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Well here goes!! Mine entry for the 60th Annual Hunger Games OCT! [link] Any critiques anyone has to offer would be wonderful, it has been a while since I've attempted to flesh out a character so much.I'm terrible with weight so if anyone thinks those numbers look wonky let me know! Aiming for underweight and malnourished mind.
Will post his reaping up asap!
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Name: Whip Marchwalker. Would be just like his Mother to name him after something everyone in District 11 loathes.
Age: 14
District: 11
(preferably at least, but if not perhaps Districts 8 or 10, any of the more impoverished Districts)
Health issues: Mild arthritis which can make fiddly tasks a bit of a pain sometimes and makes his joints ache. Malnourished and underweight for his size. Suffers from migraines which are somewhat debilitating.
Body type: Tall, thin and lanky. Has gigantism, as a result of which makes him incredibly tall with large hands and feet.
Eye Colour: Grey with flecks of hazel.
Hair Colour: Brown, very curly.
Strength:
-Stamina. Whilst Whip is not very strong, long days of tending crops and various other tasks have given him good stamina.
-Not especially speedy, but his long legs do let him cover ground more quickly than others.
-Very patient, despite pain of arthritis he could stay still for hours without fidgeting,
-Not a complete stranger to pain, has been whipped his fair share as well. It’s somewhat unavoidable when you live in a starving district such as 11. So in theory he should be able to handle pain quite well in the Hunger Games.
-A lifetime of keeping quiet and observing has made him fairly good at predicting people's actions.
Vulnerability/ies:
-His migraine attacks aren’t too common however they are incredibly debilitating when he gets them. When one of his migraines is in full swing it is incredibly difficult for him to see and concentrate. Sometimes the pain has been so great that he has been reduced to vomiting up from the pressure. Finds it very difficult to move or do anything when this happens.
-His height. Whilst an asset in some ways, it's very difficult to hide all those awkward limbs of his. So even in his usual hunched posture, he sticks out quite easily.
-Malnourished so rather weak, though even if he was at full strength he would still be somewhat frail.
-Very easy to cry, loathe to confrontation, even when it will mean his life.
Family:
Elder brother - Seb, 18 years old. Whip and Seb are very close and generally keep an eye out for each other.
Mother and Father - Not especially close to either of them. His father sits back and refuses to be involved. Unbeknownst to Whip, his mum was extremely careful to not have children after Seb, as they were struggling to feed themselves. However despite precautions she fell pregnant and suffered severe post-natal depression, which she never seemed to fully recover from. After that her attitude towards Whip ranges from indifference to resentment, even more so when Whip hit puberty and he began growing alarmingly fast.
Aunt - Orcha, his mother’s sister. Whip is much closer to his aunt Orcha than his mother. Orcha essentially took over raising Whip when her sister fell into depression.
Significant other: None really. Well, he felt butterflies in his stomach whenever Daffyd was about, but has never acted on it. Nor will he get a chance to now.
Personality: Quiet, shy, and somewhat self conscious. However he enjoys helping people and has a kind disposition. He is overly polite in his speech and actions, perhaps to overcompensate how alarmed some people are at his presence. He rarely talks except to his brother or aunt, and even then if he can get away with short sentences he will. Needs badgering to elaborate on anything..
Token: Small woven doll from his brother. Usually lives in a pocket.
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Comments: 26
dustbudde [2013-02-18 20:03:26 +0000 UTC]
The expression is amazing. He's exactly how I'd expect someone who isn't a career tribute to look for his photos. Kudos and good luck! It's lovely to see such a well rounded character in this game's line up!
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SirSmudge In reply to dustbudde [2013-02-18 21:26:56 +0000 UTC]
Extremely awkward, that's Whip! But thanks very much at any rate. I'm glad you think he's well rounded, I'm not too used to expanding characters further than their looks sadly (though I suppose that's what this OCT is for ).
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IllegalSympathy [2013-01-15 18:12:25 +0000 UTC]
I dont suppose I could be district 11's stylist?
[link]
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SirSmudge In reply to IllegalSympathy [2013-01-15 21:14:18 +0000 UTC]
Hullo! Don't know if LittleBird said but we're both cool with Buble being our stylist.
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IllegalSympathy In reply to SirSmudge [2013-01-15 21:19:22 +0000 UTC]
Aw thanks! And yeah they did! She also told me you both have pretty stong Ideas for what you want in a chariot costume so I guess all she's really needed for is the interview
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AnxietyRaptor [2013-01-05 07:21:53 +0000 UTC]
Hello, a wonderful looking character, but I am 6 foot and weigh 185 pounds, so being 6 foot 5 inches, there is nearly no way for him to be that light, unless he is all bone, no muscle or fat.
