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Fayrenaissance [2010-11-23 02:53:37 +0000 UTC]

Overall

Vision

Originality

Technique

Impact

Why am I writing so many critiques lately, you ask? Well, for one, I just get in these random moods, and for two, your art is fun to critique because you do so much of it, and the improvement is visible over a course of time. I'm actually going to try to stick with the stupid "out of five stars" system, so here goes.

(I chose this particular deviation because there are a lot of things that are definitely really good, but also a lot of things that could be improved, about it.)

Vision: I think you had a good idea going before you started drawing. It looks like the character, and her outfit, were planned, and you took your time envisioning the results, like you said in the artist's comments, ha ha. To point out something real fast, I love the hair - it looks textured and messy, just like her hair would be if she were, say, standing in a light wind, being all... Katniss... -y.

Originiality: Allllrighty, Swifty. I know, know, know you can do better than this! You had an idea for the outfit, but why didn't you take it further? And the pose - you do this pose a lot! Same for the expression! We've seen you do this kind of stuff before now, and before that, and before that. I can guarantee you that if you try something new in the way of pose or expression, your work will get a lot more interesting. There are some things about it that add individual flair, such as the motifs/stars on her quiver belt, the sleeves.

By the way, actually everybody's done this scene, like everybody I watch, but I'm not counting off for that because it's an awesome scene and everybody should draw it anyway. e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s… " width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Smile)"/>

Technique: Your hair and shading is brilliant as usual! e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b… " width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Big Grin)"/> I've critiqued your anatomy before, but I'm not going to do it again just yet - people change anatomical styles over a course of time. One thing I will say is that in a lot of your drawings, this one as an example, you tend to have a disconnect between the head and the body - the head and neck are really detailed and pretty, but it kind of overwhelms the picture because, where the neck meets the torso, it's like the person you're drawing shrinks - the shoulders and torso are too thin. The same goes from the torso to the hips. Just something I've noticed.

And by the way, kudos for the detail in the arrows.

Impact: As usual, most of your impact is at the top. Her face and hair draw a lot of the attention, especially because the hair is so dark - which is one of the reasons that I like that you made the bow as dark as it is, though perhaps it would be better if the "other dark object," so to speak, was vertical... but that's just a musing from me, and not supported by any rules of art that I know of. e.deviantart.net/emoticons/let… " width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Lick)"/> Overall, the impact is pretty good.

Overall, this is a good piece. It depicts the character accurately and well, conveys emotion and her personality, and I believe accomplishes what you intended it to. e.deviantart.net/emoticons/h/h… " width="15" height="13" alt="" title="Heart"/> Keep drawing, because we all want to see you continue to improve.

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Cherryblossembreeze [2014-08-30 19:26:21 +0000 UTC]

you've read a lot of books  

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adorkableXbabyXwhale [2010-12-06 21:36:15 +0000 UTC]

Very nice! The eyes should be a little lower in my opinion but it looks great!

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x-shokora-x [2010-11-23 21:26:55 +0000 UTC]

i don't know you, buttttt eue kay, so, i reaaaally love the face and hair ;u; so pretty! i dunno what you dislike about the hands, i think they look pretty good <:
i would agree with the critique - she kinda shrinks from head down D: and the neck seems a bit far the the side, like a lot >A<

but otherwise, i like ouo what's it from?

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bob-a-loo [2010-11-23 01:17:12 +0000 UTC]

I love your handwriting! My only thing is her neck looks a little long and thick, but everything else looks fantastic

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xXtHeHoStGiRlxX [2010-11-23 00:44:08 +0000 UTC]

I can't write a crtique so I'll right one in here.
I believe that this piece has wonderful detail and you as an artist has great potential. If you want to know how to make this piece better, I'd say practice on the propotions of the body. For example, the neck is too wide and long and the head is too large in comparison to her body. Also don't be afraid to widen her hips a tad or else she looks like bone.

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Plumeria7484 [2010-11-22 21:17:25 +0000 UTC]

This looks awesome!!!

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