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speakyourmind — And Don't You Ever Forget...
Published: 2008-04-07 23:17:18 +0000 UTC; Views: 136; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 1
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hey there, gorgeousyour eyes so green and bright
take your mind off your worries
turn your face to the light
this life is a beautiful one
and it fits you in every way
so strip away your callouses
and begin a bright new day
look around you at the perfection
of the imperfection of each breath
gaze in amazement at the treasures--
at the gifts you have been left
breathe in the sweet fresh air
smile up at the bright shining sun
pull back your golden blonde locks
and look at everything you’ve done
your accomplishments are many
your flaws so very few
just take a moment to admire
the amazing art that’s you
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This is one of the best you've ever written! I like it a lot 
The lines "look around you at the perfection
of the imperfection of each breath" specifically stick out to me. I remember something like this being in a poem I read either last semester or senior year (I don't remember which) which spoke about God placing perfection in imperfection and that the imperfection was what helped make it perfect. I think it'd be really cool for you to expand on those lines - perhaps by adding another stanza, I'm not entirely sure, but I think it'd add to the poem as a whole, and honestly since they are such cool lines it'd be awesome for you to elaborate
But enough rambling - awesome job!
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