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Noss91 [2011-12-03 06:25:40 +0000 UTC]

Very nice job on the coloring indeed I especially like the hair on the one to the left!

But I'm honestly very bothered by the faces. First of all, these are three separate people, but the faces are still exactly the same, siblings are similar, but not the same Unless these are triplets, but there seems to be some difference in their age (and even eye color)?
You could try varying the facial shape a little more, make the noses, eyes and mouths different shapes and sizes. In most mangas the characters have the same faces, just different hair, but this is not a good way to develop different character properly, there are a couple of tutorials on here on how to mix and match features to make nice and interesting characters Might be worth looking into I also didn't notice that the one on the right is a girl until I noticed her cleavage! Maybe you would like to change her facial features a little, smaller nose and a more feminine shape on the eyes? Girls that age tend to wear make-up too

While talking about faces, their bone structure isn't entirely correct, the chin is far too small, a mouth is a lot higher up on a face, and the jaw is usually a little bigger (useful to know even if you draw manga/anime). Try splitting up the face in three parts when adding facial features. The eyes should be in the very middle of the face (vertically speaking) and the forehead should end about half-way up the head from there - same with the mouth - so that you end up with the face split in four parts of the same height.
Why have you closed one eye on every character? It doesn't look much like a spontaneous family portrait if everyone are having the same expression, and it should be avoided in all artwork, which would make each person stand out a lot more
Their mouths also look a little bit unnatural. Why are the teeth showing so much on one character and not at all on the other even though the angle of their heads is the same? I suggest drawing a few realistic portraits/sketches from different angles to better figure out how a human mouth looks, it easily carries over to anime/manga as well

And last, composition:
I wonder why one of them is hiding his face behind the middle guy? If you wanted to make an "I'm burrowing my face into my brother's hair"- kind of feel, you could change the posture a bit, making him look more leaned forward, try to give them both a more playful expression too to make it clearer what's happening For the time being both look very awkward at their positions since none of them are expressing anything with their eyes, just the mouths. I'm thinking the open mouth and showing teeth sort of say "AGGH. I hate this fluff in my nose!"
Their posture isn't the best either with such steeply angled shoulders. If you look at your own, you'll notice that the only reason they are slightly angled, is because of muscles on your back that connect your neck to your shoulder, as seen in this picture: [link] (Note that the shoulder bones are almost 90 degrees against the spine), in this frontal view you see how the muscles connect on the front: [link]
It'll look much more natural once you take these into account

I hope it's not too long, and that maybe you'll find something interesting in the comment.
Good luck and keep up the good work!

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