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I wish I could role play on this one.Β
I'd grab that pokeball out of the air, and smash it to as many small pieces as I could. I'd do that to any pokeball.Β
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That seems a bit violent...
I wonder if that would kill the pokemon or release it into the wild?
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I meant before it went into the pokeball.Β
i wouldn't kill the PokΓ©mon if my life depended on it.Β
Im smashing the pokeball because it's nothing more than a prison.Β
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Oh! Sorry didin't know what you meant. You gotta lot of pokeballs to smash then.
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Yeah.
It's one of the reasons why I despise pokemon trainers. They just sicken me and my friend to our kores.Β
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Yay comics! I think that's a great thing to try as an artist since they are a very good way to improve. Speaking of good ways to improve- I'm from ProjectComment!
The thing that I notice immediately as well done is the glowing Chikorita in the last panel, as well as the grassy background behind it. The glow looks very real and stands out from the rest of the comic. The biggest problem is probably the anatomy. In the first panel, the big eyes are distracting. Big eyes are not a bad thing and a common stylistic choice, but it looks strange with the small linear head. I recommend some space between the eyes or a bigger head. Another thing about the anatomy is the hands. In the second panel, they look pretty good. I think the problem is drawing them attached and smaller. Hands are the worst but try to sketch them bigger and then adjust the size before you line.Β
In the fourth panel, the pose is a bit awkward, the arm just seems to "hang" there. Try to bend the arms in a more realistic way: find references or make the pose yourself.Β
One thing that I like a lot is the shading. You seem to know where to put it very well and if you train a bit on your anatomy, you could make for a very skilled artist. In fact, the colors and backgrounds are very appealing to me. The gradient backgrounds, in the beginning, are a bitΒ of a shame in that regard. I'd really like to see you draw more backs.Β
Another small thing, the text balloons. I think depending on the mood you're trying to set. I'm personally not a fan of perfect balloons in hatchy styles, try to draw over the text and balloon in another layer. Perhaps make 'em a bit bigger too, so it's easier to read them.Β
Overall, just keep going and try a few things out. Don't quit your comic, it's something fun to look back to when you are older.Β
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The grass has two layers on top of it with darkening and lighting filters and I use a grass brush. The glow is just a filtered gradient.
Yeah my anatomy isn't great. Part of why I started this comic was for practice. I'd say I complain about hands the most but I do that for the entire body. Lol. I'm trying to think back as to why I didn't use a ref for the fourth panel. I dunno, past me can be scattered brained at times.
The thing about shading is usually I wing it. Find the light source and just go with what feels right. I copy the layer and blur it then I add gradient layers on top of the characters. I use this type of shading for my animations.
I spam gradients and filters a lot. Can't help myself but I do admit the background is really lackluster. I think I'm rushing it to much. Heck they're fighting in a forest I didn't even add the trees.
I'm pretty new to the whole text bubble thing and my hand writing is terrible. I thought it looked a bit small. I'll try out some stuff.
I love reading my old fanfics so I'll probably love reading this again.
Thanks for the critique and sorry in advance for the long response. Hope you have a lovely day.
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Thank you for taking it into consideration. Good art career going forwards!Β Β
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but... isn't Silver supposed to have a Totodile?
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This Sliver is different from the canon one. There is many reasons why I picked Chikorita; To make the game harder, having not seen many people pick this starter and my headcanons.
I know he had a Totodile in canon I just like seeing him with a Chikorita.
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True enough (so Crystal will have the Totodile? Will she even appear?). Anyway, I'd like to see what happen next if Silver's the main protagonist (truth me told, it's his story with his father than caught my attention, I'd love to see how you do that, or what you'll do)
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I didn't really think about her to be honest. :/ I can't remember if you run into her in the remakes. I'll try to get her in, no promises though, although you will see that Totodile at some point.
I have plans and answers to things that will happen but for the most part I'm on this ride as well. In the game front a lot of stuff happened unexpectedly, I'm using Pokemon I've never expected, an egg hatched sooner then I thought it would...
I already had an idea on what Sliver's backstory is but that will be told sometime after the burned tower chapter, which is a very important chapter btw. I can't wait to get there.
Have a nice day Emi.
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Wait, you're basing this comic on the game? Like, a game you're (currently) playing?
I can't wait to get to that chapter (with Silver's backstory) either. I'm sure it's gonna be greatΒ Β
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Yes this is based on my Nuzlocke run. And before you ask a Nuzlocke is a challenge where you catch the first Pokemon on every route and if anyone faints they are considered dead and you can't use them anymore. It's very tense.
I sure hope so.
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(don't you worry, I know what a Nuzlocke is, I just never had the heart to do one myself, I can't bear the idea of those little creatures dying 
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I love nuzlocke comics but they always hurt at some point.
I already almost had a heart attack when I almost lost someone. It always gets you when you least expect it.
Mostly I play pokemon cautiously anyway but things can still happen.
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Thank you. I love using my star brush for that n stuff.
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Would you like some criticism?
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Why not. I think this doesin't look too good in my opinion. :/
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I would suggest studying heads a bit more.
The chin and forehead specifically.
When drawing hair, it should tend to fluff and flow from a centerpoint.
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Always had problems with the head and jaw. I outta get started on another monotonous practice page soon. I have a full page of nothing but legs somewhere in my room, it's kinda weird out of context. Lol.
Yeah I kinda forgot about that point of advice about hair. :/
Man I really wish I drew more humans when I was little. Oh well.
Thanks for the advise man.
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Hey, it's never too lake to start! the animals you draw look great.
My animals would look just as weird as your humans!
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I guess it's all time and practice. My animals looked bad at first but that was a long time ago. I'll keep level grinding to the top. Heh.
Hope you have a nice night/day pal.
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keep up the grind, bro!
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