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Simulsheep303 — Yui Stocker (c)

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Published: 2016-10-02 00:11:29 +0000 UTC; Views: 11438; Favourites: 115; Downloads: 34
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(update: changed a few things)
Last commission that :icon got from me

Characters shown are 18 years or older in age
(Also I know nothing about SAO so sorry if this small story)
Cut off from her friends in an ambush is where we find Yui. Before she could call for help or escape the villainous villains knock her out cold and drag her away. When she awoke she was in a field by herself. Only new thing however was that she did not have her little anklets on and that her ankles were locked in a pair of heavy steel stocks!
“Starting program!” the stocks said in a robotic voice, a small screen on it started to show a list of code and sequences it was going through. Confused, Yui started to try and pull herself free but the stocks were locked tight and she could not move herself. Suddenly she felt a soft fluffy feather brush up her soles, the feeling made her twitch and curl her toes from the ticklish feeling. She bit her lip and tried to squirm herself free again when she felt the feather once again brush up and down against her soft ticklish soles. This helped encourage her to try and escape even harder, but with the inability to do anything at all she just sat there and squirmed, digging her nails into the leather seat and biting her lip as the feather slowly licks along her feet. A bar appeared under her health bar, unknown to her the villains had programmed these stocks to weaken the defenses of those placed into it and slowly upload a virus that would turn them to their evil side. Sorry for Yui, her ticklishness is being used against her. With the tickling starting to speed up, the feather just slowly trailing up and down her left foot, teasing her curled toes she held her mouth to try and keep from laughing.
In a few hours and after going through every tickle tool known to man, Yui will be fully converted to the dark side, ready to turn on those she once called friends. Unless the villains decide to keep her in these stocks to be tickled and teased...


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Comments: 13

Goldie1108 [2016-10-02 00:33:12 +0000 UTC]

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Gah, I can't say that I'm familiar with Pokémon/whatever game/anime this is, but I CAN tell you that I really like this piece. Very detailed. That foot detail is what eludes me. Like, I love how much effort you must've put into it. Drawing and Erasing. Patience is Key, a skill I can never master. It looks like you can though! One tiny suggestion . . . Maybe doing a little revising and/or touch-up to the feathers just a smidge. It looks kinda weird seeing them float like that (correct me if I'm mistaken, if that's just a way of the game/anime/Pokémon/other). But also, you can see the lines from the foot run through the feather. I may be totally mistaken, but it appears as if you were trying to make them appear translucid, almost? I like the thought, but for the most part, feathers are not translucid or transparent. Nice concept, though. Perhaps you could make the lining peer through the feathers in cracks (Ok, not cracks. YouknowwhatImean.) The box/black thing with a keyslot is very low quality. I'm guessing you did it last and just didn't have the patience for it? The hooks also look very low quality. I'm not accusing you of being a bad artist or bad person for it, because to be honest, in the end, I think we all lose patience. Just take a break and come back to it later after a good night's rest, refreshed. Besides fixing the box thingy, I don't really think any other critiques are needed. Hmm. Just one little suggestion for the sky and grass, though. It seems like you used a chalky effect? It makes the sky look nice and realistic with those whispy little cloud thingies that little kids like to chase, however I think it lowers quality in grass. I understand you're looking to give it value, but I just think it looks cheaper with that chalk effect that we were talking about earlier with the sky. Aaaaand one last thing . . . . the spikes on the grass, leading up to the sky are a bit too, hmm, how should I put this? Spiky? They're also all identical and going in the same direction. You did nicely with the grass BELOW the box, however. Very nice indeed. Overall, I think you did a marvelous job, just a few little things could be fixed. Anyways, cheers! I hope my words come of interest!

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Simulsheep303 In reply to Goldie1108 [2016-10-02 00:38:21 +0000 UTC]

;w; thank you for taking the time to critique my work!
admittedly a few points that you brought out i did do last minute, each step however i did ask the person who bought the commission how they felt and they enjoyed it. The feather is suppose to be transparent, its on its own layer if the commissioner ever wants it to be transparent or solid. I didnt really have a idea on how to do the hooks for her ankle jewlery  and admitedly i could redo the stocks to make them seem better and maybe less bulky. Since this is a commission i wont really be revisiting it unless the commissioner comes to me asking for such changes.

again i thank you so much for the critique <3 and i hope you have a good day!

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Goldie1108 In reply to Simulsheep303 [2016-10-02 00:45:59 +0000 UTC]

Ahhh, it's a commission. In which case, they'll love it!
Remember my username, for I will be back, most definitely. May even be purchasing a commission <3

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Simulsheep303 In reply to Goldie1108 [2016-10-02 00:47:04 +0000 UTC]

<3 either a commission, a critique or just a hi id be glad to see you again. Take care now goldie

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ticklesandfeet [2017-04-11 22:27:01 +0000 UTC]

WHO THE HELL IS THAT
Yui what happened to you

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cardfightvanguard62 [2017-01-20 23:00:59 +0000 UTC]

Very nice job!!^^

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Simulsheep303 In reply to cardfightvanguard62 [2017-01-21 01:19:41 +0000 UTC]

Thankuuuu

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cardfightvanguard62 In reply to Simulsheep303 [2017-01-21 01:39:17 +0000 UTC]

Your welcome

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V1EWT1FUL [2017-01-14 18:45:26 +0000 UTC]

she doesn't like it like that, she likes it playful

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ticklesandfeet In reply to V1EWT1FUL [2017-04-11 22:27:21 +0000 UTC]

She would

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V1EWT1FUL In reply to ticklesandfeet [2017-04-11 22:40:25 +0000 UTC]

yeah

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Simulsheep303 In reply to V1EWT1FUL [2017-01-14 19:08:34 +0000 UTC]

I wouldn't know since I don't watch the show

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V1EWT1FUL In reply to Simulsheep303 [2017-01-14 19:16:38 +0000 UTC]

I'm just guessing

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