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Published: 2011-04-20 11:40:29 +0000 UTC; Views: 285; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 4
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Description Things Unseen:

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"There was always something very special about how he looked at me. Perhaps it was because I knew that when he looked at me, there was nothing there."

This short little story is my fight against my writers block. I was hoping it could help me get something done on the others, but it hasn't yet.

Rating: T

Warnings: There's actually nothing to really warn you against, my dears, other than the fact it is a very short little piece, driven by emotion, and I'm the only one who's ever looked at it. This is one of my rare pieces that aren't gay.

Genre: Hurt/Comfort Friendship, and a hint at a developing romance

POV: It's all Raphael –or Elle, as he calls her.

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There was always something very special about how he looked at me.

Perhaps it was because I knew that when he looked at me, there was nothing there.

It's not the same as going to high school and having all of those preppy kids clad in their Abercrombie look right past you, as though you don't exist. No, this is much deeper, much more intense.

When Brayden –Bray for short– looks at you, there really is nothing there. It's not his prerogative: it's his perspective. Bray was born blind, so the truth is, no matter what you think his golden brown eyes might see, there is nothing there.

When I met him, it was a refreshing change. I was seventeen going on thirty, body mature and blossoming while my emotions were lagging behind. My breasts were larger than my petite frame should have handled, but I'd grown used to the stares and back pain that came with them. My wavy auburn hair reached down to my butt, but it was usually bundled up in a bun or a pony-tail. Although I was a junior in high school, I'd never dated and I'd never been kissed. It had seemed for a few brief months that both of those statuses were going to change, but the relationship had gone nowhere because Marcus had panicked and backed out, claiming he wasn't sure that he loved me.

I'd been crying, so angry at myself for loving someone who didn't even know if he loved me back. Although it was against the school policies, I'd holed myself up in an unsupervised computer lab at lunch, determined that I wouldn't let him see me cry. I had been staring at the ground, trying to push back my tears and manage to get through the rest of the school day.

"Are you alright?" It was a soft voice, a tender baritone voice fresh from changing.

My head jerked up, my sobs stunned into submission as he approached me. "Y-yeah."

Despite my answer, the tall boy made his way to me.

I'd seen him around the school, being as it was such a small one. He had black hair that twisted into curl-spirals and fell just beneath his shoulder blades and stunning golden eyes. He wasn't into any of the sports, but his body was fit enough he could do any of them. I'd never really been introduced, so I didn't even know his name.

"Really?" he asked as he crouched in front of me. "You've been crying." He caught the tear streaking down my cheek with one finger.

Allow me to repeat that: he caught the tear streaking down my cheek with one finger.

Now, the reason that stuck out in my mind at that point was that I'd never allowed anyone to see my tears before, so no one had ever done that before. However, then he looked at me with those warm-but-empty eyes and I realized he couldn't even see me.

"I'm Brayden," he told me softly, "and I'll be your Knight in Shining Armor today." He drew me forward gently with the least invasive hug I'd ever received.

I leaned into him. "I'm Raphael," I told him, sniffing. "Thank you."

Like it was perfectly normal, he placed a kiss on my temple. "It's not a problem." He held me like that until the tears stopped, and then he brushed his lips against my cheek. "Whoever he is, he's not worth your tears," he told me, then helped me to my feet before he disappeared into the sea of students.

I made it my mission to find him the next day, but I shouldn't have bothered. He was waiting for me when I got to my locker.

"Hey, beautiful," he greeted. "Feeling better?"

"Yeah, I am. Thank you."

He waved off my thanks. "It's nothing, Elle. That's what friends are for."

We were inseparable after that, like two magnets of opposite polarity. There was no problem we didn't share with each other, no question either of us left unasked. For a blind boy, he always saw so much more than most people our age. And no matter what, he always looked at me when I talked to him and when he talked to me, even though we both knew he couldn't see my face.

That's just how we've been for three years now: the rest of junior year in high school, our senior year, and our freshmen year in college. We've had our ups and downs, but we've always gotten through them.

Our Art History lecture had just ended a few minutes ago, and as we descended the staircase, we both realized it was pouring outside.

My hand slid instinctively in his as we opened the door and walked out onto the quad. Our dorm rooms were actually on the same floor, so it wasn't that odd of us to walk back to Sheppard Dorm Complex together.