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SirSmudge In reply to AnxietyRaptor [2013-01-05 07:25:28 +0000 UTC]
Oh I see thank you very much, I'll have a jig about with his weight then. Cheers for telling me!
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scribledoubleguy [2013-01-05 07:18:16 +0000 UTC]
Oh, I think he's my favorite out of them all!
good job!
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SirSmudge In reply to scribledoubleguy [2013-01-05 07:21:42 +0000 UTC]
Haha that's super sweet of you, thank you very much! High praise indeed!
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SirSmudge In reply to ceceme12 [2012-12-22 21:36:13 +0000 UTC]
Why thank you very much! He turned out a lot better than expected I think.
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ceceme12 In reply to SirSmudge [2012-12-22 21:43:53 +0000 UTC]
I love when that happens! Goodluck!
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That-Little-Bird [2012-12-21 03:42:03 +0000 UTC]
Hey he has the same birthday as me X'D I've been noticing that a lot of the tributes have June birthdays. I've seen a lot of June 18ths and I've just been like "his/her birthday is the day after mine", but you actually hit it lol.. Don't mind me lol X'D
Really interesting character though. : O Over a foot taller than me and 4 years younger. At least he can intimidate people with his height lol. D11 was my backup district for my female tribute. Really eager to see how everything works out. Good luck~
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SirSmudge In reply to That-Little-Bird [2012-12-22 21:34:00 +0000 UTC]
Oh man that musta been pretty surreal! Maybe it's a siiiggggn. A sign of what I don't know but something surely. *Shrugs*
I suppose he could try and intimidate people with his height at first, though I doubt it'd last long 'cuz he's a massive softie. Would probably apologise for scaring them. xD Super psyched to see what happens next with all the entries. Good luck to you too! Odds and favour and all that.
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That-Little-Bird In reply to SirSmudge [2013-01-05 06:08:16 +0000 UTC]
Heey, we ended up district mates after all~ XD D11 wasn't my first choice, but I did love Whip so I'm really happy lol ^^ I get to collaborate with the character who shares my birthday X'D
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SirSmudge In reply to That-Little-Bird [2013-01-05 07:21:08 +0000 UTC]
Oh hellooooooooooo there, this will certainly be fun won't it! I am equally as chuffed to have you has my district partner.
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X-I-L2048 [2012-12-21 02:47:14 +0000 UTC]
What an interesting and unique character! 8D I like him already. If he gets accepted, he'll be probably the tallest tribute we have!
And if he's paired with the only current female D11 tribute, they'll both be 14 years old, but he'll tower over her.
D Well, he towers over everyone, but little Kayli's already pretty small. I find it very interesting that you gave him gigantism; I've honestly never seen a fancharacter, with that condition before. He also seems like a real sweetheart.
Poor bby.
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SirSmudge In reply to X-I-L2048 [2012-12-22 20:48:40 +0000 UTC]
I'm glad you find him interesting! Guess I'm doing something right. If he does get in it would be quite the contrast between him and the D11 lass, so I imagine there would be a lot of fun to be had with that. I don't think I've seen many characters about with gigantism personally, except a few famous actors in films. I hope I can write this character well at any rate. Thank you for your kind comments at any rate!!
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X-I-L2048 In reply to SirSmudge [2012-12-26 03:11:42 +0000 UTC]
Oh, indeed. He's very unique, and I personally think you have a real good chance at getting accepted.
And it was my pleasure.
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SirSmudge In reply to asinglebarofsoap [2012-12-22 19:36:57 +0000 UTC]
Haha oh why thank you, that's very sweet! xD
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Kintupsi [2012-12-20 22:01:07 +0000 UTC]
I think you did a great job on his character and design! In my opinion, his weight is reasonable, but you may want to check it out on this nifty BMI calculator: [link]
Also, considering his condition, I think it's appropriate that he looks like he doesn't quite fit in the application space. XD I can tell he'll have a great time during Interviews, should he be accepted.
P.S. You may want to have some backup Districts in case he doesn't make it for D11.
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SirSmudge In reply to Kintupsi [2012-12-20 22:10:39 +0000 UTC]
Thank you kindly I'm glad you like 'im! Shoulda thought about using a BMI calculator fffft. Apparently he's within average range for a 6'5" 14 year old (obviously?) so I'll have to lower his weight a bit after I'm done with his Reaping!
Oh man totally forgot about interviews and all that fun. Very much looking forward to it if I get in somewhere *crosses fingers*!
And cheers for the heads up about the District thang, all edited up.
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