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anywho this took a day to type and heck I needed some fun this thanksgiving break so enjoy.

Transformers Alterverse: Drabble Fallen in Dreams

SHUT UP AND LEAVE ME THE SLAG ALONE!

No says the crazy monster. Nothing but lies, nothing but bull, nothing but filthy manipulative words. His appearance is nothing more then apocalyptic and horrifying. Over and over he asks for the thing that will allow him freedom but still no budging from the one with the object of his desire. He tries to break her will with visions of war and devastation. The sights of blood-soaked sorrow on the faces of whom he shows her. As time ticks on the clock it is just a few hours each night but even a minute is enough to make someone sick with disgust. Wars, countless wars play in the mind. He controls her dream world now, as his power and might is stronger then that of the subconscious mind. Everything he wants to make real can be in the imagination of a human mind. A portal opened the day the cube set out a large burst of light giving him enough time to sow the seed of a part of his own mind within hers. His time is limited as he only can stay for a year at a time. Impatient he grows with every failed attempt to make the human break. Pathetic he calls her as he finds her weaknesses and uses them to torture her with visions of what she fears most. But the only good news is knowing, that he cannot stay forever so with eyes shut tight she tries to zone him out. He has already found a way to use her body like a puppet and scared she is that, he will use that as a way to get his beloved cube. He tried to sway her decision by showing her the way to her trapped comrades but with no avail. She could not get close enough to set them free. And now without the cube, the machine won’t work and he cannot be let out of his prison. The very prison that a third generation prime put him in. While the machine relied on a program by a second generation prime it was a third that imprisoned him deep in a negative void. Only The Fallen can bring his master back alive and online. Unicron his leader can only be brought back online with the code the Fallen now possesses and that very code can also bring Primus back. In the final battle between Primus and Unicron it drained their energy so low that they were put into stasis to keep themselves from dying. Only issue was that the code to bring them out was given to the best of the primes; The Fallen; and he betrayed his own creator by allying himself with Unicron.

At least that’s what keys told Taiya. She was beginning to lose trust in the doctor. No matter what he did to stop the madness of Arkeville it was very disheartening to know that he had her comrades trapped deep inside of his massive facility. And now having to sit though the Fallen’s cruel words on her failure to rescue her friends. Sitting in the middle of a torn war zone she just sat on the floor trying her best to zone him out.

Fallen – “You are sooo pathetic it makes me feel sorry that the cons even have to deal with you. I got you in the right place, ALL YOU HAD TO DO WAS GET PAST SECURITY AND YOU FAILED!”
Taiya – {with ears plugged} ‘I’m not listening, LA LA LA LA!”
Fallen – “That wont work, you know I can control you here. Well almost full control. I still cannot get you to speak but I will find out how.” {He walked around her}
Taiya – “Just a little longer and I never have to see you again.” {Still keeping her eyes shut tight and her ears plugged}
Fallen – “Ah that is where you are wrong human, in a year I will be back and I won’t use restraint on you. With every new cyber component you gain the easier it becomes to control your body and eventually I will even crack into your mind.”
Taiya – {said nothing}
Fallen – {stood right in front of her} “My patience is growing thin, WHAT WILL IT TAKE FOR YOU TO DO AS I WISH!”
Taiya – “I WILL NEVER DO WHAT YOU WANT!”
Fallen – ‘I beg to differ.”
Taiya -
Fallen – {smirked} “You think he will keep you alive when he finds out you had the cube for so long. He wont, he will rip the skin from your body and kill your bother as you die.”
Taiya – “He won’t! AND HE WONT FIND OUT I EVEN HAD IT!”
Fallen – “Megatron is not that stupid, arrogant but not stupid. He already showed you just how little you are worth by handing you over to that bot loving slagger.”
Taiya -
Fallen – “I on the other hand just ask one thing from you, the cube. I am a generous person; I can give you what you want.” {He made the battlefield go away as blank white surrounded the area}
Taiya – “I am not listening to you! ALL YOU OFFER IS DEATH!”
Fallen – {ran his finger over her throat} “If it were up to me and I had my physical body I would cut your throat for speaking to me like this.”
Taiya – {flinched and moved away only to have him grab her ankle and pull her back}
Fallen – “Or maybe I should strangle you {grabbed the sides of her neck and pinched} or maybe even burn you alive.”
Taiya – “KEEP DREAMING, IN THIS WORLD YOU MAY CONTROL WHAT GOES ON BUT I STILL WAKE UP!”
Fallen – {Picked her up high into the air by her face and sent burns through her}
Taiya – {yelled out in pain}
Fallen – “Then explain how I can do that?”
Taiya – “My mom…says it’s a…psychosomatic reaction.” {She said kicking trying to get free}
Fallen – {sent another burning pain through her} “YOU THINK THAT IT IS ALL IN YOUR HEAD!” “I THINK NOT!”{He let go and she fell to the floor}
Taiya – {keeping her eyes shut tight crawled away} “Just a…few…more…hours and
Fallen – “And what? You will have your precious dream world back! HA! Don’t make me laugh. Your dreams are really really boring.”
Taiya – “THEY ARE NOT!”
Fallen – {conjured up what she wished to dream about} “Oh like this one {her mom showed up with arms wide open}
Taiya – ‘Leave my mother out of this!”
Fallen – “Alright then how about this. {What looked like a silver skin toned male walked up with a purple t shirt and dreadlocks with his hand outstretched to help Taiya up} A human Blackout you are really sad.”
Taiya – {blushing through an angered face}
Fallen – “And there are also your nightmares…
Taiya – O_O;
Fallen – {waved his hand and the human version of Blackout turned into Melvin whom as wearing a red and gold uniform with a blue shirt. As a chain wrapped itself around her neck} you know you look good as his dog. {He snapped his fingers and Melvin disappeared}
Taiya – {grasping her neck}
Fallen – “But nothing makes you more scared then this {she had to look away as a dead Stephen lay in front of her torn nearly to shreds}
Taiya – {feeling like someone had smashed her heart into oblivion} “SHUT UP! SHUT UP! PRIMUS DAMN YOU! LEAVE ME THE HELL ALONE!”

