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Published: 2012-01-31 00:39:24 +0000 UTC; Views: 1112; Favourites: 23; Downloads: 29
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It was a hot summer day, and Alex was napping on a hey bale, when something awakened her, she sat up and pushed her hat from her face and saw...Related content
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I want to start off by telling you why I gave it so and so stars then tell you any other things, not Iβm going but the DA meaning for the stars, not my meaning
Vision: I gave it 4 stars because... well in truth I do give five stars but I felt like it should not have been given to this art work... but is dose tell me that she is surprised by something... I just feel like it could be done better than this, but it got the point to me
Originality: i gave it 2 1/2 stars, if i look on DA i can fine many pics like this one... i hate to give hurtful stuff like this but it not even the Original... it's something i know others have done, and will keep doing.
Technique: I gave it 4 stars, this was an easy thing to get points on form me because i base all art off of the best work they have and the most used styles, but do to it having some... problems... i felt like it does not need a five star rating because Iβve seen this artist do better than this, and it was a hard call.. But hereβs the thing I don't take points away on this for copying another art work, so a base is fine by me, but you would lose points in originality
Impact: i gave it 3 stars, this is the hardest thing i think you can get a good score form me, do to the fact that you need to: evoke strong emotions, it need to make me think, and Does it blow my mind? sadly this is more of a personal thing, and it does make me think for a little want shocked her, but do to it being anything i want it... so i was not curious for long...but still i was thinking so i gave it 3
other notes:
i'm not going to say something like it looks awesome... because then i would be misleading... but i can't say it's bad ether... there are some stuff that looks wrong... the hand looks bad is one thing... i really hate to say something looks bad but the hands and arms just look bad, and sadly you have not folds in her overalls
i want to say this right now when i do stuff like i stop being a friend to you, and be like an outside person that knows nothing about you want your like just want your art is like and how this one pic looks, after i'm friendly once more. i say this and do this because it will give a better feedback then me being your friend and not giving you jack and five stars... because i don't want someone to do that on my art work... but even if youβre not a great artist i will still like it, because it does not madder, art takes many shapes.
This has been Blackdoggie122 and i hope that this helps and informs you all and i'll see you guys later...also sorry it's so long
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Woah, this was much longer than I thought
Looking over this was actually pretty helpful, thanks for this!
This was just a fairly quick sketch, not a hard-core, hard worked on piece, so I'm not really offended, and I see your points
I should try to get back to more careful and quality pieces from time to time too though, mix improving quality with improving speed and flow
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*she hears a splashing noise coming form the barn and see's that the door is open...*
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Alex: *Pushes her hat out of her eyes, hops down and runs over to the barn* What's goin' on in here? *rushes in and looks around*
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*as she runs in she see's a thin... man but the looks of it... he looked more of a teen, drinking some water that was in a budget, he had old worn down clothes on and she could see he had some tattoos on hes lags, there maybe more of them his body , but his clothes covered them up, she could not see his face be cause it was so low down to drink*
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Alex: Um... hey there... who are you?
that water's kinda for the horses... it's kinda old... If you're thirsty I can pump some fresh water...
What are yah doin' here... not that I'm mad it's just... um... You didn't drop by, did yah not notice me nappin' out front? *steps toward him*
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thing:
*it was shocked but some one talking and looks up and looks at Alex and then looked scared, looking at his eyes Alex saw that he only has the black part of his pupil no color, when ever he was he was not human, he feel back and try to in back with out facing a way form Alex*
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Alex: Hey mister... you ok? you don't look so good... *not scared, just confused*
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thing:
*it was to fare to get a close look, but he looked a little sick... but the thing was shaking, it may not even know how to talk,as Alex got close he put on a face to try and scare her and it looked like he has sharp teeth like a sharks but couldn't tell if he had more like a shark, he also was missing one or two*
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Alex: Um... mister... you REALLY don't look so good... do you need me to get yah to a hospital or somethin'...
Wait... you thirsty? here *runs over to the pump, grabs a fresh milk bucket, and pumps some water into it, and walks over to "the thing" backed up against the wall, and smiles and hands him the water* here drink up if you're thirsty... *sits down cross legged two meters infront of him and looks at him curiously, a vaugue memory of the story of a stray child that got raised by wolves crossed her mind, but she shook it out, the woods weren't big enough* Can't yah talk?
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think:
*looked at her then at the water, then at her, it stared to drink the water, it was done rather fast, it did not look at her as scared now, it was just watching her, not talking, it looked sick and not vary well feed*
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Alex: *looks concerned* Hey... do you need something... help?
You want food? *pantomimes eating* Sleep? *pantomimes that too* A doctor? *pantomimes a stethoscope* Do you speak ANYTHING? Hablas espaΓ±ol?
Where DID you come from... I just dunno what i'm supposed to do to a guy who don't talk...
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thing:
*it just looked at her, it got closer to her just looking at her, it was not able to tell want she saying, it was like a cow, not abut to talk, he then grabbed the budget and put it in front of it self and seemed to be try to tell Alex some thing he wanted something bigger... then he pointed to some water left in the budget, it may be asking for a lot more water*
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Alex: *sighs* I guess... I should call someone... I'll get you some water though *takes the bucket and runs to the pump and pumps it full and then hands it back to him, then she runs inside, grabs a phone, and calls ben, then ran back to the barn while it rang*
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(ben? who's ben? this is not the same world Alex Ben is not with this thing, i should have said that... but would have not made it as good)
Thing:
*it shanks it head and holds out it's arms to show big*
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(Oh ok, Sorry, i was trying to bring in your characters, but NVM 
Alex: *looks confused* Um... a bath you mean? um... ok... here *holds out her hand and smiles* I'll show you there, and get you some fresh clothes too, ok?
