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Good God how LONG has it been? Pages 2 and 3 to 'Immoral Flame' were uploaded last July. And now look; nearly half a year later I got Pages 4 and 5 up now. Jesus; could it move any slower!? X-p X-p Well this time I want to get this moving a long now and have more than enough time to make the next pages. So hopefully next week we'll see 6 and 7.

The previous pages showed Sin blasting away enemy troops. The remaining troops look on pretty scared stiff. And when sin turns to give them the "EVIL EYE"; they run like rabbits. This leaves Sin delivering a cliche "Run coward" line. I think I was watching 'Samurai Jack' while writing the script. =-p

The next page now has Sin joining up with...ANOTHER Lombax. O.o Who's this guy? Well I can tell you right now it ISN'T Ratchet. It looks a little like him but not a whole lot. Somehow related to. You'll find out in the next few pages who he is. But whoever it is; Sin doesn't seem to get along with him. In fact lookit all those ECUs of him. When is Sin ever in a good mood!? never I think .X-p That one ECU of him on Page 5 just has him like "....." towards the other lombax. I guess it was either that or "Go f**k yourself!"

AFTERTHOUGHTS: Working in a war torn setting with red BGs can greatly contrast with your characters. It might still be a little hard to tell what's going on; but I feel it's improvement from the previous page. I think one problem I'm wrestling with are the character's eyes. I dunno what it is but sometiems they seem bigger than they should.

so yes we still have morphing issues going on. Eyes get too big as well as pupils and the eyebrows on Sin seem to change shape.

One big problem I have is memory. All this color and linework can mess up the computer's brain. So sometimes I need to save it and come back to it otherwise all this stuff can cause it's brains to freeze.

I know things look a little messy now; but keep in mind we're in the middle of a flashback. I feel when reorganizing thoughts; things tend to get a little cloudy. So who's flashback is it? Sin's? More than likely.

notice how the enemies look very different fom the previous ones on the former page. Yeah part of the disorganized thought process. They look like Drophyds from the FTOD game; but I made their heads round to make them slightly ambiguous. They could be Drophyds; but they can be anything since I want the prologue to be a little ambiguous. They could 'Space Moblins' for all I know. XD

And yes Tachyon's in the fic. We're back in time where he attacked the lombaxes. This takes place on Veldin where Tachyon's base is (Or one of them anyway.) I didn't want it to take place on the Lombax homeworld; cause this also kinda ties with Ratchet's origins.

Well hope you enjoyed the pages and the dialogue. As you can clearly see; Sin doesn't get along with many people does he? X-p

Sin is (c) to me Shinragod
Ratchet and Clank is (c) to Insomniac

Description
Immoral Flame Pages
Page 1
Page 2

Good God how LONG has it been? Pages 2 and 3 to 'Immoral Flame' were uploaded last July. And now look; nearly half a year later I got Pages 4 and 5 up now. Jesus; could it move any slower!? X-p X-p Well this time I want to get this moving a long now and have more than enough time to make the next pages. So hopefully next week we'll see 6 and 7.

The previous pages showed Sin blasting away enemy troops. The remaining troops look on pretty scared stiff. And when sin turns to give them the "EVIL EYE"; they run like rabbits. This leaves Sin delivering a cliche "Run coward" line. I think I was watching 'Samurai Jack' while writing the script. =-p

The next page now has Sin joining up with...ANOTHER Lombax. O.o Who's this guy? Well I can tell you right now it ISN'T Ratchet. It looks a little like him but not a whole lot. Somehow related to. You'll find out in the next few pages who he is. But whoever it is; Sin doesn't seem to get along with him. In fact lookit all those ECUs of him. When is Sin ever in a good mood!? never I think .X-p That one ECU of him on Page 5 just has him like "....." towards the other lombax. I guess it was either that or "Go f**k yourself!"

AFTERTHOUGHTS: Working in a war torn setting with red BGs can greatly contrast with your characters. It might still be a little hard to tell what's going on; but I feel it's improvement from the previous page. I think one problem I'm wrestling with are the character's eyes. I dunno what it is but sometiems they seem bigger than they should.

so yes we still have morphing issues going on. Eyes get too big as well as pupils and the eyebrows on Sin seem to change shape.

One big problem I have is memory. All this color and linework can mess up the computer's brain. So sometimes I need to save it and come back to it otherwise all this stuff can cause it's brains to freeze.

I know things look a little messy now; but keep in mind we're in the middle of a flashback. I feel when reorganizing thoughts; things tend to get a little cloudy. So who's flashback is it? Sin's? More than likely.

notice how the enemies look very different fom the previous ones on the former page. Yeah part of the disorganized thought process. They look like Drophyds from the FTOD game; but I made their heads round to make them slightly ambiguous. They could be Drophyds; but they can be anything since I want the prologue to be a little ambiguous. They could 'Space Moblins' for all I know. XD

And yes Tachyon's in the fic. We're back in time where he attacked the lombaxes. This takes place on Veldin where Tachyon's base is (Or one of them anyway.) I didn't want it to take place on the Lombax homeworld; cause this also kinda ties with Ratchet's origins.

Well hope you enjoyed the pages and the dialogue. As you can clearly see; Sin doesn't get along with many people does he? X-p

Sin is (c) to me Shinragod
Ratchet and Clank is (c) to Insomniac