While he tried to turn her mind into an abysmal void primus spoke to Divine the Seraphim disguised as a man named Victor Keys. It was urgent as time ticked down to the one hour long window Primus had to reach out to the one that took the cube.

Primus – ‘I will be leaving soon to see if I can free the human with the cube.”
Victor – “Is there anything I can do to help?”
Primus – “There might be, can you enter your Sera form in your dream world?”
Victor – “Yes. {he took a deep breath and his form dramatically changed as a golden ring showed up in his eyes and his burns from the acid vanished. His outfit changed into what looked like a mixture of high tech armory with the middle ages style cut. The last and most dazzling thing of all was his 6 angel wings. They had a slight blue hue to them}
Primus – “I want you to focus all of your energy on this code {a set of Cybertronian symbols floated in the air} this is the set of ciphers I will need to get into the child’s mind. But I think that together we stand a good chance keeping the portal open for longer.”
Victor – “Alright I should be able to do it.”
Primus – “Thank you, dear prince of the Seraphim’s. Before I go do you know anything that may help?”
Victor – “I know who she is, her name is Taiya and she has chosen to ally herself with the cons. I don’t think she will take to seeing you so nicely.”
Primus – “Con? Oh no. this just got a lot more complicated.”
Victor – “If I do anything she will die, so I haven’t told anyone about my suspicion especially to any of the inner circle of the McAlister’s.”
Primus – {looked worried} “Do you know how she got the Allspark?”
Victor – “No. But it has something to do with L.A right after Sam got knocked out.”
Primus – ‘I see. I just hope that the keycards can help you locate the Matrix when it comes time.”
Victor – “It may not be able to find the allspark but I hope it can help with that.”
Primus – “Now just to wait till the allspark lets the one know it is time to find it.”
Victor -
Primus – “It saddens me to have to say this but, you might need to resort to con tactics yourself if I fail today.”
Victor – “What do you mean Primus?”
Primus – {looked like his spark had just went out} “You might have to detain the girl yourself and find some way to get her to talk.”
Victor – “Torture? Is that what you are saying?” {could not believe his ears}
Primus – “I can’t sacrifice the well being of the universe for one. I am sorry Victor, time is running short.” {feeling ashamed he looked away}
Victor – {thinking of home just gulped} “I understand. BUT! I will only do that if I cannot find any other way.”
Primus – {bent down} ‘I have faith in you.”

Primus waited patiently with Victor for the portal opening. While Taiya argued with the Fallen.

