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Published: 2015-10-24 20:26:59 +0000 UTC; Views: 1045; Favourites: 17; Downloads: 0
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I'm here again for critiques on my animation! Please let me know what you think and comment any suggestions that could make my animation better <3 This is for my portfolio class and I'm hoping to finish it up in the next week
Audio from Austin Powers
Free rigs from Creative Crash
Animation done in Autodesk Maya (by me)
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I apologize for the late crit! It's been a mess on my end so I'm getting back into things today.
With this animation I see your use of body language is getting better for sure. It can be difficult to have animals convey emotions when you want them to speak and seem human since animals aren't really good at conveying complex thoughts haha. It was mentioned in the comments below already but I would also love to see some emotion in their faces. Is that something that could be possible for you? Do you know how or are you just pressed for time with these? Facial expression is a huge part of body language as well so when I look at these and see the stiff faces it is quite off putting unfortunately. The audio seems to line up well but there is a sharp cut which is strange to hear when the camera angle changes to show the large T-rex and then flashes back to the Green one ( i forget what those are called lol ) There is a prevalent white noise in the background due to the audio recording and it is cut sharply for a moment. If possible to patch these areas up that could help too. Or even you could layer in sound effects. There are tons of free non-licensed sound files online just a google search away yo. Speaking of which it could also help to splice in some at appropriate times such as when the baby T-rex falls on his rump which is otherwise silent.
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That's some nice animation and i like the little guy.
I'm not an animation expert but i felt there were a few parts were the animations felt a bit
stiff. Also there's not really a change in the face when he says his line.
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Thanks
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yooooooooooo its turnin out really good o;
i think the lip sync is a little lacking at the end line though, especially with the "m" in "man," feel like his mouth should be fully closed for that one haha
also, the scene with the baby tyrannosaur running to his mama is completely adorable for one, i really like babes little cycle, buuuut it looks like it gets kinda stiff towards the end? any chance you could make that scene slightly longer and just have a little more like pause before the scene changes again? so we can soak in both the babes walk cycle and the big mama; maybe have her bend down a little towards the other dino before cutting it off?
i guess only other thing i noticed was that his upper jaw kinda stays in place for the majority of his speech? not to give you more work or anything but making it move slightly upwards at the bigger syllables ("im BIGGER than you, im HIGHER on the FOOD CHAIN") would prolly help as well o;
oh yeah! with letters like "u" (in "you") and "w" (in "wee man") it might be good to make his mouth a little more closed, since you cant really do the O shape you need
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I agree with the UltimateSassMaster (nice name). I think the head needs more dynamic movement, it's looking a little stiff. If you really want to get this feeling natural, watch yourself delivering the lines and practice in the mirror, if you can manage it it's even better to film it. There are many subtle movements that people make while speaking that you don't even know you're doing, like tilting your head to one side or blinking. Making reference videos is professional practice in the animation industry so it's good to start implementing it early, especially if this is for a showreel.
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Who doesn't love the Fat Bastard 
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