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Published: 2004-06-27 02:57:25 +0000 UTC; Views: 149; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 14
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Description Tell me you love me
Say you'll be there
Prove to me
That you really do care.

Whisper sweet nothings
Into my ear
And take away
All that I fear.

How can I prove
That my love is true
Don't you know
All I think about is you.

Although you hurt me
It's going to be all right
Cause baby for you
I'll put up a fight.

So forget all the bad times
And the misunderstood
And tell me you love me
Like I knew that you could.

Baby I love you
I thought that you knew
You should know
I'd do anything for you.

I'll push away the tear
That slide down my cheek
And try to remember
I'm not really that weak.

But my love for you
Has changed something in me
When I'm with you
I feel like I'm free.

Although your love it binds me
But that can't be right
So take up my hand
And lets take flight.

Up in the sky
We soar like birds
This shows
Our love is more than words.
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Comments: 11

jester81 [2004-10-06 05:55:37 +0000 UTC]

Very nice. Also very powerful. Shows not only the happy mushy side of love (We soar like birds, But my love for you Has changed something in me) but also the bitter side as well (Although you hurt me, I'll push away the tear, That slide down my cheek)
Two things did you mean to write slid down my cheek?
and:
"So forget all the bad times
And the misunderstood"
Not sure what the last line means. (misunderstandings) would make more since too me. Another way I would write it would be "And the moments we misunderstood..."
Just some thoughts.

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SoiledSoul In reply to jester81 [2004-10-06 12:55:22 +0000 UTC]

You're right. There is some grmmatics wrong with it, but it's just how my mind was working at the time.

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MiSs-Ichijouji [2004-09-06 07:11:43 +0000 UTC]

*__* whaa you really are good in writing poems *__* whaah

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SoiledSoul In reply to MiSs-Ichijouji [2004-09-06 07:47:35 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much. ^_^ It all comes from my emotions.

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Haystack666 [2004-07-02 00:38:37 +0000 UTC]

Ohh...very deep and romantic Katie I love these kinds of poems

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SoiledSoul In reply to Haystack666 [2004-07-02 00:39:35 +0000 UTC]

Wow, this is the first time I've ever been faved before. Thanks!

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Haystack666 In reply to SoiledSoul [2004-07-02 00:40:58 +0000 UTC]

No prob Katie You really good at writing poetry

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SoiledSoul In reply to Haystack666 [2004-07-02 00:55:17 +0000 UTC]

I'm emotional when writing poetry, big diffirence.

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Haystack666 In reply to SoiledSoul [2004-07-02 19:35:52 +0000 UTC]

Well in all fairness I don't know jack-squat about poetry...I know what I like though and I like yours

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SoiledSoul In reply to Haystack666 [2004-07-05 20:09:40 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much Mitch!

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Haystack666 In reply to SoiledSoul [2004-07-05 21:23:04 +0000 UTC]

No problem KatieXD

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