Taiya – “YOU WANT THE CUBE BUT YOU MAKE ME LOOK LIKE A GIANT FREAK!”
Fallen –
Taiya – “Your slagging symbols are singling me out! MEGATRON IS EVEN STARTING TO GET SUSPICIOUS! And I know Victor is on to me. I can feel it.”
Fallen – {he just laughed} “You have nothing to fear.”
Taiya – “What! ARE YOU COMPLETELY FRAGGED! He works with Prime you moron! He finds out that I took the cube and he gets it to prime you can kiss your little welcome home party goodbye!”
Fallen – “Not if you have a card in your deck that he does not.”
Taiya – ‘Oh right…like the most straight laced doctor has anything I can use as blackmail. Pah-lease you have to be sparking mad.”
Fallen – “But I do, something you got suspicious yourself. The DNA result from the strand of hair you took from his coat.”
Taiya -
Fallen – “It came back inconclusive and that the computer could not discern any standard genetic code. You know he is not as honest about his work. He must have had help to be so good so fast.”
Taiya – {with a high fever she just tried to ignore him}
Fallen – {with a quick wave of his hand the surrounding area started to unravel like a story book in a children’s fairy tale}

The grass was so plush and soft and the sky was such a beautiful blue it looked as if flying fish would swim past it. A huge crystal like castle stuck out in the background. It shown in the sun like a diamond. As flowers popped up in the grass Taiya noticed several beings on futuristic like hover devices fly by. The Fallen just stood with a smirk on his face. But why thought Taiya, why were they back on the Seraphim planet? It hit like a brick wall as she turned with eyes open wide to the Fallen.

Fallen – “So you aren’t as stupid as you look.”
Taiya – “No, you have to be wrong!”
Fallen – “I’m not. Victor Keys is a Seraphim, and not just any Seraphim but the youngest son of the royal family!”
Taiya – {could hardly comprehend what she was hearing} “The royal family…O_O! NO I WONT BELIEVE YOUR LIES!”
Fallen – “I assure you if he is going to cost me the cube then I will tell the truth till I have rust in my optical wire.”
Taiya – “But…but…Seraphim’s have unlimited ability to heal. YOU TOLD ME THAT! And victor still has burnt eyes.”
Fallen – “He is faking it. Very well I might add. That is why he is soo smart.’
Taiya – “He has been using his own Sera’s technology and calling it his own discoveries.”
Fallen – ‘Most yes. But you know now. You can tell him if he does not back off then you will reveal his true self to the world {they were enveloped in light as they zapped to the middle of a throne room where Divine stood accepting his mission} now hold still I have to gain access to your recording ability. {he placed his hand on her head behind the ear}

As he kept her head still it showed the process of Divine coming to earth and becoming the boy that everyone knew. He chose the name Victor Keys in response to his mission. He had to be the middle ground between the humans and transformers. The Seraphim’s have kept the peace in the universe for a millennia and it was apprehend that they would have to stop the cons and bots before their war could tear the universe apart. The only thing that Taiya did not understand is how a race like them could possibly send their own prince to ally with the bots. The bots themselves had done several crimes against them. It showed the progression to the present. The Fallen let her head go and with a large bellowing laugh he praised his own genius.

