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Vaperfox [2006-11-02 04:50:47 +0000 UTC]

Very nice work Silverlion! This piece looks like a good subject for a critique.

I've noticed some major improvement between this work and your past deviations. Most notably your use of space and posing.

Before we get to those two elements, let's focus on the character detail. The costume design of this superhero is very unique and interesting to look at. The most notable aspect of her suit is the T-shaped torso piece that accents the female figure and provides some interesting shapes in the curves of the fabric. Her tail is blurred and I feel that you probably did that to signify fur or for ease of drawing. However, it feels distracting and I believe that spiked edges on key areas of the tail's outline would work just as well. It takes longer to do, but it's well worth it.

Her wrist guards and thighs have very nice claw-tear designs which I feel are very appropriate for Dee's costume. I see a more feline-like side to her when I notice the lion-like detail you did on her right foot, giving her a cat-like footpaw. That's a small but wonderful touch that adds a feralness and playfulness to this character.

Her mask could use a bit of work, but I like where you're going with that spiked design idea. I have to be honest about you when it comes to her smile: it makes me uneasy. I don't think it's the smile size that's the issue. Rather, it's your choice of color for the lips themselves that detracts from the smile. It seems a bit too bright, almost like a harley-quinn smile. Try darkening those lips and see what effect you get.

Now for spacing. You've got a good concept of composition in this piece. You've framed the character very well and decided to omit her left footpaw to focus on her torso and face. Good move, as it helps me focus on the character design rather than the pose itself.

However, that pose is a bit unnatural. I feel that she'd be a little more crouched down while doing a feral run. Try lowering her stance and experiment with her pouncing and resting. See what works best.

Your background is simple and effective, which is good because I like to see it when you focus on your character design rather than background or setting elements.

I'm happy to see how much your work has improved, Silverlion! I'd love to see more work in the future where you experiment with poses and costume design!

Good job! It's now one of my favs!

Vaperfox of GENTEC

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mozzaratti [2006-10-25 15:53:12 +0000 UTC]

Seems like you're trying out some new shading and highlighting techniques, and they're working quite nicely.

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