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Published: 2004-10-31 15:21:25 +0000 UTC; Views: 188; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 6
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Description      The sun has already fled the skies, leaving only speckles of dark red amongst the clouds. All is quiet except for the hum of the occasional car on the road, and the chirping of insects in the brush. There is the clang of metal against metal followed by the loud moaning creak of the hinges of opening gates. A boy of about fourteen walks through, followed by a girl of the same age. She gently turns to latch the gate shut, and hurries to the young boy. His dark hair is streaked wet, and his entire body shivers as he staggers towards the car.
     In the car, the lights are dimmed, and a woman is sitting in the driver’s seat, looking worriedly at the two of them. The young girl runs forward to slide open the door, and they clamber into the back seat. The woman takes a look back at them before she starts the car.
     “You okay, dear?” she asks.
     “I’m fine,” answers the boy stolidly.
     There is a brief hum of the engines igniting; the lights flicker off, and all is silent once more. The boy’s eyes are transfixed on the road beyond the dashboard and all is quiet. The girl turns to him and takes his arms in hers. He turns to face her, and manages a smile through his blue, broken lips. He holds up his hands for her to see.
     “Oh my gosh…” she exclaims as she runs her hands over his pale, withered fingers.
     She throws her arms around the boy’s shivering body and presses herself against him. All is quiet again, except for the soft drone of tires over gravel.
     “What was it?” the girl asks.
     “Fifty two,” the boy replies in weary voice.
     “I’m so sorry,” says the girl quietly, pressing herself closer.
     For a long time, all is still. Then, the girl feels the fingertips gently caressing her hair. She glances up bemusedly, a beautiful smile lighting upon her face. The boy is smiling too, despite the tiredness in his eyes. He runs his fingertips down the length of her body, as if there was never a more effective way of warming his frozen hands. The boy looks as if he is about to speak, his lips drift apart, but he remains silent as if he were too weary to talk.  The girl remains smiling as she reaches up to press his cheeks against hers. The boy leans against her shoulders as she wraps him within her arms, and soon his tired eyes are shut.

     As the car rolls along the freeway, the woman in the driver’s seat calls out, “Hey, the moon. Look at the moon, you two.”
     There is no reply, and glancing up in the rear-view mirror, she finds only two lovers asleep in each other’s arms.
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Comments: 18

OLoboCanta [2005-03-02 22:36:40 +0000 UTC]

i liked all the emotion in this piece. it was beautiful.

there is a sense of mystery about it, which i adore, but i'm funna have to ask you, when the boy and girl were talking in the car, and she asked "what was it", he replied, "52".

what does that mean? you never told us...maybe for a reason, but i really want to know now

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snowballsarebad [2004-11-09 03:14:46 +0000 UTC]

Ah, that was nice. Brought a little smile to my face. Keep it up.

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Xilocastro [2004-11-08 15:15:26 +0000 UTC]

what a great work! well done sorry for the late comment

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Nuxie [2004-11-07 20:12:52 +0000 UTC]

dang i wish i could write!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ur so good....great job!!!

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cinemastrgegirl [2004-11-01 16:56:30 +0000 UTC]

very good. it's very cute and it makes it sound like it's spooky at the same time.

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SimplyTurquoise [2004-11-01 05:01:00 +0000 UTC]

awwe... i wish i could write as well as you...

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SharpEdge In reply to SimplyTurquoise [2004-11-01 05:03:54 +0000 UTC]

Awwww thanks.

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blackrosesfall [2004-11-01 01:40:51 +0000 UTC]

love it... why can't i right something like that... its reminds me of october sky

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lalamushu [2004-11-01 00:34:01 +0000 UTC]

Very nicely written. I like this a lot. ^^ Well done, well done.

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jenova-synthesis [2004-10-31 19:47:00 +0000 UTC]

of course you noe which to lovers they were dont you ?..hehehehehe..remember my xanga...

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SharpEdge In reply to jenova-synthesis [2004-10-31 23:31:13 +0000 UTC]

Hey hey hey I got disclaimers dude. I never said twas about me.

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jenova-synthesis In reply to SharpEdge [2004-11-01 00:07:02 +0000 UTC]

nononon remeber my xanga and the thingie?

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SharpEdge In reply to jenova-synthesis [2004-11-01 03:09:56 +0000 UTC]

You're the girl.

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jenova-synthesis In reply to SharpEdge [2004-11-01 23:44:55 +0000 UTC]

OK!!!!!!

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SharpEdge In reply to jenova-synthesis [2004-11-01 02:40:00 +0000 UTC]

I see.

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jenova-synthesis [2004-10-31 19:46:33 +0000 UTC]

dotdotd0tzz

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Kealli [2004-10-31 17:49:40 +0000 UTC]

awwwww *sniffle* thats so cute!!!! ;-;

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BlackRose55 [2004-10-31 16:20:50 +0000 UTC]

awwwwwwwwwwwe

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