Fallen – “So you see, he is nothing now. When you wake up it will stay in your memory.”
Taiya – “I can’t believe it. I just
Fallen – “Now, back to the cube. Please just bring it to the machine and I can protect you from Megatron. {he walked up behind her} I can save you or I can give you a fast and pain free death. You decide…as in your culture…I scratch your back you scratch mine. And if you choose life over death I will no longer be inside your head. Doesn’t that sound nice?’
Taiya – {still just begging the night to be over and that she would wake up}
Fallen – {turned away and looked up} “When I come back, I will once again be leader of all Transformers, bot and con, and I will once again sit as Prime!”
Taiya – {taking the opportunity to walk away a bit}
Fallen – “I have the knowledge of the cube, the machine, but not the matrix. I still have no idea where my brothers put it.”
Taiya – {noticed a light show up in the distance as the fallen too much in his own ramblings did not notice a thing}
{she saw a being that looked Optimus show up carefully walking out of the portal. Could it be? Thought Taiya. No it couldn’t be. Primus!? Or could it just be another joke by the fallen?}
Primus – {looked around and saw a human girl standing out in the vast expanse of the humans dream world. The Fallen standing right there and he did not sense Primus! Now was the time, Primus put his finger to his faceplate to indicate shhh to the girl and used his other hand to indicate come here}
Taiya – {looked back and forth only wanted to get away. And hope filled her heart as she thought “ Primus he doesn’t hate me!” she looked at the fallen and quickly ran towards primus}
Fallen – “To have my own world again, to see them all bow to me once more. I will finally be able to go home and away from this malfunctioning glitch.” {he turned around and thought “hey where did she go?” he saw the light and Primus!}
Primus – {Got into a full run when he saw that the Fallen had spotted him. He had to get the human out now!} “ PLEASE HURRY!”
Taiya – {running full speed now just wanted to reach Primus and hopefully get away from the Fallen}
Fallen - “ Primus! HAHAHAHA Not in this world.”
Primus – {was so close, just a few more feet. He outstretched his hand and reached for her}
Taiya – {reached out too}
{but it would do little good as a wall of what looked like electricity mixed with glyphs pushed Primus back}
Taiya – {stopped dead} “ PRIMUS!!!”
Fallen – “Why if it isn’t my old creator! Come to wish his favorite creation a fine hello?”
Primus – {got back on his feet as sparks of red zapped around his body}
Fallen – {flicked his hand like he was swatting a bug and Primus fell again} “Isn’t it amazing Primus how powerful a dream can be!” {he continued to laugh}
Taiya – {bolted to get to Primus’s aid} “LEAVE HIM ALONE!” {got in front of him}
Fallen - ‘You are in no position to make commands.”{She was wrapped around by what looked like shadows and pulled away from Primus}
Taiya – {struggled with the apparition}
Primus – {struggled to get up} “Fallen leave her alone THIS IS BETWEEN YOU AND ME!”
Fallen- “YOUR SLAGGING RIGHT IT’S BETWEEN YOU AND ME! YOU’RE THE REASON I AM STUCK IN THE NEGATIVE VOID!”
Primus – “I had to stop you some way. You were out of control!”
Fallen – “So you gave NOVA THE POWER TO IMPRISON ME! {He sent another shock through Primus’s body} Using Alpha’s own programming.”
Primus – “You lost what it was to be a Prime.”
Taiya – {pulled herself free and tried one more time to run to Primus. She slipped past the Fallen and knelt down beside Primus and wrapped her arms around him} “FALLEN STOP! PLEASE LEAVE PRIMUS ALONE!”
Primus – {thinking this cannot possibly be a con. He got to his knees and gently moved Taiya back behind him and said quietly} ‘I will get you out of here okay.”
Fallen – “YOU WILL DO NO SUCH THING!”
{the more the Fallen grew angry the more the scenery change around them. All around them things started to turn into a barren wasteland}

Back with Victor he sat on the floor and just focused hard on the ciphers. Hoping this would be the night they could get the allspark and ending the never ending conflict in the universe. Victor as a Seraphim under stood that the war of the universe must stop, so together working with other races across the stars they all pulled their forces together to help put an end to the war of the eon. The key battle ground was Earth and with that the key to the future of the planet along with the other worlds laid in a lead mine in the middle of the prairie states.

