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Original story titled: Castle in the Light of Hyiero.Chapter 1: "Genesis"
Chapter 2 part 1: [link]
Chapter 3: [link]
Chapter 3 part 2: [link]
Dont be surprised if my characters change their design out of nowhere...none of them are written in stone, so u may see things change about them halfway through a chapter or something, who knows... and from page 1 to page 10 u can see i improved, but im not gonna go back and fix anything...i wanna track my improvements along the way....
An action packed Chapter 2 is on the way... We're gonna see some kick ass fight scenes...
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thanks a lot dude... the first 5 pages of the next chapter are up also [link] ...its the start of a fight scene....
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I know me read them theyre amazing
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this is fuckin deadly man! did you come up with this whole thing yourself?? its fantastic! on to chapter 2!
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yeah i did, and THANKS a lot for the FAVE's and the Watch...theres much more to this than what you've seen so far too...i have a whooole lot planned for the story, im glad u like it... Ill make sure to keep it interesting for u
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So ur the first REAL LIFE Irish person i think ive ever seen...awesome haha
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haha, but you havent ACTUALLY seen me. just a picture or two
I'd like ta say the same, but i know a few peopl who live or lived in the states
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everyone knows one of us... theres nothing special about us... but YOU.... your from the home of the Lucky Charms dude... and the dudes in Boondock Saints woo hoo... that measn ur awesome by default.. sorry, u have no choice in the matter.. ur awesome, now deal with it.. or else
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ok then, im definitley awesome. haha, thats disturbing, on so many levels 
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hahaha, you should do something about it ^^
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thanks but haha i think ur twilight pic was epic...
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welcome.thnx man.
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In general I think you have a very nice comic going on. The coloring is fairly excellent and you use it interestingly and generally keep a consistent light source when it matters. The individual pictures are also interesting. You use very dynamic poses and also know how to use the space that's given to you. The action itself is easy to surmise so I'm not playing a guessing game with it.
One thing I think you need to watch out for is your page layouts. Though the action itself is easy to decipher, figuring out which order everything goes in gets very difficult (especially in the later pages). It's a really huge turn-off since I had to spend extra time figuring out which flow made the story coherent. My suggestion is that you look at panel layouts and somehow adapt that to the pages. This will give a nicer flow for the readers' eyes and make the comic easier to read for them. My second suggestion is that you make sure you shade everything. Things like Mosi Odion's hair really stand out when they aren't shaded and it really detracts from the piece. Lastly, the only other thing I can suggest is practice anatomy some more. You have a good base and with a little more practice it'd look even better.
As for the story I think that you have an interesting concept. However, this chapter almost seemed like its own self contained story and didn't particularly make me want to read further. You may want to add a bit more suspense in general so that I feel more inclined to read and find out what happens next.
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Thanks a lot for this Crit... it raised a few good points to me...the most important i think is the last one about how it seems like its own self contained story...i tried to keep suspense from page to page so you want to read the next page, but i didnt consider over all how it felt going into the next chapter... i will keep this in mind next time...Thanks a lot..
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Yeah, I think you have page to page suspense down quite well. ^_^ Going from chapter to chapter is always a big challenge. Companies always seem to want first chapters to both be a self-contained story and to be unfinished and suspenseful so the reader will continue. It's a really delicate balance but once you find it you'll have a really great story on your hands~!
Anyway, I'm glad I could help~! ^_^
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Wow, it's really nice. The drawings are great and your concept is very original. I like the whole idea behind your comic. The way it was drawn, as in the layout is pretty good too. I really like it. great job!
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THANK YOU!!! really appreciated... its been kicking my ass drawing and coloring but itll be worth it later on down the line...
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you're welcome and yeah, i'm sure it will be
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Now that I have seen it started, I have to say that I am indeed hooked on it. It made me want to draw an original character and everything.
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wow man im honored... cant say ive ever inspired anyone to want to draw anything before... i dont even feel like what im doing is that good, i just like doing it... what kinda things do u like to draw of ur own?
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Hmmm... original stuff... To be honest, I don't have too much original stuff other than photos and portraits. I base most of my art off of what inspires me and what drives me make my own style. I guess my stuff that I am about to try out originally... is a base off of bits and pieces of things I like.
That is what has got me into wanting to do comics and original characters. I have also thought about basing some art off of songs that inspire me to see where that goes. Lots of fuel in the tank when it comes to inspiration, lots of choices in my path when it comes to my media and creativity... but when it comes to pulling the trigger, turning the ignition... well, I have yet to do that.
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im totally inspired to draw from music... and i make music too so im also inspired by drawings to make music...its just a big circle of creativity and i cant function in normal life without it... i always have tons of choices and directions to go as well, but im usually good at choosing what needs to be done first and second in order to reach the third... but it is easy to fall into the habit of doing nothing because ur stuck tryna figure out what TOO do... haha i think the most time i spend on my comics is staring at a blank page to figure out what i want to draw on it...
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i feel ya. I have a lot of work thats comin up and I am still getting ideas.
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wow dude, ur manga is better than i thought ! , and to think its all in color ! keep it up !
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wow dude, ur manga is better than i thought ! , and to think its all in color ! keep it up !
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thanks a lot man...been working my ass off to get it done...the first 2 pages of chapter 2 are up also...if ur interested, ive been looking for guest artists to do a cover or a page or a pin-up for it....ill link u, and feature u so u get more exposure... i figure there are really good artists on here that my watchers might want to see... its cool though if u cant...
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yeah sure , but it may take quite a while cause im real busy these days... but maybe its better that way , so i can read more of your chapters to get a better understanding.. that way i can draw it better..
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hey whats up dude... heres a [link] to the first page of the second chapter ( u might have seen it already) but theres links to the next 4 pages i just uploaded in artist comments..ttyl
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Using txt talk is a MAJOR turn off for a lot of people. Myself included.
I'm not digging the comic, really. The whole set up feels very familiar to X-Men and every other super mutant story ever written. But maybe it's just not my thing. You seem to have plenty of fans.
Good luck.
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well, its interesting u bring up x-men cause its probably one of ur first references to this typa story...X-men was probably my first with this also, but the truth is, it was done before x-men too, but not as a comic..as a story... everything is recycled in one way or another..everything u and i like was done before what we like in some form or another.. at this point all we can do is put a new swing on things and make it our own... haha its like the show "24"...its a regular show, but because each episode represents 1 hour of a day, it has a completely new swing to it...without that, its just like any other cop show thats good... i have many twists in store for the ppl that like it so far...ttyl oh yeah , whats "text talk"? u mean the narrative?
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Well whether it started with X-men or not is irrelevant, because the concept has been done to death. You're right about similarities to other stories being unavoidable, but there are some that are just too prominent to overlook. Who knows? Maybe it does take a turn for the better throughout the comic, and my comments are irrelevant. But the intro has left me very uninterested, and I'm just going to take your word for it.
By "txt talk", I mean using things like "u" instead of "you" and "OMG" instead of "OH MY GOD". It does not compliment the deadly serious story one bit.
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Just giving my opinion.
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O_o wow it's fantastic
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thank u VERY much... im glad u like u dude... i forget who saw what at this point, but in case u didnt, heres a link to the first page of chapter 2 [link] i did page 1 and 2 of the second chapter already... ttyl
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OMG dude that was awesome...i love it
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hahaha i know that feeling haha ^^ lol
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