +0000 UTC]

I aboslutely love this. It is a very different and refreshing take on the Damsel/Distress/Knight theory. Very good job. :]

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Seraph18 In reply to TheRealmOfNothing [2008-01-30 01:15:35 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much ^^
Thats what i was aiming for :3 i despise those common stories with the weak willed princess and her savior so i thought I'd add a darker twist

Thank you ^^ much appreciated

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Jacksparrow776 [2007-10-20 12:25:06 +0000 UTC]

wow, its like 5th time i've read it and its brilliant, you know when you spoke on Wdnesday, i was reading it then, its wow, i cant think or a word to decscribe it.
Anyways its great and i love it soooooo much i'm going to print it off!!!! and stick it o my wall! lol
Wow, i love the describtion, its so nice/lovely/makes the mood,
I WANT TO SPEAK TO YOU!!!!!!! its sooooo horrible, i mean the time difference!!!!

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Seraph18 In reply to Jacksparrow776 [2007-10-23 20:10:35 +0000 UTC]

lol fantastic ^ ^
im glad you like it

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Jacksparrow776 In reply to Seraph18 [2007-10-27 08:41:10 +0000 UTC]

np i loved it!!!!!!

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