Fallen – “You forgot us first you miserable excuse for a father!”
Primus – “I don’t know why you are so angry. What did I do to make you turn on your own kind?”
Fallen – “YOU LEFT US TO RUST AND ROT! AS SOON AS THE ALLSPARK TRANSWARPED TO ANOTHER WORLD YOU LEFT US!”
Primus – “I had to go, I had to give the newly created beings guidance.”
Fallen – “And now it has effected the humans, like the Seraphim’s, THAT’S JUST IT, AS SOON AS A NEW RACE IS CREATED THEY BECOME YOUR FAVORITE! WELL I AM DONE PLAYING INTO YOUR SLAG!” {spires blasted though the floor and restrained Primus}
Taiya – {finally getting so furious lost it} “YOU FRAGGING SLAGGER THIS IS MY MIND AND I ORDER YOU TO PUT HIM DOWN!!! NOOOOW!” {the spires started to fracture}
Fallen- {electricity shot through the ground and Taiya fell to her knees}
Primus – “Leave her out of this Fallen! You know why I had to put you away! YOU KNOW WHAT YOU DID! What you and my brother are planning!”
Fallen – ‘Unicron is a much better leader then you. HE DOESN’T FORGET HIS OWN! NOT LIKE YOU!”
Primus – “He is just using you to get the Allspark.” {he said as the spires started to buckle under the pressure}
Fallen – “LIES!”
Taiya – “ Primus isn’t lying…and he didn’t forget you….nor his first creations…he had no choice…you went too far.”
Fallen – “I think I know what to do to make you break.”
Taiya – “NO! PLEASE NO! NOT PRIMUS!”
Fallen – {raised his hand and clenched it as fractures appeared all over Primus as his metal bowed under invisible pressure. He released the spires and Primus’s damaged body fell to the floor}
Taiya – {she went so his side and cried} “I’m so sorry, PLEASE FORGIVE ME! Please be alright.”
Primus – “Don’t cry. I’ll find a way to get you out of here, some how.”{his body appeared to lose some of its mass as it became more translucent}
Fallen – “Filling her head with hope? How cruel when you know there is no hope. You should know that; YOU CANT GIVE ANYONE ANYTHING!”
Primus – {ignoring him} “If I can’t get you free, go to keys. He will help you.”
Taiya – {shook her head} “No, no he wont!”
Primus – “Yes he will. He won’t hurt you.”
Taiya – “IT’S NOT HIM! It’s the bots I worry about. They’ll tear me apart.”
Fallen – “That’s right, they will. YOU CAN’T TRUST A SERAPHIM AND YOUCANNOT TRUST A BOT! And I think you’ve done enough damage for today Primus.”
Primus – “Get the cube and bring it to keys do you understand me. YOU HAVE TO!”
Taiya – “BUT WHAT ABOUT US!? WHAT ABOUT BLACKOUT! I can’t do that to them.”
Primus – “I know your future and if you don’t give the cube to keys… you’ll die.”
Taiya – {in shock}
Fallen – “Now I think its time you left {he snatched her away from primus and with telekinetic abilities he lifted primus into the air and pushed him way back} amazing the force of the human imagination. If only us transformers had that ability. Oh well.”
Taiya – {reached out} “ PRRRRIIIIIMMMUUUSSS!”
Fallen – {laughing} “I AM THE ALL POWERFUL ONE HERE PRIMUS!”
Taiya – {Trying so hard to get free lacerations started to cover her arms} “GET UP PRIMUS PLEASE! DON’T LEAVE ME ALONE WITH HIM!”
Fallen – {more glyphs showed up as painful shocks surrounded primus.} “And you won’t even remember this conversation. So you can go back to that genetic freak you call an ally and tell him you failed!”
Primus – “I’M SORRY! JUST REMEMBER WHAT I SAID! GIVE VICTOR THE CUBE! Everything will be alright!” {he started to loose consciousness as he stumbled back through the portal}

On the opposite end victor was alarmed at the sight of Primus falling back through the portal beaten within an inch of complete disaster. By the looks of it if it wasn’t for his immortality he would be terminally in stasis. Victor went to his side with panic stricken face.

Victor – “ PRIMUS! Oh my, Primus please be okay!”
Primus – “What?...where?....”
Victor – “ Primus what happened? What happened!?”
Primus – “I don’t remember.”
Victor – “Did the fallen do this to you?”
Primus – “I can’t remember anything. The Fallen is getting stronger he erased my memory blank.”
Victor – {just looked like the world was falling around him} “Things just got a lot worse.”
Primus – “I am sorry victor, I failed.”
Victor – “Don’t say that, we haven’t failed. I will find the allspark, one way or another.”

The Fallen’s time was almost up and he knew it. He lifted her high into the air by the neck and sent signals all throughout her body.

Fallen – “And you wont remember either. But for now I have to go. And just to make sure he can’t come back. I will lock you away in my memories!”
Taiya – {screaming as searing pain shot through her}
{the area was brought back to Egypt and the Fallen threw her down into the middle of the machine down onto a platform. She fell unconscious}
Fallen – “And next time we meet I’ll make you pay. Because next time I will not show you mercy. Or your family. You will destroy them Taiya, and I will laugh as you are forced to bring me the cube to make it stop. And when your world is brought into darkness you will have no one to blame but yourself.”

His time was clearly up as his body became more ghost like and in one final act he sent out a barrier program to keep Primus out. When Taiya did come to she found herself alone and in a place where time seemed to stop. Stuck in a memory 4500 years old. When the day broke and the dream ended the vast majority of the symbols from before were gone but the ones on the face, back, and arms still remained. Only issue was they were even more bizarre then the first. Victor had to do something but what? What could help him locate the cube? He pondered and it became abundantly clear, a cons way might just be the only way.

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Victor Keys, Seraphim’s, and all related info to KeysTech, and Drabble story title given by ( C ) *victortky
Stephen ( C ) ~Sketchfan
Taiya ( C ) *Taiya001
ALL TRANSFORMERS DATA AND CHARACTERS ( C ) HASBRO
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Comments: 108

Taiya001 In reply to ??? [2009-12-19 03:43:56 +0000 UTC]

okay
The story is a chapter in a supply and demand fanfic
2. I lost my PHP and had to use a image placeholder for now so... no sam sparks....any questions?

