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‘i’m coming apart at the seams,’you whispered.
[darling, i already knew that.]
you,
with your beautiful, bruised skin,
and handmarks down your spine,
you’ve got his fingerprints all over you.
you never were very strong anyway.
you say he holds your fragile dreams
in his cruel grasp,
[the one you’re so familiar with.]
but why do anything about it?
you,
with your choked breaths,
broken dreams and broken hearts,
i know you’ll settle for last place.
‘cause they say
you’ve always got a second choice,
[a second chance,]
but not anymore.
you,
used to be alive,
knew how to smile [did you forget?]
had lights in your eyes
[you still do.
or are they just the tears?]
there’s all these broken question marks
beneath your paper-thin skin.
needled and bloodless,
you’ll take what he gives.
[you’ll give what he takes.]
your reflection looks more alive than you,
at least she’s whole.
look at yourself,
do you see what he’s done?
you,
and your twisted spine,
with your broken bones
crushing your scarred heart.
[do you care at all?]
don’t you know what he’s doing?
[you don’t know what you’re doing]
you can lie to yourself,
but i see right through you.
i’ll be here to sew up your wounds now,
but i’m running out of thread faster
than he’s running out of steam,
and this train[wreck] won’t stop.
[but for now, i’m here,
and i’ll stitch up your seams.]
he tells you that you belong to him,
that his bruises on your arms are proof.
but it’s not true.
the daylight tells lies,
those bruises were caused by you,
so get out while you can['t].
you,
marked and tainted,
by his twisted intentions,
you say you have no choice.
[but darling, you choose to say ‘yes.’]
i can’t understand you.
are you addicted to the taste of your own blood?
or do you savor that moment,
that split-second of touch before he hits you?
maybe you feel wanted,
in his fumbled, rough kisses, and drunken passion.
[how can you pretend he loves you?]
you,
you used to love so easily,
you’re now broken so easily,
as you swallow your pride.
how did he do this to you?
do you ever wonder?
each morning you
take your pills, lie to yourself
look in the mirror
and say it’s getting better
don’t you know?
you’re the one hurting yourself.
you once said you loved life
now it’s just an easier form of suicide.
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Comments: 76
sasunaru16 [2011-08-02 15:24:56 +0000 UTC]
This is wonderful! Especially the last line is breathtaking!
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iPawed [2010-10-04 02:01:30 +0000 UTC]
Enjoy I did, in a sad sense. Even if one were no to take this literally, and see in it what is seemingly intent to be viewed as a girl being in a physically abusive relationship, it echoes strongly of something wrong in the relationship - she's killing herself slowly with this, as the last line implies. She's breaking and he's breaking her, whether he means to or not (my personal experiences make me more inclined to think that it feels abusive, more than it truly is, but that's another story entirely).
My favourite part would probably be the "you can lie to yourself/i'll stitch up your seams" bit: the fact she has someone there makes me sigh with sadness. True, it may not be depicted as a successful saviour - but someone cares and we all need someone who cares. Someone who'll help salve the wounds.
Very powerful.
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simplysamwise In reply to iPawed [2010-10-05 15:55:56 +0000 UTC]
Thank you.
You have my sympathy, if your own personal experiences can somehow relate to this in any way.
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iPawed In reply to simplysamwise [2010-10-05 20:41:53 +0000 UTC]
Learning experience. Smile.
We'll all have bad experiences but all experiences are opportunities to learn and I don't resent that :]
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simplysamwise In reply to iPawed [2010-10-05 21:57:36 +0000 UTC]
That's a very mature view. :3
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iPawed In reply to simplysamwise [2010-10-06 03:47:49 +0000 UTC]
I try to be. I used to sulk and throw tantrums and be self-centred quite a bit, but now I'm making up for it, I think
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Starry-Liz [2010-07-23 22:23:16 +0000 UTC]
i truly love this. the emotional pieces are my favourite, and this is one of those. (:
the honesty in the way it's written is beautiful. it reminds me of a little girl rocking back and forth and whispering this piece over and over and over again like it's her saviour. i don't know why, but it's still lovely as anything ! (:
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simplysamwise In reply to Starry-Liz [2010-07-23 22:26:12 +0000 UTC]
Thank you.
[definitely one of the more emotional pieces I've written.]
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Starry-Liz In reply to simplysamwise [2010-07-23 22:29:31 +0000 UTC]
it was my pleasure. (:
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AnimeWarrioress [2009-09-30 01:58:18 +0000 UTC]
i don't know...
there's something really attractive and seductive about topics like this.
ugly, hurtful topics of bruises and pinpricks and needlemarks that you can tell hurt.
i'm not sure why i like this, anyway. why anybody likes it. but it has beauty in the little unseen spaces. <3
very vivid. beautiful.
just... pretty.
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simplysamwise In reply to AnimeWarrioress [2009-09-30 11:59:17 +0000 UTC]
very simply: thank you.
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AnimeWarrioress In reply to simplysamwise [2009-09-30 12:19:12 +0000 UTC]
you're more than welcome. i hope that this poem brings you happiness.
it certainly makes others happy.