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thing:
*he looks at her hand the at her and take grabbed her hand, and gets up, it was a head tallest then Alex, when she felt his hand, she felt that they were vary soft and smooth, to smooth almost it was like she was not even holding a hand she felt the bones that were the same as a humans*
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Alex: *leads him inside, and into her bathroom, and turns on the water and starts filling up the tub, watching it for it's reaction*
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Thing:
*it takes off it shirt and she see that his tattoos were all over his chest like a pattern you see on animals, and he had not nippers, he then out of no were pulls his ripped up pants down, but here's the thing there was nothing, it was like a drawing in a lab book to show off the human body, there's not way of telling want sex he... it was, it was not human*
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Alex: *tries to look away, but glances over anyway before looking at her feet and shoving her hands in her pockets, what could she do?
she had some time, her brother was off on a sports retreat, and her father was due home in a week... She couldn't call the police or the hospital or anything, could she? she didn't know what they'd do with it... she walked out and absentmindedly searched for some clothes, and found some underwear, a flannal shirt, and a pair of overalls that she thought would fit the thing, she went back to the bathroom and poked her head in*
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thing:
*it was licking it self in the bath and after a few licks on its arm it puts it in the water and takes it out and starts to lick again, it sees her and watches her and stops licking, just looks at her, not talking*
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Alex: Hey... *sighs* I just dunno what to do with you... I can't keep you forever
I dunno if I should call a scientist or a doctor... or just help you and let you go... I dunno what's right... if only you could talk... or communicate or something *sits on the toilet hunched over and sighs*
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Thing:
*it looks at her then reached out to touch her face* yie wr har vick
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Alex: *stands perfectly still* I dunno what that means... *tries not to move or grimace*
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think:
*stops and get out of the bath and shanks it self off, and stand there looking like it was getting cold*
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Alex: Um... *grabs a towel and wraps it around the thing, and once it's dry, she shows it the clothes* Would you like these instead of your rags... um... mister? *holds them out and smiles up at the thing* I wanna help if I can... i just don't know how...
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thing:
*it takes the clothes and starts to put them on, he did not know hat to put the overalls on*
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Alex: Oh, here *unbuckles and unbuttons them, and helps slide them on it and buckle the straps* You like them?
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thikn:
*he just messed with them then looked at Alex, waiting,he started to mess with his clothes once more, he did not seem to like wearing them*
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Alex: 
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think:
*it just looks at her,dose not really know want she saying, and then she hears a rumble, he's hungry*
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Alex: *sighs* alright, but you can't stay here forever you know... I'll cook something for us, c'mon *starts down stairs towards the kitchen, and looks in the fridge and pantrys for food*
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thing:
*has no clue want shes doing, just watches her grab stuff to eat* gen th bud huj?
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Alex Turned around after sliding a pizza in the oven
"huh? I dunno what you're sayin'
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thing:
*it looks at her still, he sees want she is doing and gets his answer, he looks tried but dose not sit in the chair* fu-ko wor h deer?*pointing at the chair*
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Alex: Um... go ahead *waves her hand and does a sitting motion*
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*he sits in the chair, he looks funny cause he looks like his going to jump out of it any min as if something was going to happen... but after she feeds him, then want? and can he even eat wants on the pizza? what else was diffident for her and it?*qu raw gub kow?*looking at her*
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Alex: Look... um... just cause I'm nice now doesn't mean you can stay here forever or that I'll feed you again, ok?... *sighs* You HAVE a language at-least... but I don't get it... *sighs and tosses him an apple* here, try this
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thing:
*dose not know want she saying, he looks at the apple and takes a bite of it, he swallows it, and in a matter of mins it was turning green and grabbing its stomach, and then barfed up blue barf*
(his people can't eat any kind of sugar it can not kill them but it can make them sick for a few days if they eat to much, some of his kinds doctors use it to empty there stomach)
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Alex: Oh, oh dang it... sorry... I dunno if you can eat pizza then... um... maybe... maybe you should go... I dunno... *grimaces and walks towards him* what do you want me to do for you?
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thing:
*it wipes it's mouth off, and looks at her, it can tell she's upset, he gets up and... well he sticks his finger in his mouth and takes it out and rubs it on her, and it was... gross but... it was like a cool thing... it was gross and nice at the same time, it was making her lose* gen for an wax?
(fact: his kind have three different tips of saliva, one is want Alex got it is like a relaxant that is used then to of his mind... mate... another is venom that they had as animals they not longer need it, and lase is normal kind, and not he not mating with Alex, they mate by kissing and changing saliva. but that's not something we want to walk abut now)
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Alex: Eww *giggles* what a weird guy you are... I wonder if you're some weird species of human not yet discovered, but I'd guess you'd be in the Amazon, not semi-rural US... *sighs and sits cross legged next to him, and next to the throw up* Those tatoos too... those are interesting...
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(fact those tattoos show want sex and want family he comes form)
thing:
*looks at her he is not as tents now that shes is not as up set* fun gil wa zud?*points at her*
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Alex: Wait a minute... are you trying to talk english?
*she points to herself* ALEX
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thing:
... al...alex?*points at her* qui tev fer y-qu Alex?
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*tries to figure out what he's saying, then her eyes light up, and she runs and grabs a small family portrait of her, her brother and fauther on the farm*
Alex *points to herself*
Conner *points to her brother*
*points to it*
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thing:
A-Alex*points at her*
c-Co-onner*point at him*
*he gets want she asking and he did not know want to say...*f hos ge juiced...*looking sad*
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