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MixyKalaKO In reply to Taiya001 [2009-12-19 20:45:37 +0000 UTC]

eeeeeeeeee....
well.....

no?
jejeje

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VenusMoonstone [2009-12-03 08:20:26 +0000 UTC]

I wonder...... you know of Aurora Borealis Prime, my OC, who tamed The Fallen?
The situation as follows......

"She woke in a cage. The sadistic leader, Magnoragnorok, a corrupted Ultimate Dragkon, had kidnapped the girl as slave potencial.
She knew someway, she needed to escape. But how.......
A large clawed hand brushed the ground near her and her eyes met those of a being that even Optimus feared and had warned her: The Fallen.
He looked like scrap metal. Magnoragnorok had brought to life through the sadistic powers endowed to her by the Demon, by Lucifier. Bullying,harassing and generallly making fun of her foes was her idea of a fun time. The Fallen had been raped upon resurrection. And countless other misdeeds performed on him.
Repeatly,the Drakinkon Tyrant would toy with his mind, trying to kill his power and make it hers.
Aurora watched in barely contained sorrow at his pathetic shape, lying,waiting for release through death itself.
"What are looking at ?" a voice grated. Boldly she approached, taking her meager plateful of fuel to him.
"Here,eat. Regain your strentgh."
Amazed, he slowly,painfully chewed."

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Taiya001 In reply to VenusMoonstone [2009-12-03 21:00:37 +0000 UTC]

well It would be nice if my O.C could tame the fallen but it aint gonna happen. The only way the fallen can be tamed is with death. Good little plot you've got for your O.C though.

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VenusMoonstone In reply to Taiya001 [2009-12-04 05:29:05 +0000 UTC]

He, I know, but I'll tell you this. Magnoragnorok is in a direct contract with Lucifier. She wants The Fallen to be her lacky, and she knows he is connected to Unicron, so she asked Lucifier to fight and kill Unicron. Which he did.
And upon resurrecting The Fallen, she imediately proceeded to absorb his life force.

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Taiya001 In reply to VenusMoonstone [2009-12-04 20:08:36 +0000 UTC]

woah that is some major drama
but good tense drama

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VenusMoonstone In reply to Taiya001 [2009-12-05 07:58:11 +0000 UTC]

I know.
Wanna hear the rest?

After Magnoragnorok kidnapped Aurora and placed her and The Fallen together, Aurora shared her meals with The Fallen, pre-digesting so he, whose teeth had been punched out by Magnoragnorok, could eat it.
Soon, a frail little ten-year WMD(Project 666) made friends with one of the most powerfull beings in the cosmos.

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Taiya001 In reply to VenusMoonstone [2009-12-05 17:14:55 +0000 UTC]

oooo very intereging
I like your story

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VenusMoonstone In reply to Taiya001 [2009-12-05 18:24:59 +0000 UTC]

Would you like to draw the story in a comic?
Because you are more than welcome to.

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Taiya001 In reply to VenusMoonstone [2009-12-05 19:34:47 +0000 UTC]

I wish I could draw comics
but I can only draw pictures

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VenusMoonstone In reply to Taiya001 [2009-12-06 09:50:51 +0000 UTC]

So? Make a combo: Draw pictures; and write dialouge in speech bubbles.

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Klunk279 [2009-12-02 20:41:51 +0000 UTC]

the fallen's greatest weapon seems to be truth laced with deceit

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Taiya001 In reply to Klunk279 [2009-12-03 03:56:57 +0000 UTC]

wow thanks a bunch. ^_^
seems him no?

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ZivaTonyMcGee [2009-11-27 17:58:33 +0000 UTC]

wow that's way cool! keep it up!

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Taiya001 In reply to ZivaTonyMcGee [2009-11-28 00:02:42 +0000 UTC]

thank you

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ZivaTonyMcGee In reply to Taiya001 [2009-11-30 15:20:49 +0000 UTC]

yup

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victortky [2009-11-27 03:56:35 +0000 UTC]

Very amazing talk on the Seraphims, as well as the relevation about what primus and Victor did to help Taiya. Oh, Victor's Seraphim form makes him as large as a cybertronian. (about the size of Optimus Prime) His weapon is two long gun blades that can switch from sword more to gun mode. Love how you portray the fallen and how evil he was to taiya...and how he manipulated the dreams.

