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Published: 2011-09-13 01:43:18 +0000 UTC; Views: 457; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 6
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Hey everyone sorry I haven't been able to post anything lately things have been crazier than usual and as always please give me some feedback and also some tips on how I can do alot better. Thanks you guys rock. x3Related content
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I'm astonished by the violence of some reviews, expecially for a NON-REQUESTED CRITIQUE PIECE!
Well, personnaly when I don't like something, i don't say anything. I don't even give a note!
And I don't judge art on a technical point. Just on emotion. And this piece HAS emotion, despite the technical blunders.
So keep up praticing, that's all.
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Alright, I'm going to give my honest opinion on this (although I doubt you'll read through most of it):
The boy's right arm is extremely off, even more so than Amy's are; observe, one arm is way too long and the other one is way too short. The hand on the short arm also doesn't look like its really holding anything; it looks more like Amy is holding a fist. Also, the legs aren't long enough for the both of them; it gives off the impression that the two of them are midgets. The legs should be about twice the length of the torso, and the arms should stop at the pants pockets, unless your human has even longer arms resembling that of an orangutan.
You did a decent job with shading the pants legs and skirt, but the wrinkle lins are much too thick; try using smaller points. There should probably be a few more wrinkles in the skirt Amy's wearing as well - it looks pretty flat and lifeless. Amy's left breast is pretty odd looking compaired to her right; almost saggy looking. Aside from a few shading difficulties, I see nothing wrong with the shoes.
The boy's tie (if it IS a tie...I honestly can't tell WHAT it is) should probably be a different shade than the shirt, unless...it IS a part of the shirt? The shading in the hair is slightly off, but hair is pretty difficult to do as it is, so I'll excuse that much.
Amy DOES look pretty masculine. What is that thing above her upper lip? It resembles a mustache. There's no need to add anything above the upper lip unless it is some sort of facial hair, or something pertaining to realism. And you're not doing realism, you're drawing manga, which is pretty simple to do. Try adding something to the lower lip instead, it looks a lot better and, if you use a thin enough line, looks more like a wrinkle in the lip than facial hair. Finally, Amy's chin is a bit crooked; you'll have to watch out for that in the future.
With that said, I'll leave you to your thoughts.
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Thank you very much i will try my best to do better.
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Also, NEVER DRAW FINGERNAILS AGAIN. That's all.
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Whats the thats all did you mean the at all. Fail x3. Anyways i was working on way to fast and thats probably why they look bad. Anyways I am working on a piece that I think will boost my talent. Can't wait until i post and see what my group thinks. Just wait I'm due for an ephiony. I cant wait until i get so much better. X3
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I can't tell what those first few sentences meant, so I'm going to ignore them. As for the fingernails, I didn't necessarily mean that they looked bad, which they do... but that's not the point. When you're drawing Manga, eliminate fingernails unless you're drawing an extreme closeup on the hand. Otherwise they just look strange.
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Gotcha, and by the way hope that you'll have fun without me until I become better. Peace
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Amy looks a bit masculine. Also, your proportions are very off. Not trying to sound mean here or anything, but your proportions are off. The people look deformed because their legs are too short, and their torsos look strange too. Mainly study anatomy a bit more closely to improve.
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I know your not trying to be mean. I understand that they look wierd and I apologize for that. I've looked at anatomy and i thought i was improving apparently I'm not. Dang it well back to the drawing board. :/
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The Complete Idiot's Guide to Drawing Manga is probably the most valuable resource you can own for manga. So go buy it, study it, practice what is written, and then post more art.
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Thanks. I guess i could read it. I've just been trying so hard and yet i guess I dont have that kind of skill yet but it will make more fun to get to at the level of a pro. Hope that i will become a pro and hope you do too.
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Thank you it took forever to draw Amys eyes and hands. Hope you will check out my other works. x3
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youre welcome! Feel free to check out my prints too!
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I wills be sure to do that. x3
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