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Published: 2004-04-26 18:30:36 +0000 UTC; Views: 163; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 19
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Two DeathsSlit your throat
And hear the gargle.
That awful but beautiful note.
As you collapse onto the marble.
The red blood spreading
All across the floor
Yourself dreading
As it flows through the door.
Now your heart, the core
The soft, empty organ.
It never becomes a bore
It’s tasty, but soon all gone.
Take my own life
I desire the end,
With the edge of a knife,
I turn that final bend.
Slowly at first,
But the cut grows
I feel so cursed,
And now I know.
It’s too late to stop
But why would I wanna?
My body begins to flop
I’m just another commoner.
Comments: 11
Sprog In reply to KyuuketsukiKurai [2004-07-12 08:50:55 +0000 UTC]
A fav? Wow, thanks
Appriciate it lots!
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Sprog In reply to sinan [2004-04-30 18:15:32 +0000 UTC]
thanks dude, lol. *grins* i like it, proud of that one
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Black-Rose-In-Bloom [2004-04-26 19:05:55 +0000 UTC]
this is very good--some of the meter is off, some of the rhyming isn't completely, but hey none of mine are perfect either so i give this a huge thumbs UP!
eternally, the black rose
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LadySydonis [2004-04-26 18:37:08 +0000 UTC]
hhmmm....this is an interesting concept...keep writing i would like to see what else you come up with..k?
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Sprog In reply to LadySydonis [2004-04-26 18:45:47 +0000 UTC]
i will, i got 102, i aint stopin now. Thanks for the comment.
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