Looks like primus got his aft kicked by the fallen, so this universe's primus is weaker unless he has the allspark's power. Oh, everything Victor created so far does not use Sera's technology, it was what he perfected from his own design, except for a couple of technologies such as the mecha suits and the advanced artificial intelligences are based off his Seraphim's tech. However, he only used that in order to create a place in order to keep a look on what happened on Earth.

Victor has to see the cons? Oh dear, this one would be a toughie. That would be nice, although this would be nice to see a scene in which he would meet the cons with his autobot partner advocator. "cough" perhaps meeting Megatron? I presume he would tell megatron that it was his faction that pushed the Seraphims nearly to extinction in the Expansion wars.

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Taiya001 In reply to victortky [2010-01-07 23:59:27 +0000 UTC]

I can see Victor and Prime wanting to get Taiya out of this mess before the fallen can do more harm. I am so happy that the fallen is as evil as I want him to be. No way I am keeping that weak version of him in ROTF.

The fallen can control all that happens in Taiya's dream world as it is like a giant blank program. In her mind he can be as powerful as he wants to be. Primus was not expecting the Fallen to come up with programming strong enough to fight him off. I wanted to keep things down a par. I dont want to make any Mary Sue characters or give the apperance of such. hence why each character has flaws. [and why victor used some of his old homes technology]

He has to resort to con measures [i.e. torture, threats, minipulation] to get taiya to talk. this is going to push victor to choosing something beyond his kind and gentle soul. a form of a test if you will.

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victortky In reply to Taiya001 [2010-01-08 13:18:09 +0000 UTC]

indeed, however it doesn't work. I like this fallen, much better than the movie. I presume he has an undead army with him ready to come out of the dead universe to destroy the worlds.

Possibly, but you must know that primus is incredibly powerful...he could create the transformers and destroy worlds if he needs to. That sounds so bad for primus...which is a big problem. [Victor used the technology that he was given in order to reach balance with earth as he seeked for the allspark]]

I think a little of manipulation, but definitely no torture or threats. he would never do that. But desperate time call for desperate measures...

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Taiya001 In reply to victortky [2010-01-08 18:36:41 +0000 UTC]

SUPER SWEET! I want to give him that, I mean he is called the fallen after all I am not so sure about eh undead part, seeing as zombies are my biggest fear in terms of horror genres but large army of really strong soldiers HELL YEAH

true but in a dream all is possible.

For the security of Sera Prime and his new love, will he resort to it? That is a main question in times of dire measures and desperate times

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victortky In reply to Taiya001 [2010-01-09 05:00:19 +0000 UTC]

indeed, I am sure he would have thousands of undead drones and warriors at his command, ready to destroy the worlds at his command.

indeed, but Primus, as shown in the comics, actually was so powerful that he could reach out and destroy the fallen.

if you are thinking torture or threats, forget it. He won't do that, but in desperate times, he would only threaten a little. But to save all he wants to save, he would rather negotiate than duke it out, but that doesn't mean Divine won't fight fire with fire when the time comes.

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Taiya001 In reply to victortky [2010-01-11 02:45:41 +0000 UTC]

well I dont think they would be like organic zombies I guess so maybe extremely strong and resistant like zombies are like in our verse

With a body I can see that but being without his physical body means he is core programming. ^+^ at least thats how I justify it

Divine is innately pure and one act of evil does not remove all of that good. hence why I thought of this. I thought of putting that in to have Devine see life through a humans eyes. And having to step into the shoes of a human to save everything

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victortky In reply to Taiya001 [2010-01-11 15:46:58 +0000 UTC]

yeah, I think more like techno-organic zombies that were kind of transformerish and dangerous...yeah strong and resistant like.

Not exactly, Primus is quite strong in his astral form, which is his consciousness form without a body.

As he integrates into life on Earth, that's how he plans to reach balance with the world until his seraphim form is needed.

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Taiya001 In reply to victortky [2010-01-11 23:33:16 +0000 UTC]

to all but heck its my story so I can chose whatever I want right? Meh plot holes they suck but

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victortky In reply to Taiya001 [2010-01-12 05:16:58 +0000 UTC]

yeah, plot holes suck, but we may need an explaination as not to disappoint readers

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Taiya001 In reply to victortky [2010-01-12 15:09:34 +0000 UTC]

yeah but how bad can I make mine in comparison to the real thing? I want my story to be run by me. anyone that does their own off shoots is free to do anything they want. I just like to keep mine, Mine you know?