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simplysamwise In reply to AnimeWarrioress [2009-09-30 16:38:03 +0000 UTC]
=o happy? this doesn't really come off to me as something that makes other people happy. xD
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AnimeWarrioress In reply to simplysamwise [2009-09-30 20:44:17 +0000 UTC]
i'm not quite sure. it's certainly very depressing to think about, but the writing... it's so miraculous. balancing out the beauty and the ugliness.
i love it. :]
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simplysamwise In reply to AnimeWarrioress [2009-10-01 01:18:09 +0000 UTC]
aw. you're making me blush. D8
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AnimeWarrioress In reply to simplysamwise [2009-10-01 20:49:51 +0000 UTC]
pshh. everyone deserves to feel good about themselves. especially if their writing is exceptionally amazing. XD
tee hee.
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blehhrawrgrrl [2009-09-30 00:46:39 +0000 UTC]
i love this. a lot. i think a lot of people try to get the same impact that this has with topics like this one, but i haven't read many that suceeded. it's beautiful (:
although i'm curious about the indentation, since i'm a moron and can't seem to figure out how to indent more than a blockquote.
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simplysamwise In reply to blehhrawrgrrl [2009-09-30 11:43:45 +0000 UTC]
oh. xD i just... spaced it out.
but now that i think of it, i don't know how/why that worked. i think i've tried it again, but it doesn't work. oh well. xD
but thank you! this may be my favorite of mine, so i love to see other people appreciate it. <33
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blehhrawrgrrl In reply to simplysamwise [2009-09-30 23:01:40 +0000 UTC]
lol, that's what i tried a while back. maybe da just doesn't like me, it's logical, right? xD
i'll all the more glad i read and love it then; other people liking the ones you do makes them all the move special <3
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oneofthose-rachels [2009-09-29 06:05:57 +0000 UTC]
"‘i’m coming apart at the seams,’
you whispered.
[darling, i already knew that.]
you,
with your beautiful, bruised skin,
and handmarks down your spine,
you’ve got his fingerprints all over you.
you never were very strong anyway."
that was gorgeous.
and this whole piece is incredible.
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simplysamwise In reply to oneofthose-rachels [2009-09-29 10:34:34 +0000 UTC]
<333
thank you!
[yeah, this might be my favorite.
maybe. but my favorite of mine
changes every day, so. D:]
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Lovellyy [2009-09-28 20:25:05 +0000 UTC]
Nopenopenope (wow, that looks like openopenopen...hmm...)
i'm going to, 'tis a much better way to spend my time compared to coursework (well, anything's a better use of time compared to coursework, but hey
)
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Lovellyy [2009-09-28 19:53:55 +0000 UTC]
I love the use of brackets in this, the contradictions
and how she only says one line and how she forgot how to smile,'tis ow-some stuff X)
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simplysamwise In reply to Lovellyy [2009-09-28 19:58:35 +0000 UTC]
<333 thanks.
a lot.
muchly.
this is my pride and joy, and i love to see someone appreciate it. xD
[especially someone with such good music taste. ]
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Lovellyy In reply to simplysamwise [2009-09-28 20:01:00 +0000 UTC]
No problem X)
I'll read through the rest of your gallery once i finish my english coursework, which i should be doing right now...meh :L
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simplysamwise In reply to Lovellyy [2009-09-28 20:06:50 +0000 UTC]
oh! that's fine. =o you really don't have to. of course, i'm not stopping you if you WANT to, but don't feel compelled to. really. xD
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gedwaylem [2009-09-02 20:19:49 +0000 UTC]
"i’m coming apart at the seams,’
you whispered.
[darling, i already knew that.]
you,
with your beautiful, bruised skin,
and handmarks down your spine,
you’ve got his fingerprints all over you."
-the part i like the most.
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simplysamwise In reply to gedwaylem [2009-09-02 20:22:18 +0000 UTC]
mine too.
[shhhh.]
thank you for the comment.
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chrysanthe-aL [2009-08-03 04:14:55 +0000 UTC]
oh, my excuse for not commenting and faving every single one of your works is because i can't bring myself to do it, because i can't.
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simplysamwise In reply to chrysanthe-aL [2009-08-03 18:31:05 +0000 UTC]
no problem, i think. xD if i understood that.
[i should stop waking up at the crack of dawn.]
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chrysanthe-aL In reply to simplysamwise [2009-08-04 04:18:36 +0000 UTC]
[but dawn is pretty, and i always miss it, because i only wake up long enough to turn off my alarm clock.]
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chrysanthe-aL [2009-08-03 04:13:41 +0000 UTC]
i always forget i know how to read, scrolling toofast through pretty lines of plain words called something i'm in love with, called poetry. and you, you abuse repetition beautifully, and i only say abuse because it sounds appropriate even though it's more like the proper word's second cousin (i.e. use). so yes, i'm not sure how to call words beautiful and sounding like i mean it, so have these loose thoughts of mine and know that what you write is 1000 miles beyond beautiful.
(i don't think i've ever embarrassed myself so fully, but there's a first time for everything.)
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simplysamwise In reply to chrysanthe-aL [2009-08-03 18:27:03 +0000 UTC]
don't be embarrassed. that may be the most, for lack of a better word, beautiful thing anyone has ever said to me.
and i think i understand what you mean.
thank you.
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