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SteveJones313 — Song of the Failure
Published: 2007-01-30 01:50:04 +0000 UTC; Views: 846; Favourites: 27; Downloads: 1
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I'm the most popular guy to rejectThe funniest guy you've never met
I'm a raging success at failing
I smile when I'm wailing
I'm the fastest non-mover you've ever known
And I always feel most home-sick when I'm at home
I'm so contradictory to myself
I keep selfishly helping anyone but myself
I'm a screw up, a letdown, a catastrophe
And I'm laughing through my blatant misery
And I don't know where I'm going or how I'll get there
Hope it's better where I am now...This place I can't bear
Am the undisputed champion and getting knock out
The most hyper-active, busiest non-working lout
I have good intentions with bad consequences
I'm the most decisive person sitting on the fence
I'm a screw up, a letdown, a catastrophe
And I'm laughing through my blatant misery
And I don't know where I'm going or how I'll get there
Hope it's better where I am now...This place I can't bear
I'm a screw up, a let down, a catastrophe
And I'm laughing through my blatant misery
And I don't know where I'm going or how I'll get there
Hope it's better where I am now...This place I can't bear
(Piano instrumental)
And I don't know where I'm going or how I'll get there
I pray that it's better than here...
I pray that it's better than here...
Because this place...I just cannot...bear
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Comments: 48
This is a really amazing song! I can relate to it, and it's so beautifully written. Great work, I love it!
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You're very welcome, keep up the good work!
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I shall endeavour to do so.
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Lovely. The only thing that I can see is, "This place I can't bare" ... the last word is spelled incorrectly, I think.
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I used the wrong 'bare/bear'. Back then I was confused as to which was which.
Thanks for pointing it out ^^
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Naw, you already knew that. I wasn't sure, actually. Heh, but really - I did enjoy your piece.
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Too many people change their lyrics for the whims of other people. Thank you for keeping this as is.
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Thank you very much ^^
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No problem. i can relate quite well to the lyrics. ^^'
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It's almost a shame to hear that, my friend.
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Whilst I am glad you could identify with one of my works, it is sad for you that it should be this one.
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Heh, could always be worse.
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Well I sincerely hope things get better for you.
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Hey...
so this is really good...
There's only so many people I know who can truly write a good song
and a ton i dont know of course haha
I don't know very much about writing music
but ive read a lot of words in my short little life
and
it might not mean much but I think this is really good
I'm not gonna try and figure out
i have a fear of being wrong about what it means
i just want to leave it open for interpretation and stuff--like
i just wanna read it and see something different everytime
idk
its so good
i wish i could write like this.
specially the piano thing--i love piano instrumental segments...they like, send me to the roof man. dig it.
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Thank you very much for the warm words ^^
Every song and every poem will mean something different to everyone. The songs and poems I write are just extensions of my own emotions, so really there is no absolute definition to them, other than the emotions present in the words.
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Usually, if I feel bad and want to write about it, it'd uaually end up like "onoes! i r a fail! wut i do now? go fail moar i guess. it all i know T_T" but you did a superb job at putting poetically and beautifully a feeling a lot of us feel now and then and some of us feel a lot. thank you very much
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read my works and commenting. I'm thoroughly glad you enjoyed it. ^_^
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Why is it that all of the best ideas a writer comes up with are the middle of the night?
Well done!!
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Maybe it's the effect of the moon?
Maybe it's because during the day we all wear masks to cover those parts of us we are too afraid or ashamed to show...but at night, we have no need to wear the masks...perhaps...
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no critique necessary, this is great, i love the paradoxes(he he english has rubbed off on me) is this about you though?
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You know me too well, lol. Indeed it is.
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i'm sorry you feel this way about yourself, you're one of the more amazing people i know, which would raise the level of amazing to a lot more if we knew each other in person, either way you're wonderful, truly wonderful, smile it makes the world go round
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You were blessed with wisdom of words...
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Well it's paid off
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being a failure, yes
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Great song. I love all the lines with clever paradoxes, especially:
"I'm the fastest non-mover you've ever known
And I always feel most home-sick when I'm at home"
and
"The most hyper-active, busiest non-working lout"
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Why thank you. Like I said, it's just how I feel and I'm attempting to word them best I can so it can be fully understood.
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this is very good *-* (u.u i would like to hear it)
i dont thing that there is anything that you need to chenge in your song o.O why would you do that, right?
loved the contradicting parts... specially "I'm the most decicive person sitting on the fence" ^^
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People have their favourites. It's just how I feel.
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I really enjoyed this song and the fact that it is coming from the heart and is not a complete perfection makes a very beautiful piece. I love how you worded this as well. How in every breath it seems that you are contradicting, rebut, and dispute agianst yourself.
"And I don't know where I'm going or how I'll get there
Hope it's better where I am now...This place I can't bare"
It seems you want to be different than how you are and you want to actually become a new/diferent you. Someone that would make you happier than you are and make you a better person.
This is how this song makes me think and feel. But agian this is a very beautiful and original piece and i loved it very much! ^_^
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Thank you. Thank you for understanding the song. Thank you for understanding me. You got it! You got exactly what I'm trying to say. You got it! How perceptive you are!
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wow thank you! I'm am glad that i understood the song in the way you wanted it to be. That just means that you have a brilliant talent. You will do many great things in this world with that talent!
Also i'm glad that i understood it from your point of view... thats sort of how i look at everyones art. But you put all your feelings and thoughts into words so amazingly that i was able to see it very clearly.
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It's always a great feeling when you get feedback like this.
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Thank you. Thank you for understanding the song. Thank you for understanding me. You got it! You got exactly what I'm trying to say. You got it! How perceptive you are!
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I really like the chorus... or at least I think that's what you call it...
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