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victortky In reply to Taiya001 [2010-01-12 15:12:36 +0000 UTC]

I understand, it's fine by me as you are the creator of this. I do understand your point.

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Taiya001 In reply to victortky [2010-01-12 15:23:53 +0000 UTC]

thank you for seeing my view. Btw. I want to get down a short shot again about scientists and doctors that worked on NBE 1, is there any profession you would like to see in it giving their report to their studies?

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victortky In reply to Taiya001 [2010-01-12 15:25:32 +0000 UTC]

what kind of studies actually? can you tell it to me in detail?

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Taiya001 In reply to victortky [2010-01-12 22:42:21 +0000 UTC]

all types. psychology to find out megs personality
brain surgeons to anatomically analyze how megs brain is functioning
computer guys [several branches]...stuff like that
so basically all types to figure out the whole picture of what is NBE 1?

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victortky In reply to Taiya001 [2010-01-13 02:24:26 +0000 UTC]

I think more like studying how the cybertronian thinks and moves, as well as their weaponry technology and how their mechanical organs function.

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Taiya001 In reply to victortky [2010-01-13 03:18:21 +0000 UTC]

only issue with thought and how megs thinks. you cant directly study megs as sec seven kept him on ice. but they may be able to make generalizations about it. I probably should have said that this is a 10 yr into the past type writing my bad sorry Victor

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victortky In reply to Taiya001 [2010-01-13 06:34:44 +0000 UTC]

oh I see. Perhaps how the cybertronian processors work and how they store data-tracks perhaps?

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Taiya001 In reply to victortky [2010-01-13 17:13:27 +0000 UTC]

coolio thanks for your input

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victortky In reply to Taiya001 [2010-01-14 01:39:43 +0000 UTC]

and cybertronian anatomy perhaps?

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Taiya001 In reply to victortky [2010-01-14 02:50:54 +0000 UTC]

^+^ so far I have neurology, endocrinology ^+^ and kinesiology

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victortky In reply to Taiya001 [2010-01-14 03:10:46 +0000 UTC]

sounds nice. I like the concept, and perhaps pharmaceutical and military applications

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Taiya001 In reply to victortky [2010-01-14 18:08:45 +0000 UTC]

hum...not sure I am going that far down
but military covered with exert of weapons engineer

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victortky In reply to Taiya001 [2010-01-15 01:47:59 +0000 UTC]

reverse engineering of cybertronian tech

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Taiya001 In reply to victortky [2010-01-15 02:06:22 +0000 UTC]

got it down

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victortky In reply to Taiya001 [2010-01-15 02:21:16 +0000 UTC]

to enhance and advance human technology

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EerieIri [2009-11-27 03:35:37 +0000 UTC]

Beats the crap out of the fallen and huggles Taiya.

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Taiya001 In reply to EerieIri [2009-11-27 14:31:14 +0000 UTC]

O_O ^+^ THANKYOU ^_^ ^_^

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EerieIri In reply to Taiya001 [2009-11-27 19:21:04 +0000 UTC]

Welcome!

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SasaTheEvil [2009-11-26 21:48:10 +0000 UTC]

Whoa yeah the Fallen 8D XD
Cool pic!

Btw you're Artist's comment: *the longest one what i've ever see* XD

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Taiya001 In reply to SasaTheEvil [2009-11-28 00:04:02 +0000 UTC]

I just wish I could have drawn it. I had a computer crash and lost my php and now I have to buy a newer one because the original disk is lost. maybe one day

lol, I write a fanfic called Transformer Alterverse its my own take on the tf-multiverse {a story which is encouraged by devwatchers of mine}

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SasaTheEvil In reply to Taiya001 [2009-11-28 19:14:25 +0000 UTC]

Oh i know what u mean i has the same problem xD

Wow sound's really cool, please tell me if u uploud it.

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Taiya001 In reply to SasaTheEvil [2009-11-30 02:22:22 +0000 UTC]

i have a temp program now called gimp but it is still no photoshop

here is the table of contents
[link]
the story gets better so the first chapters are really bad

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SasaTheEvil In reply to Taiya001 [2009-11-30 20:16:38 +0000 UTC]

Ah that's okay xD
The first chap isn't so bad u know.
Thanx much i read the rest soon when i have the time.

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Taiya001 In reply to SasaTheEvil [2009-12-01 01:56:47 +0000 UTC]

wha? Really??? I am flattered you would even give my story a chance

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