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Published: 2013-08-26 18:18:58 +0000 UTC; Views: 366; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 0
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The streets were filled with cars and horns blaring against the sound of ambulances and people discussing whatever it was they needed to say on their cell phones. As I was making my way down the road to the local Starbucks, my lips began to tingle and it was almost as if I were in the Matrix. I looked down at my hand and it was the hand of the man I just stole life from.Looking around the city, it was as if I was seeing it in his eyes. Everyone taking the forms of different shapes, like linear compositions of themselves. Closing my eyes, I saw him with a wife who cheated on him, with a child he spent time with, and a divorce. Holding my breath, I opened my eyes again and the world was then mine again.
Shaking my head, deleting the memories of a man I didn’t know for more than a night, I continued to get my coffee. Walking into the Starbucks, I noticed there were no more than fifteen people there. I waited in line, where I found myself hungry and needing to eat more.
Every time I took the souls of people, I was filled, but it only lasted so long. I tried gapping it out by only taking a soul when I really needed it. I know I really need someone else’s soul when my head is light and it feels like I am empty inside. I begin to feel like a zombie, eyes unfocused and dying to just eat whatever crossed in front of me.
I tried picking people I never seen before or people that could potentially be what others would consider evil. Sometimes, I find myself in a hospice taking the souls of people who are ready to leave the world. The only thing I didn’t like about those people is that they had such full lives that I see their memories for days. Some of them revealing all of their good times, all of their bad times, and sometimes, they would be so gapped that I didn’t even remember who it was that I was feeling.
It was an intense roller coaster of emotions. When the person was having a moment of anxiousness, I could feel that entire moment. There were times I found myself in my apartment lying in bed, having their nightmares and fearing all they feared. I’d be waking up in cold sweats and heavy breathing. Trying to calm myself down, remembering that they were only visions, nothing more.
“Next.”
Looking at the boy behind the counter, I skimmed over the menu. Usually, I stop at the same Starbucks, but since I wasn’t local I figured I would get something different.
“Venti iced hazelnut macchiato”
“You got it.”
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Comments: 8
Darkest-Illusion [2013-08-29 18:08:21 +0000 UTC]
I'm really liking the descriptions of her visions as a focal point of the story. It gives more insight of the people she encounters and is a nice walk away from normal succubus type stories that tend to focus more on the character and their killings than anything else.
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surrender-myself In reply to Darkest-Illusion [2013-08-30 05:51:47 +0000 UTC]
I think it makes her more human. I want her to kind of be human, but also have that side where she can fucking kill and eat the soul of anyone she wants. I have some direction in where it might go. I think it will be good for her to try and control it...if she can.
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Darkest-Illusion In reply to surrender-myself [2013-08-30 15:44:02 +0000 UTC]
Seems she had a sense of control over it when she breathed it back into the girl. She just didn't realize it yet? Interesting that she can breathe it back in that way as well.
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surrender-myself In reply to Darkest-Illusion [2013-09-12 03:52:18 +0000 UTC]
I think she does and then she doesn't. And it's one of those things I think she tries to forget, yet she somehow still manages to control the parts of this person she can't explore too much. She knows she has the power, but she is unsure as to what it is.
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Darkest-Illusion In reply to surrender-myself [2013-09-15 05:07:52 +0000 UTC]
I guess we shall see as her character develops then.
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Rip-Wire [2013-08-26 20:06:58 +0000 UTC]
LOL, still working on the 1st one you posted. At least I have it all layed out and I started to pencil it. Need to work on part 2, now part 3 as well. Just keep em coming and before you know it, we'll have a book done. The only thing we might have to change is the Starbucks. I'm not sure if we are allowed to use that in a comic, without their permission.
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surrender-myself In reply to Rip-Wire [2013-08-30 05:52:08 +0000 UTC]
I will change that. It maybe just coffee cafe or something.
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