The rain pounded on down on my face, but I found it refreshing. I'd always liked the rain, even as a small child. The feel of it against my skin reminded me I was alive, even when I felt dead inside. I spent a lot of my middle school and high school years walking in rainstorms alone, pondering my life and making some of the most important decisions of my life.

"Hey, Elle?"

I looked up at him, his voice pulling me out of my thoughts. "Yeah?" I asked, realizing we'd stopped moving and that I had taken at least one step more from the strain on our joined hands. I took a step backward.

His other hand gently traced my brow, then drifted down to my cheekbones before sliding down to my jaw line. It was a familiar and intimate gesture, his way of trying to "see me".

Then he leaned over and kissed me, his lips hungry and searching over mine. This should have been absolutely insane to me; my best friend was kissing me like he wanted to devour me. There was no time to think about any of it: my hands instinctually slid back to tangle in wet black silken strands and cup the back of his head to maintain the contact, like I'd been waiting for this moment, for this rain, for this kiss.
He drew back slowly.

My lips felt tender and I brought our joined hands up to touch them, to see.

"I wish I could see you this way, Elle." There was something in the way he said it, perhaps a certain wistfulness in his tone, that told made me think that this might just be his deepest, most secret wish.

I reached for him and tugged his lips down to mine. "There are some things in life that must go unseen," I whispered, "but that doesn't mean you can't feel them."

There was always something very special about how he looked at me.

Perhaps it was because when he looked at me, there was nothing there. Perhaps it was because he was trying so desperately to see me there.

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Comments: 15

ShadowHaloedAngel [2011-04-21 22:58:05 +0000 UTC]

I love this. It was a real pleasure to read, I could feel the emotions, and your description was such that I could see the images playing out before me. Thank you for sharing such a wonderful piece of writing.

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SinsofMidnight In reply to ShadowHaloedAngel [2011-04-22 17:27:08 +0000 UTC]

I'm glad you enjoyed it, hon.

I wrote this piece in one setting, feeling a bit hopeless on actually finishing something because I have an obscene quantity of stories that I have started but never finished. So I started this one with the intent to finish it before I moved from my computer.

It's a very intimate piece for me, because I lived through a lot of Elle's circumstances -but without a Bray to be my comfort and strength.

I'm glad that you could see the images playing out: that means I did my job.

I still feel like it's a bit rushed, like I should have taken a bit more time with the kisses at the end... I might go back to it and fix it, but I'm very glad to get some feedback on it as is...

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ShadowHaloedAngel In reply to SinsofMidnight [2011-04-23 10:51:03 +0000 UTC]

I did indeed! Sorry it has taken me so long to reply to this comment.

I know what you mean - sometimes you need to finish something to just get back into the swing of how it feels, to give yourself that motivation. I'm glad you finished it, though.

I could tell it was a personal piece - I've discussed a few times with a friend of mine who's a very talented writer how you can tell when a writer is writing for themselves, and when they are writing for the sake of it etc. With things like this there is often, if not always, a personal background of some sort. I'm sorry that you had to go through that alone, but I can't change the past. Think of it as sympathy, not pity. <3

You did a fantastic job with the images, really.

*nods* it didn't seem too rushed to me, I was sort of prepared for something longer in a way, so I found the length and the pacing quite good, but I'd need to reread it to judge that I think. You're welcome for the feedback!

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SinsofMidnight In reply to ShadowHaloedAngel [2011-04-23 20:27:59 +0000 UTC]

I've just taken up too many stories at a time, and it shows. Seriously, take a peek at my fanfiction.net profile. [link] Of a list of 30 stories, only 20 of them are complete and only 19 are really over. I have fans waiting on the next part of 11 stories there, not to mention my own story "Who We Are Without You" (which is here), plus about twenty other abandoned stories I've teased my friends with and gotten them deeply committed to.
As an author, the only thing I've ever finished is fanfictions, about two very short stories, a shitload of poems, and what feels like hundreds of essays and rants.
It's not a very good feeling to have, but that's where I go with writer's block: that deep, dark corner I like to call "So Depressed I Could Slit My Wrists".
So having actually finished "Things Unseen" feels un-fucking-believably good.

