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VASS-comics [2011-01-08 19:19:10 +0000 UTC]

In the first panel catwoman is running from right to left, then in he next panel, the camera has done a 180 and she runs into batman as she moves from left to right, then in the 5th panel batman is on the left and catwoman is on the right, and in the 6th panel batman is to the right of catwoman. Once you start the scene you should try to keep the chracters on the same side throughout the scene, like if catwoman is on the left and batman on the right in panel 2, then you should try to keep them like that throughout the scene. Gabe and Fernando go over that, and how to like switch the camera around without it feeling jumpy and all that. I think that if you had kept them sort of in the same orientation to eachother throughout this scene it would have read better and been more powerful.

One other small thing is that catwoman's hand is breaking the border in the second panel, when you break the border with something the eye is pulled into that panel, not pushed out of it, so if you want to lead someone to the 3rd panel, you would want to make batman's head breaking the border or something like that, and honestly the layout is strong enough that you don't need to break the border to lead to the 3rd panel, which is good.

That being said this is a vast improvement over the stuff you were doing last year, and those minor things aside this is a sweet page! Keep up the good work!

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millenium-night [2011-01-08 18:49:56 +0000 UTC]

You have every reason to be proud, this is amazing
I love the lighting, especially in the first panel.

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