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pawcanada [2017-04-08 09:38:32 +0000 UTC]

Hello from .

As a long time martial artist, this piece jumped out at me .

I will say, I do like the tilt of the upper body. I often found I had to do that myself to serve as a counter weight for high kicks (though that was due to my own lack of flexibility) and I think you did a good job conveying that. I really like the grimace on her face and I think you've done an excellent job with the folds and ruffles on her clothes and the movement of her ponytail.

The martial artist in me does want to ask what sort of kick is she doing in this piece? It looks to me like it's a kind of roundhouse kick , namely due to the position of the foot and upper body. If that is the case, I'd advise turning the knee in so it's facing the camera more, as the roundhouse kick is a sweeping movement from outside the body towards the inside, and it would be difficult to do the technique properly and without injury if the knee is pointing upwards. I'd also advise turning the supporting leg so the foot is facing in the same way as the upper body (as per the picture I showed) to help better convey the balance when you're doing a high kick like this. If it's not a round house kick, then I'm afraid it's not clear to me what you're trying to convey in this piece as the position of the foot doesn't convey any other kick I know of, outside of leg raises used to warm up, stretch and increase flexibility. I also feel the position of the kicking foot is wrong as it looks like it's flat and facing the camera, but I do realise the foot shape is going to be difficult to portray due to the fact she's wearing shoes.

I apologise if I seem so harsh on that, but as I had the proper technique drilled into me for years, it does make me cringe a little when I see elements I feel either aren't done right, could/would cause pain to the person or make the technique difficult to do. Of course, I also realise this is a commission so you are conveying something a customer paid for.

I do think you go the length of the legs spot on, but I feel the upper portion of the visible arm looks a little too short. Both halves are around the same length, where as her the upper portion looks to be around 75% the length of the lower half. Of course, I know all too well how easy it is to miss mistakes like then when you're engrossed in other elements of the piece.

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Kathalia [2017-04-08 01:18:46 +0000 UTC]

Hello!  Found this on and it caught my eye.

Overall, its a pretty solid piece, with nice crisp lineart and good proportions.  From a technical side, not much to add.

The part that could use a bit of work is the general anatomy.  Her raised foot is head-on, and her leg would need to be twisted to a broken-degree to get that angle.  Her foot should be twisted to more of a profile view to correct this.  Lowering her raised leg a little bit shouldn't detract too much from the end result, but will look less strained and unnatural.

Another issue is her shoulders.  The epaulets on them are very cool, but the angle between her shoulder is very steep and we would probably only be able to see much less of the higher shoulder, if we saw it at all.  Her right arm, on the other hand, seems to disappear after going behind her leg.  Some extra detail on her boots would probably help as they are one of the weaker sections of the drawing

The strength of this piece is the movement.  Between the fluttering of her clothing and hair, and the contours of her body, there is a real sense of motion to the picture.  Her gritted teeth show of her determination and exertion quite well and to great effect.  Her clenched fist echoes this as well. 

This is still a good piece and shows a real level of skill.  Just keep an aye on the anatomy a bit and your future work will be great pieces!

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Tunahai [2017-03-22 19:36:41 +0000 UTC]

hi I am here from Project Cmment!
Let me start by saying that this is a really cool picture. Her pose is dynamic and looks badass.
The lines are crisp and nice. The only part where you used shading is the eyes which makes you look at them. Nice effect!
But there are still some smller mistakes or problems in this picture. Keep in mind this is my personal opinion and that this is still a awesome picture.
First the composition on the whole. It is minimalistic which is expected of a lineart like that. But it would help if yo would have showed the ground and/or the thing she is kicking. Right now she is kind of floating in the air with no connections to anything else.
Second the anatomy. Most of it is solid! Really good work! I like that her legs aren't 2meters long, like you often see it in comics or mangas. her upper body is a touch short. There is no shortening because of angle or perspective. Her armbed is  to long but that could fix itself if you make te upper body longer.
Her neck is a bit big and in contrast her head is a bit to small.
An at last two tiny pet peeves of mine nobody in a skirt would kick like that! srsly! I get that is what the comissioner wanted you to draw but please! XD I hope she wears nice undis XD
Drawing braids is really difficult! I know! I don't know if yours is correct or not    u///.\\\u but a look at a good tutorial can never do harm.
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All in all a really good picture! nice work!

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Emelina0 [2017-03-21 16:56:40 +0000 UTC]

Aw this looks so good!! Well drawn! This reminds me so much of Chun-Li from streetfighter! Love it!  

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atomicsnarl [2017-03-21 13:56:02 +0000 UTC]

Berry berry nice!

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Cumulusnubes [2017-03-21 13:13:14 +0000 UTC]

Nice!

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