I figured you could tell it was personal, because I always know when it is in someone else's writing. When I just wanted to write something and finish it, the first thing that came to mind was what I had wanted so badly after having an almost-relationship blow up in my face: someone who could see me, but at the very same time, couldn't see me at all.
I don't consider it pity or sympathy, darling. We like to call that empathy.

Reread it if you have the time and let me know on the "rushing-it". I've read it a few times myself, because I've cross-posted it on my LiveJournal now. It feels rushed to me, like I just wanted it over.

And actually seeing that someone read it made my day.

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ShadowHaloedAngel In reply to SinsofMidnight [2011-04-24 20:37:24 +0000 UTC]

Make sure not to stress yourself too much with that - I know what it can get like when you have so much to do. I know what you mean about feeling obligated to write when you have people interested/committed to stuff you're writing. I have about the same record as you, to be perfectly frank with you. You can beat the block though, I'm sure

Empathy is a wonderful thing <3

I'll reread it at some point, promise!

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SinsofMidnight In reply to ShadowHaloedAngel [2011-04-26 03:46:48 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, I have gotten past it before... it's just making me really angry and depressed right now, which is not a good look for me the Monday before prom...

Thanks... I may just tweak it until I like it and send you the "updated" version to look at before I re-post...

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ShadowHaloedAngel In reply to SinsofMidnight [2011-04-26 12:58:52 +0000 UTC]

*nods* I'd be happy to take a look. Ah, good luck with that, I still have a few weeks till the ball

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SinsofMidnight In reply to ShadowHaloedAngel [2011-04-26 21:34:38 +0000 UTC]

Well, "the ball" would be more exciting if I were:
a) going with a guy I like, not a guy friend
b) had a boyfriend with whom to go
c) didn't dance like I have two left feet and they are both broken
d) knew someone would get in and spike the punch so I can loosen up and be a less awkward dancer
e) knew how I was going to do my hair

Yeah. Not too thrilled with Prom right now...

But glad to hear the other stuff ^^

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ShadowHaloedAngel In reply to SinsofMidnight [2011-04-26 21:44:27 +0000 UTC]

I'm going with my best friend, and not with a guy, to a uni ball where everyone is at least a year older than me, the closest I've ever had to a boyfriend dumped me yesterday, I can't dance, there's no punch to spike (though the volume of alcohol does compensate for that) and I have no clue how I'm going to do hair or makeup. It's going to turn out alright, for both of us.

(that's the ball at my friend's uni. The school ball/prom thing for leavers, I am going on my own, I know what dress Im' wearing, but have no clue regarding accessories, hair, makeup, anything really, and again, no punch, and people who hate me ^^ - just keep smiling. It's what you make of it. <3)

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SinsofMidnight In reply to ShadowHaloedAngel [2011-05-03 02:38:53 +0000 UTC]

Wow. Sounds about like my life, minus the boyfriend, lol. And my... almost boyfriend (he's really the closest I ever got to such a relationship) has decided I have the hots for his best friend (he's a day late and a buck short on that memo, lol. I've had the hots for his best friend since I met him about four years ago!).

Prom went way better than I thought it would, honestly... I don't dance much, but I spent almost the entire time out on the dance floor -minus my date, a good friend of mine who really doesn't dance. And quite surprisingly, there was also no punch to spike, lol
But I had fun! I suppose that's what counts!

How did yours go?

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ShadowHaloedAngel In reply to SinsofMidnight [2011-05-03 17:32:26 +0000 UTC]

Mine's next weekend, still looking forward to it though, and I still have about the same amount of clues.

I'm really really glad to hear that yours went so well - I know what you mean, I often find myself dancing at these things even though it's not my thing usually. I am so glad that you had a good time!

*laughs* boys can be slow

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SinsofMidnight In reply to ShadowHaloedAngel [2011-05-04 01:54:56 +0000 UTC]

Just go with it, lol. You'll probably start stressing about two days before, like I did....

Boys are always slow, especially these two...

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ShadowHaloedAngel In reply to SinsofMidnight [2011-05-04 14:39:31 +0000 UTC]

I guess we'll see!

Sounds it Hope everything works out!

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SinsofMidnight In reply to ShadowHaloedAngel [2011-05-04 22:12:00 +0000 UTC]

Me, too...

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ShadowHaloedAngel In reply to SinsofMidnight [2011-05-04 22:28:03 +0000 UTC]

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