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I sit back, my feet up against the glove compartment. I glance across at him, concentrated and serious, watching the road, and smile inwardly, feeling the familiar feeling on my heart dancing in my chest. A rush of shining colours runs through me, and I lean forward to turn up the stereo, basking in the feeling of the moment.“Don’t fucking turn that up.”
I almost jump in my seat, and look at him.
“What?”
He looks back at me with colder eyes.
“I said, don’t fucking turn that up.”
He turns down the volume again and his gaze returns to the road. I sit, shocked.
“What the fuck? I was just turning up the radio for Christ’s sake, why talk to me like that?”
He continues to stare at the road calmly, though I sense his breath quickening, his grip tightens on the steering wheel. I begin to feel angry.
“Don’t fucking ignore me.”
The car swerves suddenly across two lanes, horns blare out from the cars surrounding us, he slams the breaks down on the hard shoulder. Before I can say anything, he claws a handful of my hair and pulls it down sharply so my head is almost on the seat. I’m terrified but I can’t scream. He talks with scorn, almost whispering through gritted teeth.
“Don’t ever talk to me like that. I decide what you do and where you do it. Now we’re married I do what the fuck I like with you. And it doesn’t stop here. When we fly home you’re going to tell everyone what a fucking wonderful honeymoon you had, and then we’ll go to live happily ever after. If anyone ever has reason to think anything different, I’ll kill you.”
He releases me from his grip and pulls out into the fast lane. I sit, frozen, in a shocked silence. I look at my hands and they’re shaking, I look in the wing mirror and tears are streaming down my face. I can’t think. I look at him and see his cold, hard eyes, emotionless. A great surge of fear rises up in my chest but I suppress it with all I have. I’m trapped. Two weeks in a foreign country with someone I don’t know. A stranger. Someone who 20 minutes ago was the person I was going to spend the rest of my life with, have children with. Something catches my eye.
A blade glistens, falling from his pocket. He quickly follows my gaze and sees it, pushing it back into his jeans. He catches my eye and smiles at me, a smiles which makes ice run through my veins. A warning.
He pulls up to the hotel, gets out of the car. I am expected to follow. The doorman greets him, shows him to the reception.
The knife is strewn on his seat. The cold steel flashes at my eyes.
I pull up my sleeve.
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Comments: 23
CancerianQueen [2005-03-13 04:23:03 +0000 UTC]
OMG! That's hell awesome! ^_^ I love it! That writing is sooooooo good.... so powerful... so emotion filled!
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trinacobrajet [2005-03-10 21:33:34 +0000 UTC]
woww. this reminded me of sarah dessen's 'dreamland' which i loved.
this is amazing. wow. ..i can't even find words to describe it. ;0;
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trinacobrajet In reply to trinacobrajet [2005-03-10 21:49:28 +0000 UTC]
it's a book. about this girl who gets an abusive boyfriend. ;O
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swiftkitty In reply to trinacobrajet [2005-03-10 21:36:49 +0000 UTC]
ohh psh you are too nice ;x <333
whats 'dramland'? ive never heard of it :3
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keekochan [2005-03-09 22:24:51 +0000 UTC]
wow swift! o_o you should really consider writing more! this is wonderful, very intence and i bet you were the only one in class who had this idea, ne? beautiful work! <3
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swiftkitty In reply to keekochan [2005-03-10 07:38:35 +0000 UTC]
yaay thankyouuu <3334794587
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Smoulder [2005-03-09 14:15:14 +0000 UTC]
Mwahahaa swearing in essays is good! and yes, it's cool.. very good writing, and i know you're gonna call me a liar but you should have a career in writing you talented jdgdggdfdk <3
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ashaaaleih [2005-03-09 06:09:19 +0000 UTC]
Waow, totally love this, Swift! <3 You're so lucky you get to swear in essays DDDD: This rocks. Word. I think the first paragraph really catches your attention and.. yea XD
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swiftkitty In reply to ashaaaleih [2005-03-09 07:31:17 +0000 UTC]
thankyou, you lovely scrotumface you n__n <33
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Paradraik [2005-03-08 22:26:03 +0000 UTC]
I like how you left it hanging at the end. I'd normally want to know what happens next, but the way you did it is too good. The beginning is fantastic, especially "basking in the feeling of the moment." Love that.
I think the conversation part needs more, though. It's a little too brief.
I really don't know how to critique these things. XD
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swiftkitty In reply to Paradraik [2005-03-09 07:30:49 +0000 UTC]
XD thankyou~ yes the conversation could be better, but im too lazy to edit it and stuff D;
harthart <3
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SiTheLion [2005-03-08 21:26:11 +0000 UTC]
Great work, Swift. You have writing talent. Your teacher must have loved all the 'fucks' :-p
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swiftkitty In reply to SiTheLion [2005-03-08 21:48:30 +0000 UTC]
lirl, she doesnt mind, she cool :3
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SiTheLion In reply to swiftkitty [2005-03-08 21:57:45 +0000 UTC]
Yaaay! English teaches understand the importance of such words.
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Rhexi [2005-03-08 21:08:58 +0000 UTC]
swift, you should think of a career in writing. o0o; i love this passage. expect the unexpected, ne?
+ my stupid msn is not working. T__T;
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swiftkitty In reply to Rhexi [2005-03-08 21:45:40 +0000 UTC]
i think not, rhex XDD but thankyou ~<33
AND I KNOW DD: I WAS LIKE OMZZ HI MOO 8D AND THEN YOU DIED. IT WAS HORRIFYING.
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Gosunkgugi [2005-03-08 21:02:41 +0000 UTC]
Hmmm.... Maybe you should vary your swearing a little.
No further complaint's, your dishonor.
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swiftkitty In reply to Gosunkgugi [2005-03-08 21:47:54 +0000 UTC]
i think the swearing is necessary for feeling in this thing. well for me anyways ~<3
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Gosunkgugi In reply to swiftkitty [2005-03-09 09:11:52 +0000 UTC]
Well, of course, I'm just saying you should use a more varied swearing, I am not that very conversant with english, but there must be more swearwords than one, no?
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Dullstar [2005-03-08 20:39:03 +0000 UTC]
wow powerfull stuff, you are a very tallented writerr ^-^
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swiftkitty In reply to Dullstar [2005-03-08 20:48:30 +0000 UTC]
thankyou n_n <3 but you are a filthy liar, dull ;x
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Dullstar In reply to swiftkitty [2005-03-08 20:51:38 +0000 UTC]
gak i do not lieee, for if i did my nose would grrroww!!
no really its well good!!
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