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Jonathan: You know, I think I change my mind, perhaps we should follow the river...
Bianca: And what if it doesn't? What if the river is part of loop and we end up going the wrong way? It's a 50/50 shot, and either way, I'm leaving. Bye!
Jonathan: Well, I'm not going off into who-knows-where. Good luck getting hopelessly lost!
"The Princess Dalmatian" (c)
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When the prince says "perhaps we should follow the river..."
And then Bianca says "And what if it doesn't?"
There seems to be something missing between those two statements...to connect them together. Maybe the prince should add "maybe it WILL lead somewhere" to make it fit with what Bianca says next...if that makes sense. Just seems to be an unfinished thought here.
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Yeah, I started a re-written script, nothing too major, just a few adjustments to the original dialogue to make things run more smoothly--this was definitely one of the conversations that needed a bit of tweaking.
Here's hoping I actually get to creating the re-write....
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