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simplysamwise — An Easier Form of Suicide
Published: 2009-07-26 18:47:33 +0000 UTC; Views: 1019; Favourites: 25; Downloads: 4
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Description ‘i’m coming apart at the seams,’
you whispered.
[darling, i already knew that.]
you,
       with your beautiful, bruised skin,
       and handmarks down your spine,
       you’ve got his fingerprints all over you.
you never were very strong anyway.

you say he holds your fragile dreams
in his cruel grasp,
                         [the one you’re so familiar with.]
      but why do anything about it?
you,
       with your choked breaths,
       broken dreams and broken hearts,
       i know you’ll settle for last place.
‘cause they say
    you’ve always got a second choice,
                                           [a second chance,]
           but not anymore.

you,
       used to be alive,
       knew how to smile [did you forget?]
       had lights in your eyes
[you still do.
                  or are they just the tears?]
there’s all these broken question marks
beneath your paper-thin skin.
          needled and bloodless,
you’ll take what he gives.
         [you’ll give what he takes.]

your reflection looks more alive than you,
    at least she’s whole.
        look at yourself,
              do you see what he’s done?
you,
       and your twisted spine,
       with your broken bones
       crushing your scarred heart.
[do you care at all?]
               don’t you know what he’s doing?
           [you don’t know what you’re doing]
you can lie to yourself,
        but i see right through you.
     i’ll be here to sew up your wounds now,
     but i’m running out of thread faster
     than he’s running out of steam,
     and this train[wreck] won’t stop.
[but for now, i’m here,
            and i’ll stitch up your seams.]

       he tells you that you belong to him,
that his bruises on your arms are proof.
             but it’s not true.
       the daylight tells lies,
             those bruises were caused by you,
       so get out while you can['t].
you,
       marked and tainted,
       by his twisted intentions,
       you say you have no choice.
[but darling, you choose to say ‘yes.’]
i can’t understand you.
    are you addicted to the taste of your own blood?
        or do you savor that moment,
that split-second of touch before he hits you?
      maybe you feel wanted,
            in his fumbled, rough kisses, and drunken passion.
              [how can you pretend he loves you?]

you,
       you used to love so easily,
       you’re now broken so easily,
       as you swallow your pride.
how did he do this to you?
do you ever wonder?
       each morning you
take your pills, lie to yourself
       look in the mirror
and say it’s getting better
       don’t you know?
you’re the one hurting yourself.
       you once said you loved life
now it’s just an easier form of suicide.
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Comments: 76

chrysanthe-aL In reply to ??? [2009-08-04 04:21:11 +0000 UTC]

blaghh. you're lucky i wrote that only half-awake, because i am less honest and shyer in my more-than-half-awake state.

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simplysamwise In reply to chrysanthe-aL [2009-08-04 15:21:26 +0000 UTC]

lol.

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DancingMartini In reply to ??? [2009-07-28 17:51:35 +0000 UTC]

I love this.
how do you come up with it?
I really like the way you've placed the sentenses
and what they say.
keep it up

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simplysamwise In reply to DancingMartini [2009-07-29 13:03:12 +0000 UTC]

i dunno. it just... came to me. :]
thanks.

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DancingMartini In reply to simplysamwise [2009-07-29 14:29:14 +0000 UTC]

it usually is that way

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simplysamwise In reply to DancingMartini [2009-07-30 14:54:07 +0000 UTC]

yuppyupp. :]

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losingmyfaith [2009-07-28 06:11:15 +0000 UTC]

well written piece, i like it. i think that you could get rid of some of the brackets, but overall it's great (:

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simplysamwise In reply to losingmyfaith [2009-07-28 17:22:29 +0000 UTC]

right, i agree. :]
i fiddled with the form a bit, and fixed some brackets, punctuation stuff, and it reads/looks better. thanks!

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losingmyfaith In reply to simplysamwise [2009-07-28 19:59:08 +0000 UTC]

no problem!!

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platinummyr In reply to ??? [2009-07-27 19:44:06 +0000 UTC]

The last line is soo freaking amazing

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simplysamwise In reply to platinummyr [2009-07-27 21:12:58 +0000 UTC]

aiiee! thanks!

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malice-lust [2009-07-27 02:07:20 +0000 UTC]

hmmm...for someone who has seemed so happy lately, this is quite a surprise.

i guess i didn't expect this sort of poetry, haha.

i still love it XD

i just...er...hope you're feeling okay.

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simplysamwise In reply to malice-lust [2009-07-27 11:08:51 +0000 UTC]

this doesn't really reflect my personal emotions, it's just two characters in a scenario, or whatever. xD
i love it, though. like, honestly. i could read this four hundred times. it's my personal favorite, and i think, my best so far. so. C:

i'm feeling fineee! x3

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malice-lust In reply to simplysamwise [2009-07-29 02:19:04 +0000 UTC]

'Kay, just checking. *hugs*

I still loved it.

Almost as much as I...


*cough* I was about to say this really cheesy romantic-y line. I restrained myself.

I miss you.

<3

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simplysamwise In reply to malice-lust [2009-07-29 13:06:55 +0000 UTC]

ahh. you made me laugh again.

missed you too.

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malice-lust In reply to simplysamwise [2009-07-30 03:14:41 +0000 UTC]



You did ! I don't see enough people using that smiley!

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simplysamwise In reply to malice-lust [2009-07-30 15:01:30 +0000 UTC]

i KNOW. xD
it's unloved.
i'mma hug it.

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malice-lust In reply to simplysamwise [2009-07-31 01:52:41 +0000 UTC]

AWWYOU'RESOADORABLE!

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simplysamwise In reply to malice-lust [2009-07-31 14:26:21 +0000 UTC]

[is resisting urge to use aww face.]
shall. resist.
shall.
will...
not.

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shootingstar2428 [2009-07-27 00:57:51 +0000 UTC]

this is so. incredibly. powerful.

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simplysamwise In reply to shootingstar2428 [2009-07-27 11:09:07 +0000 UTC]

thank you. :]

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Zaratops In reply to ??? [2009-07-26 20:26:54 +0000 UTC]

although i feel like this is done a lot, i guess you can't not write about something that still happens. and it's not up to others what one writes about, anyway.
so getting to the point, it's sad. well written, and i like the indentation. but in some areas i feel like you separated a line that should have flowed as one. just my personal opinion.

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simplysamwise In reply to Zaratops [2009-07-27 11:09:44 +0000 UTC]

yeah. xD
the subject has always fascniated me. [creepy? yeah, kinda. Dx]
thanks! C:

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Zaratops In reply to simplysamwise [2009-07-28 04:58:31 +0000 UTC]

no prob.

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simplysamwise In reply to Zaratops [2009-07-28 17:15:19 +0000 UTC]

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